I hope it either A) Simply nicks her skin because her OP skull/muscles can't be cut by anything lesser than artifacts, in reaction to which she'll yawn and ask "That's it?" or similar or B) somehow she uses the adoption contract warded to hell and back as a shield in a symbolic act of the ties of family protecting her from all.
It could also be that Cadence/Celestia/Shinning get hurt protecting her, but it's most likely Shinning proves his talent by protecting them with a barrier on the nick of time.
The first one would he hilarious though, so I'm hoping for it
Edit: It makes me extremely happy that chapters are coming out as fast as they are
Nice chapter, I honestly like the idea of Fleur being interesting with Shining Armor and I think it might me much less stressful for him if she hangs out with him where he wouldn't be in so much pressure to deal with Sunset and cadence and she isn't really that involved with the other two alicorns. Heck I even thing that Cadence might actually try to push Shining toward her if it means she could have Sunset all to herself with how increasingly uninterested she is of him. Still I would have though that Fleur would have seen some of shining armor in Fancy Pants with how similar they are. I wonder where is pinky's at in the moment in all of this?
“I don’t care if you’ve got Princess Celestia Herself out there!” Velvet yelled through the door. “Tell whomever it is to plop their plump plot down and take a number!”
With a line like that, it had better be Princess Celestia herself out there. With her enhanced alicorn hearing and all.
Delicious cliffhanger! But considering Sunset's powers and abilities, I honestly don't think even if Hard Line rammed that sword into her brain that it would kill her. She has become connected to Harmony itself.
Looking forward to more! You write such deliciously deep and intricate stories. I love the personality and DEPTH you put into the ponies. The Twilight Velvet section was amazing. And I really expect Celestia is going to be employing her in the near future... Velvet is a wonderful mother and mare. And would make a great Adviser to Celestia... who clearly needs some of those practiced twilight pep talks herself considering how much alike she and Sunset are. Celly needs to realize... she didn't fail as bad as she thinks she did. She is a wonderful mother and yes, she had failings, but they were well intentioned ones. She has some healing yet to do.
Also I wonder if Nightmare Moon is going to get exposed over this... Cadance's talk to Tia should have raised some flags in her mind. Nightmares especially. She needs to teach Sunset how to Dream Ward herself.
Also, I love the adapted Disney songs. Sooo fit in perfectly.
1) The sword shatters on Sunset, because Sunset is OP as all hell.
2) Celetia gets hurt/killed by getting in the way and the newly crowned Sunset, who just became crown princess less then an hour ago is now the big pony once again.
3) Shining proves himself and his newfound magic power due to the growth potion and tosses a barrier to strong for a political appointeeike Hardline to ever hope to brake.
4) Twi and friends get their rainboom moment right now, and their/her surge does things.
5) Paranoid Cadence uses that crystal love magi. She has been practicing and saves Sunset.
Or any combination of the above, perhaps even all of them.
That said, very nice chapter! Had quite a few laughs, tomorrow is moving day, so I needed them.
This is kind of a mean cliffhanger. It makes me hope the next chapter is planned to come out soon before this chapter loses all of its dramatic effect and I have that moment of, “What’s happening again? Oh ya, there was an assassination attempt on Celestia’s daughter and even if they succeed (I doubt they will) their entire house is dead.”
Don't remember when I watched this movie last but I still recognized the song even before I finished the first line. Now I have to reread the whole chapter if the talking parts also fit in the song.
Well if I isn't my favorite thing in the world, a cliffhanger right at a CRITICAL MOMENT IN THE STORY DARNIT I'M SO UNSATISFIED I mean WOO the adoption and coronation is over and happy feelings and mama sparkle-butt gives a good wisdom. I'm awaiting rhe next chapter EAGERLY
Not really an effective cliffhanger, I'm not worried at all, Sunset will be fine. The only question now is how will this assassination plot fail and who exactly was screaming "No" at the end assuming it was a single character. I'm guessing it's Twilight who is screaming, I would not be surprised at all if this is where she unleashes a magical surge and gets her Cutie Mark (perhaps somehow still managing to hatch Spike) and while very unlikely I think it would be quite interesting if during said surge the fact that this time it is powered by the Magic of Friendship it could cause her to ascend several years early. hope the next chapter comes out soon.
Such wonderful character building, the singing (which I'm guessing Sunset will do as she absolutely murders Hard Line and his parents), new intrigue with Fleur that reminds the reader the story is still going. I love it! But not the cliffhanger! I'm hoping for some good old fashioned violence in the next chapter.
Personally, I don't get why everyone's so sure Sunset will be perfectly okay. I mean, I severely doubt she's going to die, she is the main character after all, Nightmare Moon wouldn't just send in her assassin with a normal sword. Especially if this sword is apparently worthy of being given as a gift to a newly coronated princess by one of the highest noble houses in all the land.
I mean, he's still going to be a smear on the ground very shortly, but everyone here in the comments is being pretty damn silly.
It's because I had to cut what I originally wrote in half
Well, okay, cut off the first two-thirds and post that as a chapter on its own while I finished up the other 10k+ since the cliche "gun gets fired at the very end of the episode" seemed a good place to put the break.
“Well it’s over. Now, let’s go see out friends and get you ready for your coronation,”
our ________
Velvet told her firmly. She wasn’t about to let Sunset start being herself up again.
beating __________
Velvet finished with the one hoof and moved on to the last. “So, from what I gather, you’ve had two bad experiences as a princes and...how many good? Ten? Fifteen?” she asked before finishing up and trotting back around to Sunset’s front side. “An even twenty?”
princess ___________
Velvet smiled at her. Well, that’s good to hear.”
Needs beginning " marks. _____________
She had a few songs sung to he by her Ma and Pa over the years, but none of them were such a hullabalu as the one she had seen as the one that started up on her way back from breakfast.
her _____________
“I thought it better than telling them we were deciding what they would be what they were wearing to the coronation,”
Unlike the ponies in Canterlot, they had no idea just what Sunset was like and if the reports were to be believed, the southern ponies the southern ponies looked very favorably on Sunset thanks to her actions as Empress.
delete ______________
Applejack looked back at her mother. “Do I have to, Ma?”
Ah _________
Cadance’s eyes widened. Speech?” she asked before looking over to the bigger pony. “What speech?”
So...since Blue Line just unintentionally hung himself by stating that Hard Line's 'gift' was from their family, AND that Hard Line's gift counted as coming from the guard as a whole...looks like we have the perfect excuse for a purging of any other potentially treasonous idiots.
I was going to chime in about how I think Sunset "OP2THEMAX" Shimmer is going to bulldoze her way though with sheer power and stubborness (though I harbored a hidden doubt as I can't believe that NMM would throw away her pawn in an attack that had no chance at all of succeeding, despite her insanity), but then, as I started reading the comments, I found that the wonderful people in the comments section had oodles and oodles of perfectly plausible ways it could go beyond my limited imaginings.
I'm positively vibrating in anticipation for the next chapter, for however it may go I know that I will be entertained.
9073762 I haven't watched Aladdin in, gosh, more than a decade, but now I have a powerful urge to do so. Such a good series of movies.
Great chapter, it never felt drawn out and kept the pacing just right for such a long chapter, but then I expect nothing less. Now the question I never saw anyone ask, who is the one actually screaming "NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO"? Is it Celestia fearing for her newly adopted daughter? Cadence for her marefriend? Shinging/Twilight at seeing someone so close to them attack? Sunset out of reaction? Another pony entirely? I saw a comment mentioning a miss from the mirror spell, I'd like to think instead of the eye like he intents he gets Sunset in the leg or something, where the blade gets stuck and Sunset go's apest on him and stabs him with his own knife. Eather way I hope we get to see how this turns out soon.
going by Rainbow's words in the last epilogue of Sunset Reset, it's possible that Velvet is the one who gets hurt/killed here and not Celestia, maybe even Night Light too.
Life for life, Bright Mac and Pear Butter are alive do to Sunset, Twilight and Shining might just loose their parents for the same.
And who are you, the proud lord said, That I must bow so low? Only a cat of a different coat, That's all the truth I know. In a coat of gold or a coat of red, A lion still has claws, And mine are long and sharp, my lord, As long and sharp as yours. And so he spoke, and so he spoke, That lord of Castamere, But now the rains weep o'er his hall, With no one there to hear. Yes now the rains weep o'er his hall, And not a soul to hear.
Time to go Tywin Lannister on a certain somepony‘s ass!
Pretty sure I know what will happen next.
Why did you make the chapters so long?
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Why do you repeatedly ask pointless questions on EVERY fic?
I hope it either A) Simply nicks her skin because her OP skull/muscles can't be cut by anything lesser than artifacts, in reaction to which she'll yawn and ask "That's it?" or similar or B) somehow she uses the adoption contract warded to hell and back as a shield in a symbolic act of the ties of family protecting her from all.
It could also be that Cadence/Celestia/Shinning get hurt protecting her, but it's most likely Shinning proves his talent by protecting them with a barrier on the nick of time.
The first one would he hilarious though, so I'm hoping for it
Edit: It makes me extremely happy that chapters are coming out as fast as they are
Oo, Sunset stories, let's hope this one is good.
Nice chapter, I honestly like the idea of Fleur being interesting with Shining Armor and I think it might me much less stressful for him if she hangs out with him where he wouldn't be in so much pressure to deal with Sunset and cadence and she isn't really that involved with the other two alicorns. Heck I even thing that Cadence might actually try to push Shining toward her if it means she could have Sunset all to herself with how increasingly uninterested she is of him. Still I would have though that Fleur would have seen some of shining armor in Fancy Pants with how similar they are. I wonder where is pinky's at in the moment in all of this?
Holy shit!!!! Love the song though out. Lol shinning armor was smart to get his mom, must have recognized what was happening.
Well then....
The scene between Sunset and Twilight the Elder was very cute.
As for Hard Line, I hope he enjoys the few seconds of life he has left. He’ll be nothing more than a pile of ashes once Sunset incinerates him.
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Or the sword shatters like the bullets in Superman Returns.
I hate cliffhangers. I really do hate them.
With a line like that, it had better be Princess Celestia herself out there. With her enhanced alicorn hearing and all.
I think she'd be quite amused, honestly!
My guess is that the privacy spell makes him miss becuse of the minor displacement of aperance.
I expect it to go something like this.
I expect Shining Armour to be there in the way or possibly Celestia. Regardless, things will get interesting.
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i was thinking more along the lines of the sword being bit like in this.
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Delicious cliffhanger! But considering Sunset's powers and abilities, I honestly don't think even if Hard Line rammed that sword into her brain that it would kill her. She has become connected to Harmony itself.
Looking forward to more! You write such deliciously deep and intricate stories. I love the personality and DEPTH you put into the ponies. The Twilight Velvet section was amazing. And I really expect Celestia is going to be employing her in the near future... Velvet is a wonderful mother and mare. And would make a great Adviser to Celestia... who clearly needs some of those practiced twilight pep talks herself considering how much alike she and Sunset are. Celly needs to realize... she didn't fail as bad as she thinks she did. She is a wonderful mother and yes, she had failings, but they were well intentioned ones. She has some healing yet to do.
Also I wonder if Nightmare Moon is going to get exposed over this... Cadance's talk to Tia should have raised some flags in her mind. Nightmares especially. She needs to teach Sunset how to Dream Ward herself.
Also, I love the adapted Disney songs. Sooo fit in perfectly.
...I just hope Sunset never Lets It Go...
Thanks again! Your writing is a treasure!
Five possible endings to this attack.
1) The sword shatters on Sunset, because Sunset is OP as all hell.
2) Celetia gets hurt/killed by getting in the way and the newly crowned Sunset, who just became crown princess less then an hour ago is now the big pony once again.
3) Shining proves himself and his newfound magic power due to the growth potion and tosses a barrier to strong for a political appointeeike Hardline to ever hope to brake.
4) Twi and friends get their rainboom moment right now, and their/her surge does things.
5) Paranoid Cadence uses that crystal love magi. She has been practicing and saves Sunset.
Or any combination of the above, perhaps even all of them.
That said, very nice chapter! Had quite a few laughs, tomorrow is moving day, so I needed them.
This is kind of a mean cliffhanger. It makes me hope the next chapter is planned to come out soon before this chapter loses all of its dramatic effect and I have that moment of, “What’s happening again? Oh ya, there was an assassination attempt on Celestia’s daughter and even if they succeed (I doubt they will) their entire house is dead.”
That stupid bucker is about to get mulched! The only question is ‘by whom?’
Don't remember when I watched this movie last but I still recognized the song even before I finished the first line. Now I have to reread the whole chapter if the talking parts also fit in the song.
Well if I isn't my favorite thing in the world, a cliffhanger right at a CRITICAL MOMENT IN THE STORY DARNIT I'M SO UNSATISFIED
I mean WOO the adoption and coronation is over and happy feelings and mama sparkle-butt gives a good wisdom.
I'm awaiting rhe next chapter EAGERLY
For being called Crooked she has a very straight approach to politics.
Not really an effective cliffhanger, I'm not worried at all, Sunset will be fine. The only question now is how will this assassination plot fail and who exactly was screaming "No" at the end assuming it was a single character. I'm guessing it's Twilight who is screaming, I would not be surprised at all if this is where she unleashes a magical surge and gets her Cutie Mark (perhaps somehow still managing to hatch Spike) and while very unlikely I think it would be quite interesting if during said surge the fact that this time it is powered by the Magic of Friendship it could cause her to ascend several years early. hope the next chapter comes out soon.
Egads, pleeeheheeeease don't make us wait long after such a cliffhanger.
...
Well, somepony just ended their entire line. Enjoy the rest of your pitiful existence in Tartarus.
And roughly five seconds later, everypony in the room besides Hard Line realizes that he has made a terrible mistake.
Such wonderful character building, the singing (which I'm guessing Sunset will do as she absolutely murders Hard Line and his parents), new intrigue with Fleur that reminds the reader the story is still going. I love it! But not the cliffhanger! I'm hoping for some good old fashioned violence in the next chapter.
Personally, I don't get why everyone's so sure Sunset will be perfectly okay. I mean, I severely doubt she's going to die, she is the main character after all, Nightmare Moon wouldn't just send in her assassin with a normal sword. Especially if this sword is apparently worthy of being given as a gift to a newly coronated princess by one of the highest noble houses in all the land.
I mean, he's still going to be a smear on the ground very shortly, but everyone here in the comments is being pretty damn silly.
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They probably do it to make sure that they aren't short
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Nope!
It's because I had to cut what I originally wrote in half
Well, okay, cut off the first two-thirds and post that as a chapter on its own while I finished up the other 10k+ since the cliche "gun gets fired at the very end of the episode" seemed a good place to put the break.
our
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beating
__________
princess
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Needs beginning " marks.
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her
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delete
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Ah
_________
Speech
___________
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Seconded.
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I really hope it's numbers 3 and 4. That'd be epic.
So...since Blue Line just unintentionally hung himself by stating that Hard Line's 'gift' was from their family, AND that Hard Line's gift counted as coming from the guard as a whole...looks like we have the perfect excuse for a purging of any other potentially treasonous idiots.
I was going to chime in about how I think Sunset "OP2THEMAX" Shimmer is going to bulldoze her way though with sheer power and stubborness (though I harbored a hidden doubt as I can't believe that NMM would throw away her pawn in an attack that had no chance at all of succeeding, despite her insanity), but then, as I started reading the comments, I found that the wonderful people in the comments section had oodles and oodles of perfectly plausible ways it could go beyond my limited imaginings.
I'm positively vibrating in anticipation for the next chapter, for however it may go I know that I will be entertained.
9073762
I haven't watched Aladdin in, gosh, more than a decade, but now I have a powerful urge to do so. Such a good series of movies.
Great chapter, it never felt drawn out and kept the pacing just right for such a long chapter, but then I expect nothing less.
Now the question I never saw anyone ask, who is the one actually screaming "NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO"?
Is it Celestia fearing for her newly adopted daughter?
Cadence for her marefriend?
Shinging/Twilight at seeing someone so close to them attack?
Sunset out of reaction?
Another pony entirely?
I saw a comment mentioning a miss from the mirror spell, I'd like to think instead of the eye like he intents he gets Sunset in the leg or something, where the blade gets stuck and Sunset go's apest on him and stabs him with his own knife.
Eather way I hope we get to see how this turns out soon.
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Maybe so the readers can enjoy the character development and plot?
My hypothesis of what will happen to Hard Line:
1. Sunset stops him somehow.
2. Sunset boops him hard enough to send him flying all the way to Yakyakistan.
going by Rainbow's words in the last epilogue of Sunset Reset, it's possible that Velvet is the one who gets hurt/killed here and not Celestia, maybe even Night Light too.
Life for life, Bright Mac and Pear Butter are alive do to Sunset, Twilight and Shining might just loose their parents for the same.
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Agreed
He's a dead man.
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She was
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Poor yaks
If course you cliff hanger it.
"House of Mouse" yeah I caught that one
And who are you, the proud lord said,
That I must bow so low?
Only a cat of a different coat,
That's all the truth I know.
In a coat of gold or a coat of red,
A lion still has claws,
And mine are long and sharp, my lord,
As long and sharp as yours.
And so he spoke, and so he spoke,
That lord of Castamere,
But now the rains weep o'er his hall,
With no one there to hear.
Yes now the rains weep o'er his hall,
And not a soul to hear.
Time to go Tywin Lannister on a certain somepony‘s ass!
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Nah. Hard Line would probably insult the yaks and they would beat the crap outta him.
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The Rains of Castamare
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I mean they have deal with him at all before pummeled to death.
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Then they would have to disinfect themselves afterwards.