• Published 16th Nov 2017
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A Week in the Winter Storm - Samuel-Neocros



A snow storm hit, and it won't calm down fully until the end of the week. Oh well, at least Samneo and Rainbow Dash have the entire week to themselves, inside Neo's cabin!

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Alone Together

The snow was hitting the ground hard, showing it was too intense to go out with any snow gear. Night was slowly drawing near, and it was almost time for Luna to raise the moon and assume her nightly duties. Meanwhile in a small cabin on the southwestern edge of town, a water dragon and pegasus cuddled next to a roaring hot fire with mugs of steaming hot cocoa. Rainbow Dash would’ve froze had it not been for Samneo. They were spending the winter in his cabin.

The water dragon had the body shape of Ember the Dragon Princess, but his tail was as long as his body, he had orange horns on the side of his head, and green spikes on his back, a small one on the top of his forehead, and two more on the back of his neck, three large ones on his back, and the rest were small and went down his tail. His elbows had small sharp points, but the points were the same color as his body, he had dark azure scales, there was a bit of brown hair at the tip of his tail, looking almost like fire, like Charmander, he had long flowing hair with opal irises, and he had no color for his claws and toes. He was without a doubt different from all the other dragons.

Though they weren’t at that level in their relationship, they’d express their love by spending some time together, weather it’s just the two of them staring at the stars, or just talking, their relationship is still going strong. Rainbow sat next to Sam, the fire crackling as the two drank hot cocoa. It was the best drink he had at the moment, thanks to a recipe from Cadence. The rainbow mare looked over at the dragon next to her. He seemed to be lost in thought, being purely focused on something.

“Sam?” She asked.

He blinked a couple of times, before he looked over at the Pegasus.

“Hmn?”

“What’re you thinking about?” She questioned him.

Instead of giving an answer, he just trailed off and stared at the floor. She looked at him, waiting for an answer. He sighed.

“I really don’t know...” He lied.

Rainbow knew that something was wrong, judging from his voice, he sounded like this when he was attempting to bail. She knew that when he doesn’t like to talk when he was in that state of mind, so it’s best not to press him for answers. She then looked back to the fire.

“So you excited for Hearth’s warming?”

He heard her, knowing this fact. Winter was his favorite season, right next to Summer and Spring. In his mind, he felt perfectly comfortable staying indoors, where he could eat, sleep, and do all the things he liked. He was concerned for Rainbow, the storm wouldn’t let up until Saturday. In all honesty, it felt as if he was gifted this by Celestia.

“Well it’s almost time for bed, do you wanna do anything before I hit the hay?” She asked suddenly, interrupting his thoughts. He glanced over to her. She looked so majestic with the fire reflecting off her eyes.

The heart was telling him to show her the song that he had made.

But his mind was telling him to keep silent, since the song he’s made is made up of raw power, so either it’ll sooth her into his touch, or it will scratch her, and leave a permanent scar. Then that would place him on the same level as Chrysalis when it came to hurting ponies.

He learned first hand how painful it is to see your friend being captured by that sadistic witch. Samneo wouldn’t mind letting his more evil side take advantage of that corrupted insect.

“Uhm... I have something, for you.” He said.

Rainbow took a sip of her cocoa, before she stared into his eyes. He glanced back to her, eyes staring into her soul. Rainbow got goosebumps as her amethyst eyes stared back into his opal ones.

“You have something for me?”

“I made a song, for you.” He said, rather fast actually. Rainbow Dash blinked at what he just said.

“You’ve made a song for me?” Rainbow asked. He sighed again.

“It’s vary special to me, and you. The song is more of a poem now that I think about it.. but anyway, could you care to listen?” He asked.

Rainbow smiled, nodding. Sam then got up, and walked over to the window. The window was large, and had a little platform at the bottom, that was the same length as the window, so anypony could sit down if they wanted. He sat down next to the window, on the platform. He gestured Dash to come over, and sit on his lap.

Rainbow was confused by this action. But she went along with it anyway. Rainbow proceeded to sit down on his lap, getting comfortable as he loomed over her softly. His arms wrapped around her, hugging her to his chest. She was surprised by this move. He pressed his chin on top of her head. Rainbow smiled as she was held by him, she never felt him hold her before, only when he hugged her. Sam asked her to turn around to face him. She nodded, before she then turned around, facing his chest. He pulled her head back softly, and gave her a soft kiss on the cheek, being ever so gentle with his actions. She looked up, past him, she noticed the engravings on his horns were glowing a soft blue, the same color as her body.

Rainbow smiled brightly, and then she faced her lover. Sam kissed her on the lips, she moaned into the kiss in response. Closing her eyes, she felt him pull her closer, keeping his lips locked with hers. He pulled away, smiling at her.

Then he begun to sing to her. She was surprised at how soft his voice became in this moment...

I’ve tried to be, more than me, but I failed so much, and failed to bring happiness.
But with you here, I have somepony to protect, to love, and to keep Safe.

Rainbow listened carefully, hearing his song. To tell the truth, Samneo had never sung before, and you could tell that this was his first song. But for a starter, besides the awkward pause between happiness and but, he was okay.

You loyalty.. and your bond with your friends, is enough for my heart,
To become a Dragon, of the Ocean’s Great Waves...

Sam just left it there, it felt complete, at least for him it was complete. Sam looked down at the mare, she turned slightly, looking up at him.

“Is that it?” She asked.

“Well... yes, but.. there might be more lyrics...” He replied. He then whispered: “Go ahead and close your eyes..”

Rainbow nodded, and closed her eyes. Accepting his peaceful song.

My soul was ripped, and beaten, and abused, by those around me...
My race was against me, my life was against me, and evil was in the air...
I thought the darkness would win, but then a Rainbow dawned upon my broken soul.
Your Love filled me with the world’s colors, and you bring air, and freedom to my lungs.

Rainbow begun to feel a bit sleepy, and his song only increased her chance of falling asleep. She smiled as he continued his song, before he got up suddenly, holding her in his arms. Her half-lidded gaze landing onto his neck as she was being carried bridal style.

I was free from the darkness, and in the air, with you, and the world of Equestria.
Friendship and Magic became my virtues, the world of Equestria is my home, and I’m with you.

He carried her into his room. Opening the bedroom door with his tail, the two entered the room. It was dark, with the moon was shining through the window. It was a beautiful setting. Rainbow was half asleep, but she found herself waking when he laid her down in bed. He whispered his song this time.

You loyalty.. and your bond with your friends, is enough for my heart,
To become a Dragon, of the Ocean’s Great Waves...

Samneo laid down next to her, pulling the Pegasus up to him. Her hooves wrapped around his neck. She was lying on top of him, and was smiling at him.

“Neo.. that was awesome!” She said. Neo bite the inside of his lips.

“I did good?”

“Yeah! I almost fell asleep hearing that..” Rainbow said. Samneo smiled, though it was hard to see in the darkness. Rainbow enjoyed his little song. Though it was just a snip bit, it was good, at least in her eyes and ears. Neo held the little pony in his arms, happy to feel her warm, fuzzy body pressed up to his scaly one. His heart melted as she held him close. His tail slithered up to her legs, and coiling her legs together. He rolled them over to the side. Rainbow stared intently into his eyes. “See ya in the morning.”

Uh... maybe there was more than just cocoa in those drinks... He thought, reacting to her last line, sounding almost out of character for her. Sam’s thoughts were interrupted when Dash pressed her face to his chest. He looked down at her, she looked so peaceful snuggling his chest, her hooves were pressed to his body as well. He loosened his grip on her legs, and just simply let his knee get between her legs, being careful not to invade her space. He changed his mind rather quickly, hearing a moan from her, so Neo just kept his knees to himself, and just used his arms to help her get closer.

“Mmmh...” She sighed. His arms wrapped around her tightly, but also softly. He was gentle with his actions as she slept in his arms. Samneo was happy to have such a wonderful mare as a girlfriend.

After a few minutes, it was clear that Rainbow was getting a bit cold. She opened her eyes slowly, burring. Even with the blanket on, it’ll take a bit more for her to warm up. The Pegasus looked up at Samneo, wondering if he’s responsible for the chilling atmosphere--Perhaps he is...

He had one eye opened, staring at the moonlight from outside. He noticed shuffling on his chest, so he glanced down at the pony in his arms, looking at her in the darkness.

“Sam? You awake?”

“Yeah, I am.” He muttered. Rainbow wiggled in his grasp uncomfortably. “Need some space?”

“Uhm... no, it’s just that, you’re cold.” She said. Neo blinked, before he figured the problem.

“... I’m doing the freezing, I was too hot, so I changed my body to cool me. But it looks like you don’t like it, at all.” He whispered the last part sheepishly. Rainbow was rather mind boggled at what he just said.

“You can change your body temperature?”

He tried his best not to smile. He was a strange person, wasn’t he?

“Yeah, I can. I’m able to change my body to warm or cool, at will. I can warm up if you wish.”

“Yeah please.”

His body suddenly warmed up. Rainbow Dash gasped at the sudden warmth, but welcomed it nonetheless. She nuzzled into his chest. His arms wrapped around her, combined with his tail neatly wrapped softly around her legs, as well as their body heat bouncing off the sheets, it was making them both tired.

“Mmm...” She kept her muzzle on the center of his chest, feeling his heartbeats as well as his breathing. This was perfect in her eyes. Before she fell asleep, she muttered: “Thanks... this is awesome...”

Sam smiled at her appreciation. He then thought about what they will do tomorrow, at least, what he hopes to do the next morning...

Tomorrow, they’ll just stay in bed, keeping each other company.

And so they did.

~Fin~

Author's Note:

Sorry if this came out cheap, but it's the best I can offer. It looks good, in my eyes. I had to revision it a few times, but I finally got the fic I thought of!

Comments ( 49 )
Comment posted by Samuel-Neocros deleted Mar 22nd, 2019
Comment posted by Samuel-Neocros deleted Mar 22nd, 2019

Not to bad I only reed this fan fic because I was bored waiting for my school to start if you haven’t been my follower I would have probably never reed or fund this story

Review posted on the Reviewers Cafe. You can read it right now!

9415274
Nice Review! I agree that the story doesn’t have much progression, or lack there of. However, I can’t exactly complain since this story isn’t canon...

...

But now that you mentioned the canon continuity in the last paragraph in your review... that has me thinking... :trixieshiftleft:

Not sure if I will make this story canon to the official canon, but if I were to do that. I’d have to make a remake of this, since A week in the winter storm seems outdated--at least for my standards.

As for the idea of the song, originally--when I made the story--I didn’t think of it much, but now that you brought the whole “build-up of this short story from the canon continuity”, I’m now in the middle of thinking and brain-storming...

I'm gonna do an audio version of this story.

9443208
Oh thank you!! I’m honored! :twilightsmile:

9444178
You're welcome

9444876
Btw, where’s your youtube channel again?

9521677
YouTube channel is called ArtistFire

9522230
Thanks!

As for your latest video: There’s no need to apologize for lack of uploads. I do hope you’re alright :twilightsmile:

I’ve been in some dark times myself...

9522967
I’m fine don’t worry

9523699
Uhm... I’m not sure if I should be asking this at this time but...

Uh... when’s the audio reading...?

9663471
What do you mean I don't understand?


I'm not going to do an audio reading, I may speak about it one day but not today, maybe I'll do a review of the story!

Comment posted by Artist deleted Jun 5th, 2019

9663516
I wasn’t saying you don’t understand, I was just wondering if you were doing the reading. And seeing that you might not, I now know...

9664254
Do any review of the story

9664256
I... I guess... it’s fine, do the review

9664263
it’s okay, it’s fine

Very nice short piece of fluff. It is clear you have enjoyed writing this :twilightsmile: There are some typos and roughly worded sentences that could be adjusted for better flow and enjoyment, but that’s about it. While there are also some recurring errors in direct speech that an editor’s eye cannot ignore, these do not affect the atmosphere in any significant way :twilightsmile:

10000578
You're welcome. I can explain more if need be :pinkiehappy:

10000581
Could you explain more?

10000970
Sure. The direct speech, I presume? The rest are mostly random errors that need to be judged and corrected on case by case basis.

Alright, if a dialogue tag contains a verb that conveys some speaking action (says, replies, whispers, asks, yells et cetera), the direct speech is connected to it with a comma, not a period. However, many people forget to mention that also the sentence containing the verb needs to start with a lowercase letter (except proper names and I) if it is present after the direct speech. Here is an example of a correct sentence:

“Oh! I’m terribly sorry,” he says.

Notice that it has both the comma and lowercase he.

That seems pretty easy, right?

So, let's make it a little more complicated now. Sometimes, you need to use the dialogue tag (e.g. she says) before the direct speech, mostly for better flow or context. Then it will look like this:

She says, "Write it like this."

Notice that both the dialogue tag and the direct speech start with an uppercase letter. Also, the comma is now before the direct speech.

The last thing I'd like to mention is the use of beats. Beat is just a fancy name for a dialogue tag possessing a verb that conveys some kind of different action than speaking (for example smiles, nods or blinks). When a beat is used, comma cannot be present. Period has to be in its place. (And of course, exclamation or question marks stay where they were.) Due to this, the beat has to start with an uppercase letter.

"Write it like this." She motions to the paper.

She motions to the paper. "Write it like this.“

Again, notice the placement of periods and the uppercase letters and compare it with the previous examples.

Those are the very basics. Of course, there are many more forms of dialogue, such as direct speech fragmented by beats. However, I believe this is enough for now. Let me know if anything was unclear or if you have any additional questions :twilightsmile: Also, I’m using present tense in the examples above, but it works with past tense just the same.

10001011
Although the writing in this story doesn’t exactly reflect how I write now, I do find your explanation to be very helpful! :raritystarry:

Side note: I really wanna try and write Present/Future tense, and get the past tense over with.

10001095
Glad to hear that :twilightsmile:

Side note: I really wanna try and write Present/Future tense, and get the past tense over with.

Honestly, write in whatever tense fits you the most and just make sure to keep it consistent. Despite that little direct speech guide, I personally prefer writing in past tense.

10001099
Present tense and future tense is something that not only fascinated me, but I feel it may be somewhat easier than past tense. Though I’m not sure how difficult or easy it is. But whenever I practice it, it feels a bit engaging.

A very belated review notification -- my fault, and I apologise. I liked that the awkwardness of the song lyrics was actually an in-universe plot point; that's clever. The main problem I had was that I know nothing about Samneo and have no particular reason to empathise with him. The shipping proceeds at warp factor eight at times, too.

10193490
I.. actually didn't expect a review! Thank you for reviewing this story!

Admittedly, I thought that the song bit wasn't the best, and I felt it could've been better. I was kinda like you when you react to songs in fics. However, I'm pleasantly surprised by your words. I might experiment with something like this in the future, just so I could potentially flesh it out more.

As for the rest of your review, I do agree with most, if not, all of your points. Despite my words saying it's not canon to the rest of the series, it for some reason acts as if you already know Samneo. I find it pretty jarring to see outdated concepts in this story, which I've long abandoned for the rest of his series.

Another thing, is the writing; In my opinion, this is one of the problems I have with my older works. When you look at Samneo The Earth Pony and this story.. you can tell they have a bit of a 'low-budget' feel. Have you ever seen a movie that was on a budget, seeing the effects not looking very top notch, and actors that aren't as good as you hoped--that's how I feel about these two stories. Granted, there are some good things in Week in the Winter Storm and Samneo, but even I can see that the older me was trying to compensate for not anticipating how bad I was at writing.

I will admit, I kinda wish I just rebooted back in 2017, and started from scratch.

Sorry if this reply seems half baked, but I do appreciate your time in reading my story. Stay safe out there my friend. I think I'll give you a follow, you seem chill.

By the way, I do enjoy your reviews, I'd love for you to review another story sometime.

10194267
You're very welcome, and thank you for the interesting reply! For the follow, too. :twilightsmile: As for reviewing another fic, I certainly don't rule it out -- though realistically you'd probably need an E/T-rated story marked Complete before I added it to the RiL list.

10194580
You're welcome. :twilightsmile:

Maybe while Neocros Adventures is still cooking in the oven, you could check out Samneo The Earth Pony. Though do keep in mind, it's a bit rough around the edges, but it could give you insight before going into Neocros Adventures--when it's complete.

EDIT: I would've recommended Dash of love, but it's rated M, so...

10194583
Well, I do read a few M-rated fics. But "a few" means what it says. I've reviewed well over a thousand stories in the last five years, and I'd guess fewer than 20 have been M-rated.

10194838
So uh.. what would you review, Dash of Love or Samneo: The Earth Pony?

10195702
Maybe either; I don't know. Either way, it won't be soon I'm afraid. My queue is over 200 stories, and at my usual rate that will take well into next year.

10196216
I guess it doesn't exactly matter. I apologize for not knowing about your queue, take your time, my friend.

Nicely done! Though, was surprised. You made it in 2017 but just listed under recent updates for me

10507888
Thanks!

as for the recent updates thing, sorry about that. I was testing out something in an unpublished chapter(I usually do this to see what effects I could do), ending up publishing it by accident, and quickly unpublished it. I apologize for the inconvenience.

10507913
No harm done, was how I found your story. Was just confused as I saw the date

10507917
I see. I was thinking of updating this story with slightly better grammar, but it would break a rule in my mind. The rule is, if I finish a story then I'm not allowed to make any changes, unless they're small.

The reason I have this rule, is because I feel it's better to show how my writing was before, so me and readers could compare it to my newer projects, y'know to see how far I've come as a writer. Though if the story's ongoing, I'm allowed to make huge changes.

10507929
Though admittedly, I'd wish to remake this. If I were, it'd be a separate story--that way readers(and myself) could compare the two.

Sadly, I feel like the rules of the site may prohibit me from making a remake, since the story might be too similar to the original.

10628537
Well, the rules state only

“Rewrites” of an old story posted as a new story, unless the changes are substantial

Very good story.

11126287
thank you. it means a lot to me

11126531
You're very welcome.

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