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Just a pony who wrote some horrible stories.


A simple crossover between FiM and Star Wars. A young farm girl named Twilight Sparkle finds herself in possession of the plans to the evil Galactic Empire's feared battle station. Through her journey, she learns many things about the world she lives in, and about herself.

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Comments ( 9 )

Hoh boy, 25 thousand words in a single chapter.

well this stays true to the movie ill give it that much but why the hell did you put macintosh as the one who had to die why......, also why did you not make a part for fluttershy?????

Hmm... a repaint of star wars in MLP isn't that bad I suppose, good enough to mark for reading again, but at the same time, I almost wish there was more MLP and a bit less star wars... it's like the MLP characters were merely acting out parts in a movie. I would think they'd behave differently than that in a more accurate one, but hey, it's fanfiction.:twilightsheepish:

Comment posted by sonicdash123 deleted Apr 30th, 2013

ok I want to say three things, first why did you change Wedge´s firstname into Skybucker but kept the Antilles?
Second with Nigthmare Moon as Darth Vader how is it possible that twiligth and rarity "escaped" their mother.
and last why didn´t you use the royal sisters as Emperor/Yoda, maybe Sombra as Vader to circumvent point two of my list and Zecora as Obi-Wan.

Still nice story, will get faved now and then on to the next one.

May the Force be with you.

This wasn't too bad. Roll credits:

Pursued by the Empire's sinister agents, Princess Rarity races home aboard her starship, custodian of the stolen plans that can save her people and restore freedom to the galaxy...

Maybe add a line under this so we know the intro is done?
Also try and find some way to let readers know of scene changes in an obvious manner, like putting the cutie mark of the new character above the paragraph

“It wasn't my fault, sir,” Applejack pleaded. “Please don't deactivate me! I told her not ta go, but she's faulty, malfunctionin'. Kept babblin' on about her mission.”

"It wasn't my fault, ma'am,"
Twilight is a female. Sir is for males.

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