Four words and they are all true. SBPS follows the girls of Canterlot High after the events of Legend of Everfree, as they deal with graduation, maturation, and a parasite that just wants to cuddle their gray matter.
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I gotta admit, this feels like it is turning somewhat away from the parasite story it started as, and evolving into a dom/sub story. This wouldn't be such a problem if it was integrating it, but instead it is replacing. As an example, if through this entire chapter there had been mentions about how Dash's tastes were being noted and/or modified by the parasite. Instead, I cannot even remember a single mention to the parasite in this entire chapter.
And while the new content is boring to me personally, the story started out real good, so I'll stick around a few chapters more to see how it goes.
8563245 The story is still building steam, so to speak. Just one week has passed in the world, and so far the main actor has been Rainbow Dash. These last few chapters are pushing Rarity into the limelight a little more, and I wanted to explore Sonata more. Showing Rarity and Sonata together is the easiest way to do that.
The parasite is slow-acting (several weeks for it to show much beyond the simple increased libido), and is not the only focus of the story (although it is the most major addition to the world, hence the title).
To Sonata: Seeing Rainbow Dash went anthro pony before you, would you consider 'reforming' your way just to attain your anthro siren body?
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From one opinion to another... I think you handled that criticism quite well. You didn't start a flame war, you didn't lace your response with malice or defensiveness. You took his criticism with a lot of honor for someone writing parasite smut. You're a well rounded individual I thinks. And I thinks I'm gonna see this through to the end. I've honestly skipped some of your derpy segments as they aren't my thing, but that doesn't take anything away from the experience. Make this story how you plan to and people will stay, people will go, but more importantly, a story shall be told!
8563285 At the end of the day, they read my story and like it enough to mention what they are not enjoying about it. This is the kind of feedback writers always beg for, but sometimes take so poorly. Thanks for the reply!
Yeah, honestly, I'm gonna have to agree with Lesolan. I've been skimming and skipping for a few chapters now, and I think I'm gonna un-follow this one. The stuff you're writing now is fine for what it is, I suppose, but it's not the story I signed up for. I'll probably come back and give this a second read when it's finished. Thanks for the great content in the earlier chapters, anyway!
8563849 Thanks for the feedback!
Hmmm so lessons learned. We wonder how quickly Rarity's parasite will take root?
Speaking of, what about the other girls from the mud bath? Oh that could be interesting...
To Sonata: old siren learns new tricks?
Keep going! ;)
Its a shame that Spicy is gay in this story, as I think he and Rainbow could be very happy together. As it is, this can really only go on for so long before the teaching stage has to end and Rainbow stops pretending to be a boy to suit Spicy's tastes.
Ask x Sonata: If Rainbow, Rarity and the other offer you the chance... Could you want to return to Equestria?
Another chapter hits the floor, chapter hits the floor, HITS THE FLOOR! Ohh and so did a lot of jaws in this chapter, very very enjoyable!
" and he felt like he was almost trying to shove his whole head into her." With all of the genderbending there are going on is it no surprise that even you got confused there for a second
9250132 HA! That one was a trap! He was referring to Rainbow Dash as he for fun.