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JSF F-35B Pilot, Captain Lisa "Sapphire" Johansson was shot down and killed by Russian Su-98s, at least that's what the records state. In all actuality that's not what happened, through seemingly divine intervention she wound up in Equestria, which happened to occupy a totally different dimension and was accessible by use of an extremely advanced and complex spell that was placed on amulets, allowing access through use of an incantation.

That divine intervention was in the form of two Wonderbolts, Spitfire and Soarin. The former was investigating the possibility of using areas of Earth that had little if any human population for training Wonderbolts. While Soarin had accompanied her up into the Great White North of Canada, in the year 2020. However it happened to coincide with the Russian Invasion of Canada to claim the oil sand deposits.

However, after rescuing Sapphire from her downed F-35B Lightning II, they discover that her injuries are incredibly severe and that it would be impossible to get her to the nearest town on Earth to receive medical treatment. They make an incredibly tough decision, one that changes Sapphire's life forever.

Despite the incredible change to both her physical body and species, Captain Johansson isn't about to let a second chance at life get away from her. After all, rarely do you get a second chance to continue living.

That is if she doesn't go insane from the daily insanity of a certain small-town near the capital of Equestria.

Note this is a crossover with the novel Tom Clancy's Endwar.

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Nugget #1 · Monday · · ·

Shall I say it? I think I shall.

While the grammar within the story is all over the place, the one thing that really bothers me is the inaccuracy of the story. I want to specificity highlight the radio chatter. In Hollywood movies and Tom Clancy stories, it would be like what you have written down, but in the operational Air Force, that is not the standard protocol at all. First off, individual call signs would never be used in the air. Instead each flight would be called by a single name (for example "Lighting") while an individual plane would be referred to by a number (such as "Lighting 1-1" or "Lighting 1-2"). The only time a number WON'T be used is if the callsign refers to an AWACS system or a CRC (Command and Reporting Center) on the ground.

Next, pilots wouldn't be talking that much over the radio. They have a ton of issues and protocols to handle within the cockpit alone, not to mention having to keep a mental time on their controls. If they do talk, it's extremely minimal and only done if their is information they have to report without using proper radio procedures and curiosities (such as if something specifically isn't working on the plane like the radio). Otherwise, they are mostly silent killers or talking directly to their battle managers on the ground or in the sky through in series of radio reports that have specific structures and terms they have memorized.

That's about it. Sorry for the long post! :twilightsmile:

Seawolf #2 · Monday · · ·

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Well, during the Russian Invasion of Canada in 2020, it caught everyone completely off guard. Plus they didn't have no AWACS since they were either in Europe or had scrambled and were helping what few squadrons remained in Alaska in fighting the Russians. Plus it was only a training mission, they weren't expecting to suddenly be on the front lines of a war now were they?

Nugget #3 · Monday · · ·

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Training mission or not, each fighter in the air would be directly reporting to a control center regardless. I would look up the term "Air Control Squadron" and immediately tell you that in the case of an emergency, and if there is no AWACS system available, then an ACS Squadron would be called in immediately to provide tactical C2 (Command and Control) capabilities to pilots (especially in Europe). Otherwise, if their is no air control, then a pilot would be nearly blind in the sky since they would have no clue where the heck the enemy is outside their limited radar capabilities. C2 provide beyond-line-of-sight radar that can track and map out enemy air for the pilots to engage.

In other words... No C2 = No pilots in the sky.

Seawolf #4 · Monday · · ·

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Igloo Base probably didn't have the radar range, the Russians were landing their transports some seventy-five kilometers north of
Behchokǫ̀ in the Northwest Territories and Igloo Base was 321 kilometers north of Yellowknife. Also, remember Igloo Base was completely and utterly flattened with the last two Lightnings the base had piloted by Siren and Sapphire respectively barely succeeding in escaping. Thus the pilots were on their own.

Of course she died flying a F-35. They're shit planes lol

V-Pony's a bro. I'll let him know you're thinking about him.

It's unlikely she would have a picture taped in the cockpit. There are generally more pilots than jets in any given squadron, so they have to share.

engaging USAF and JSF squadrons

Did you mean USAF and RCAF?

If the bombs are alreading hitting the base as they take off…where are the bombers? Why do the F-35 pilots not stop the immediate threat before going after the transports?

human military fighters emblazoned with a star

Wait, despite taking off from Canada, is Sapphire American? Because Russian jets have stars, too.

I won't comment on radio procedures because 8304274 covered it.

I noticed some redundant words and misplaced commas, mostly minor stuff.

Don't get discouraged by negative feedback. It's not bad for a first story and you'll get better with practice. Keep writing!

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The USAF and JSF squadrons were doing so over Alaska. Plus as it stands, the nearest Royal Canadian Air Force base with fighters is in Cold Lake, Alberta and it's 993 kilometers from Cold Lake AFB to Behchokǫ̀ and the Russian landing zone was some seventy-five kilometers north of that. So even if Royal Canadian Air Force got going, depending on if they have Hornets or Lightning IIs, it's still quite a hike and would be pushing the limit of endurance for their jets and factor in having to evade missiles from BVR it's not possible, plus the only aerial tankers in the entire Royal Canadian Air Force are in Winnipeg.

As for the picture thing, Igloo Base only had six F-35B Lightning IIs.

As for the planes, the Lightning's were on the ground rearming and refueling because they had already gone at the transports once so they couldn't stop those Fullbacks. Besides by the time they got to the runway, the Fullbacks had already dropped their payload and were bugging out.

As for Sapphire, yes she's an American. The JSF had a small base north of Yellowknife. As for why Spitfire and Soarin, they haven't seen the roundel on the Russian planes and thus don't know that they have a red star.

It helps if you've read the novel Tom Clancy's Endwar:

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Oh! It's a crossover with Endwar. It might help if you mentioned it somewhere in the description.

8308995
Right should mention that, knew I was missing something.

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