When an unexpected visitor mysteriously appears outside of Ponyville while Twilight Sparkle is about to experience the joys of shelving new books, it quickly becomes evident she must return the wary traveler to where it came from before the town is rendered uninhabitable.
You write the characters quite believably! I can easily imagine Applejack, Twilight, Spike, and Mayor Mare, etc, acting/speaking like this.
Oh No!
What's up sugar cube?
I left Spike and Rarity alone back in Ponyville!
No worry they'll keep busy all right I recon
That's what I'm worried about!
No worries Auntie Twilight, Can't stop it from happening
And that's why eggs are packaged a dozen to a carton and why Twilight has an air ship sticking out of the crystal castle...
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All that quality time together pays off
What a quaint little story. It's unfortunate that this has recieved so little attention, as the writing quality is quite excellent for your first story submission.
OMG, that is the most adorable cover art! I'm gonna have to check this out once it's complete
Nicely done. You've got writing in the character's voices down well.
a simple story but well done. Upvote