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Twilight and Applejack get more than they bargained for when they agree to get Pinkie Pie out of Sugarcube Corner for the day. Pinkie's sudden obsession with the bakery's back door leads to an improbable adventure that sweeps Fluttershy up in its wake.

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That's the best thing I've ever read in my entire life.

Well, thank you! I worked hard on it.

Very nice, I felt like this could have been an episode of the show. Great reading! :pinkiehappy:

That was my main goal. I wanted it to be as much like an episode as possible! Thanks so much for reading! It's nice that people like it.

There aren't enough words to explain how much I enjoyed this story.

Really good! Episode worthy! The formatting is a bit off in some places (there are indents on lines that don't need them.)

But story and writing wise, perfect!

Applejack cut suddenly into the conversation, “Hey, does anypony else here a ruckus?”
*hear

On the other note however, uh...
HALYSHATTATWASFACKINGAMEZANGOMGBQQSOGUD; This needs to be featured.

That is dedication there Pinkie Pie. Wow.

>>Resda Thank you very much! I worked hard on this story, and this makes me want to write some more of them!

>> DreZoma Argh! I'm trying to get back in to change that typo, but I can't figure out how. I keep going in and choosing edit, but it never takes me to the story, just the elements around the story like what characters are in it and what image to use and so forth.

I'm happy you liked it, though!

817146 I'm not surprised there are some wonky indents. When I pulled the story over from google docs, it took out all the indents and I had to go back and frantically put them all back in (I was under a time constraint). I'm trying to figure out how to get back into the story, but this site is very weird. I'm having a hard time getting in to edit.

Thanks for the heads up and compliment. I appreciate any time that people spend with my work.

817229 When Pinkie gets a feeling about something, she listens!

817301
I totally understand. And if you go to the story, like you're reading it, there's a gray bar at the very top, and the first button on it should be "edit."

Hope it helps! :ajsmug:

Lol, great story mate! Loved every bit of it.. Oh Pinkie, y u so random :pinkiesmile:

817327 That's what I've been using, but that takes me to a page where I can change all the things like who is in the story and the image I want to link. I can't find an place to actually go into the story. I must be missing something. I'll try again.

817327 That's what I've been using, but that takes me to a page where I can change all the things like who is in the story and the image I want to link. I can't find an place to actually go into the story. I must be missing something. I'll try again.817373 That's awesome that you liked it. Hopefully I'll be writing some more in the near future.

817377
Are you in the story itself, or on the "cover" page for the story (the page with the synopsis and chapter list)? You want to use the edit button in the chapter.

817403 Thank you! Yes, that is what I was doing wrong!

That was wonderfully hilarious! Well done! :rainbowlaugh:

817490 Thank you very much! I wanted to get a balance between zany and adventure.

817526
And you got it, my good pony. The best thing about this is I could easily see this being an episode, haha. :pinkiehappy:

It's a shame you made Pinkie a complete idiot, like so many authors here tend to do. But I still liked this. Like others have said, it's very much like the show. I love how it all comes together with the horseshoe bit at the beginning. Very clever:twilightsmile:

817597 I don't see Pinkie as an idiot. She just operates on a completely different plane. She has her own rules about reality. Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

By so many great comments I read before reading the story, I think I'll give this story a try :D

817618 Happy reading and I hope you enjoy it!

Someone should somehow get the creators of MLP to look at this and get them to make this an episode! :yay:

Great story! I loved it! Not a single problem I could fin with it!

817635 Well, I'm willing if they are! Man, I'd love to write for that show. Thank you so much for taking the time to read it.

I could definitely see this story getting up in the feature box. Pinkie just being Pinkiedl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Pinkie_Pie_lolface.png

Perfect. Great Story!

What-wha-what...
...
All of my like.

First Rainbow and the sink, now this. Is there going to be a fanfic for every object in the Sugarcube Corner's kitchen?

Anyway, awesome fic. I never knew you could tell such a story with just a fascination over a door. This fandom is nuts. :rainbowderp:

I'm going to take a guess and say that Twilight's magic-propelled horseshoe flies through the door.
Oops, wrong door.:twilightsheepish: Well, good story.
818766 Have you heard of Pinkie Watches Paint Dry? And yes, this fandom is nuts, and I probably wouldn't have it any other way (I could do without Sweet Apple Massacre, though).

wat

The...grammar...it's so bad...but the story's so good...

817882 That would be awesome! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it!

818766 I was actually originally planning for them to do a lot more with the door, like needing to ride it like a raft on a rushing river and using it as a sled, but at a certain point a story becomes bloated. I wanted this to feel like an episode of the show, so I shortened it. Thanks for reading it!

818985 If you wouldn't mind giving me a few examples, I can go in and improve any bad grammar. I've always written in script format, so the dialogue quotation format is kinda new to me. I tried to research it, but I have three different printouts that say to format in three different ways. I'm happy that you liked the story in spite of any incorrect grammar.

Highly enjoyable. Also, best final line ever.

Keep writing! :twilightsmile:

820400 Thanks so much! I'm already formulating a new plot, so hopefully I'll have something new here in the weeks to come.

This will make a great episode:pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp: Great story!

822681 Thanks for reading it! :twilightsmile:

I liked Pinkie's description of her morning ritual (that does make a lot of sense...) Checkov's ponyshoe (and Fluttershy's description of trying to remove it), and Pinkie's song. Well played on all counts.

827351 Thanks! I was wondering if anyone liked the song. I was trying to make it entertaining, but not great. Most of Pinkie's songs in the series annoy rather than entertain, so I wanted to make it kind of obnoxious but also endearing.

It also helps that I'm a terrible songwriter.

Very nicely done!
It was a pretty humorous situation, and you managed to carry it to the conclusion in a way that didn't have me losing interest. Also, I think you pretty much nailed the personalities of the ponies involved.

828030 Thank you so much, and congratulations on being featured!

Cool fic, friend. I could literally imagine this completely animated and it would be soooooo good! :yay:

840508 Aww, shucks, you flatterer, you! Having it seem like an actual episode was my number one goal, so I'm happy that it seemed that way to you. Thanks so much for taking the time to read it!

I agree with the others; this could be an episode of the show! And it made me laugh! :pinkiehappy:
I, like Twilight in this story, have wondered if Pinkie Pie has any unicorn blood in her!

902729 Thanks for reading! I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

Pinkie having unicorn blood is the only logical explanation. Anything else will make Spike freak out about supernatural forces and then Twilight will need to lecture him about believing in nonsense. :twilightangry2: No one wants that to happen.

I think the ending pun is close enough. :rainbowlaugh:

A highly amusing story. I just need to flesh out my edits, then I'll have them on the way to you!

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