My name is... Well that doesn't matter anymore I bought an enchanted cloak from the merchant, now I've been given all my ocs powers, slowly making me stronger.i wonder what types of displaced I will meet? Oh and I'm in equestria, great.
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I plan on at least one chapter a week. More if I can, be sure to like and comment
Well that did it. Get out, I've met anti brownies nicer than you. I know you didn't choose to review my story for "**** and giggles" I apologized for my stinking attitude earlier just leave me alone. I write as best as I can. If you can't be kind in any way, don't comment on my stuff. I'm deleting your comment. I want an impartial editor who will correct grammar errors and not criticize me while doing so. I was taught that no matter how bad someone treats you, you let them sit in there bad attitude and walk away. You however will bury them in criticism.
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Ah, so you're going down this road. Okay.
I'm sorry, she and I have clashing personalities. I'm open to suggestion, but I will NOT be told what I an and cannot writ
I have a sadly horrible temper with those intentionally b****y. She openly admitted that she treat everyone that way because "many" people won't listen otherwise. I'm different however, I balk at that attitude
8190958 First of, deleting a Comment is never good. No matter how bad.
Also Midi got a lot of points. If you don't want problems because of Grammar get a Betareader first before you post. And read a few FFs and also a few writer guides before you write. There are so many things that are missing, from the length of the chapters, to the "chat" like mostly dialogue writing style and many more. You talk about how great your character looks, but never gave us much of why the character looks great or even how he really looks. Lets go over to to Sue part. If this is an complete OC why in all hells would people want a picture with the character? Also the lack of any form of description. Your action scene, or what you seem to think is one has no suspense or any form of action, or form of anything besides the talking shit and sound effects. This are just a few of the most basic things in writing. I am not even starting things like character development or a strong and clear Plot line.
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Then you're fucked and doomed as writer.
I bury them in criticism in attempts to make them better. Balking at my attitude is like pissing yourself when a four year old throws a stuffed animal you.
The fact you can't even spell write foreshadows your doom.
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And I've a four year old sister with a better grasp on the english language than you.
I recommend that you develop thicker skin, Tomb. If you want to be a good writer, taking criticism, blunt or not blunt, comes with the territory. In fact, the blunter the review, the better off you'll be for it. You can either turn a negative into a positive, or you can keep it a negative. That's entirely up to you, but it'll determine where you go as a writer.
The writing game isn't hospitable for the sensitive types, I can tell you that much. You either learn that lesson now, or learn it the hard way later on. As I said, that's up to you.
Interesting let's see where this leads.
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This site, and the rest of the real world for that matter, doesn't work that way outside of elementary schools and college campuses that enforce speech codes that change every single day.
An editor that won't critique you whilst editing is very hard to come by. I should know; I have two of them for Arcane and one of them points out flaws in grammar and the other in how a scene is playing out. It's actually improved the work I've mentioned substantially, because I have two extra sets of eyes that catch things I don't.
Even with the option to delete comments, it don't work like that here at all. Just an FYI.
... *looks at story with suspicion* If that's your best, you have fifteen long roads ahead of you. Just another FYI.
I'm sorry, I just don't like midnightchaos. I'm one of those fanatical bronies that actually believes the love and tolerate thing. In she has been the total opposite of that. I know she is only doing the tough love way of things, but I would rather no one comment on my site unless they actually like my "horrible story"
Enigmus, I don't have a thin skin. I merely have no patience for midnight chaos. I have a very short temper, I live in the middle of knowhere so I have no social skills. And when someone tries to bury me I dig myself out and fight to not be buried again. And did I mention I have a shorte temper ?
Krozairofequestria, it wasn't meant to be an action scene, my oc is laid back.
Another thing, I'm a closet brony, no one , not even my family know. They would f-ing beat me if they knew so I don't have much in the way of time to make writers guides like normal people.
My entire life no one has tried to be kind to me on my "horrible ideas", and yet I have more faith in the kindness of the world than some of you.
I am sorry to those who actually like my story, I'm just tired of these "you have to do this or your doomed" comments. Leave me in my idiocy 'call it whatever you wish' just leave me be
And before any of you commen, know that if it's more negative or tough love criticism I will only fight I can do nothing else in my situation. This only makes me realize why the Internet is anonymous.
8191804 There's a >> button for a reason, dude. Just wanted to point that out as well.
Keep up the good work. I like what I see.
Continue. I like it so far.
He seems a bit to op. He didn't have half that amount of items in the first chapter. This is great info but try not to make a Mary Sue okay?
Actually, if you look at the items his lists down at the beginning of chap. 1, you can see that I only wrote down the weapons and items that had special effects.
. I won't use the final form often, and the original form will only get one or two extra powers from the cutie marks of ponies he meets
sorry I'm taking so long to post the next chapter, I have family visiting and haven't had the time.
I will post the next chapter within the month at the least