A stallion wakes in Ponyville and he has no recollection of his past or anything about himself. He must go on a journey with six other ponies to discover who he is and what he was doing in Ponyville.
[Disclaimer: First fanfic. It's not great, it's not original, this is the third time I'm uploading this. Honestly, I'm just winging it now. Enjoy to the best of your ability.]
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Why do you keep uploading this? Honest question actually. Is it because it keeps getting shot down or taken out of the limelight?
From what I've re-read it looks like the exact same beginning which isn't much to speak of.
862818
Honestly, I dunno.
I gave my account info to a couple of my friends, so that might be why.
Its good.for a first fic not the best, but I've seen much worse. I really like your OC's mane though(not quoting Sweetie here I truly do) I'm tracking, lets see were this goes
862836 you really shouldn't give out your account info to people in general even if there your friends. Friends can easily become enemies.
I for one believe it could be great. Say, mind if I lend a hoof?
862945
I'm open to suggestions.
862947 Well then, let me read the fiction first.
What? Oh whatever. Allons-y!!
This has...uhm, potential? You need to take the first chapter to give depth to the characters, not pack as much as you can into a few pages.
862947 Well first off, on the second sentence it says, 'party' and it should say 'part'.
Next is the fourth sentence. Instead of 'onto' it should be 'at'.
Actually, you know what? I'll just copy and paste the entire story onto microsoft then make the edits there okay? You know, makes things a whole lot easier.
862967
I'd appreciate it.
You mind helping me write the rest of this thing? I have a rough draft written out and I just don't wanna jump in and upload it already.
Just a word of advice, I'm not trying to be a dick here, but I think you can do better.
OC fics like this, where the OC starts out with amnesia and befriends the Main Six, are just too common place to be taken seriously by anyone. I'm not saying it was bad, honestly I liked it, but this has been too overdone for the majority of users on this site to like it.
My advice, for a first time writer, try to write a story about an entirely original set of characters and have it based in Ponyville, or have a story between two canon characters. I tried to make a friendship with Twilight in my first fanfic (I don't even know how it got a good rating), but I still feel that the relationship between the OC and Twilight just took off too fast, even with Twilight's friendly disposition.
You've got potential! You really do! I feel that it would be nice to try some of my suggestions. But if you don't want you, who's gonna judge?
863089
Thanks for the suggestions and I might take them into consideration,
however, I've already written a good portion of this fic, so there's no point in just stopping.
I'm just uploading this for shits and giggles.
862974 Sure! I'm new here and in the middle of writing my own fiction. I'm sure we could work together in the name of, well, er..you know what, disregard what I just said and PM me later.
863181
Will do.
Much thanks.
863140 Make sense.