Romantic Equestria: In the Orchards at Dawn

MRomantic Equestria: Praise the Sun
MLP: FiM
Romance
Comedy
Slice of Life
After being cast into Equestria by a mysterious figure on a bridge you find yourself thrust into Celestia's castle as you try to adjust to your new life.
Sex
Second Person
Human
Twilight
Celestia
Luna
Other
Cadance
Sean Shamrock · 6.6k words · 85 27 · 7.3k views

Romantic Equestria: In the Orchards at Dawn

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Zdron

Zdron #1 · Jan 3rd, 2017 · 3 · ·

I feel like the story line was kinda rushed there was very little build up on their feelings towards each other. But I thought it was cute.

Sean Shamrock

Sean Shamrock #2 · Jan 3rd, 2017 · · ·

7839084 ya, it's been sevral months (Like 8+) Since I wrote so I gotta get back into The swing of things. The Rainbow Dash and Celestia story will be better paced. This was just to ease my way back in.

TFZ

TFZ #3 · Mar 9th, 2017 · 6 · ·

The start of this fic was very promising because it explained who the main character is.his hobby a general personality, the build up was great. However as soon as he went to equestria the writing dropped in quality. I feel as though you were eager to get thing moving with applejack but in the process you dropped flow and character protocol, applejack was too eager and the human easily swayed. I see potential the start was well thought out. But the characers felt hollow. Over all I would rate this a 2 out of 5. If that offends you I apologize

DiamondBrony99