Twilights Ghost

Twilight needs a quick way to get around the castle without traveling the long corridors. An old book of party tricks brings an ideal but disasterous solution.
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StormDancer

StormDancer #1 · Dec 31st, 2016 · 1 · ·

Interesting.
I like the premise, I really do. We've all seen Twilight make her blunders, especially where magic is concerned, but it ended up feeling a bit rushed.

That her saviors just seem to chuckle at the whole thing.... that was a bit fun as well, but the winning line goes to Twilight after she's asked if she was having problems.

Well done. Short, but well done.

teamidris

teamidris #2 · Dec 31st, 2016 · · ·

Glad you liked it. Yeh, I couldn't see how to pull the end out without killing the urgency of her predicament. I hoped that her slipping in out of consciousness would fill it out enough, as it was super short before that. And I figured anything less than prolonged war was normal stuff for the sisters :o)
Weirdly, this span out of the concept for 'Soft Flooring'.

Elkia Deerling