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The great and powerful Trixie has left ponyville, seemingly never to return. No one would notice, right? She was never popular enough for someone to care where she went was she? Wrong, because someone did care, and they found something very surprising. A letter addressed to princess Celestia. What does this letter say? Why did she write it? Why did she leave? Most importantly, will she ever come back?
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need's random tag and a sequel, also twilight would not normally be so accepting of trixie's actions (as far as i know).
other than that really really good job.
7768912 sequel? and what about a random tag? And think about it, It's set at a point in time where the incident happened a long time ago. Trixie had already learned her lesson about the incident.
7768912 Oh and thanks for the compliment bud.
IT IS TOO DAMN SHORT!
This story has FAR to much potential to end like this! -Starts to slowly turn into my nightmare form from ending to quickly-
7768922 random tag becuase a pony/person does NOT accept a engagement proposal in front of a town and without even knowing the person(just saying):O
sequel becauseWHY NOT?? actually no if you want to do a story like this than do the after effects (i tried to do that and failed horribly but you may do better)
7768929 With this story, I perfected my short story style, This may be too short, I know but I made sure it ended well. I hope.
7768912 I see what you mean. I could do a sequel and have it properly spread out the effects of the marriage thing. I can see what you mean when you say that now. random tags are for stories like All the Cast Are Replaced With Inanimate Objects. I don't know if I can do a sequel story to it. For My Final Trick was done with it expecting to end like that. I'll see what I can do about the sequel though
7768961 ok let me walk you through
1. proposal done
2. sappy realization scene
3. leading up until wedding scene
4. wedding gets ruined scene
5 twi/trixi has to go on a wild goose chase to continue the wedding
6. wedding success
7. twi/trix want foals (possible clop here up to writer)
8. convinceing happens
9. CONCEPTION
10. the pregnancy (mood swings, the spouce has to pick up some slack, etc.)
11. THE WATER BREACKS AT A PUBLIC EVENT IN THE MOST ACWARD TIME
12. birth
13. raiseing the foals (twins probually)
14. teenage years
15. growing up
16 sucession
17 the parents grow old
18. SAD TRIXIE DIES
19. twilight is wrecked
20. twilight isolates herself into a depression
21 celestia pulls her out
22. NEXT SEQUAL
DONE ON TO NEXT STORY
AND there you have it a step by step guide on a sequal.
BOOM DONE
7768912 I suppose that would being nice. Excluding all those awkward moments. I'll see what I can do. This was actually never meant to have a sequel. Maybe another story might have one. I thank you for being nice and cmmenting. See you around in the next story.
Okay. Where was this letter that Trixie wrote found? She obviously didn't send it. And how did Starlight find the letter and get to Princess Celestia so fast? Had Twilight seen that letter?
7769189 no problem i am glad to be able to help. if you need anything pm me
I like this, I think maybe there should of been a chat between her and Starlight before she went or something but besides that in my opinion it wasn't bad.
I think this could of used some more clarification, like where was the letter, how did Starlight find it, and how did she get to Princess Celestia so fast? aside from that, it was good
I would consider this a good start. As others have said, there's a lot that can be expanded on. I hope you'll give this a rewrite.
A little unpolished, but I like it well enough. Fave.
Okay, how did Starlight get to Ponyville so fast? I can believe Starlight convincing Trixie to stay and put on a show. But Trixie publicly proclaiming her love to Twilight on stage? Possible, but not likely. Twilight returning Trixie love? I highly doubt. Especially, after how she reacted to Trixie becoming Starlight's friend in the first place. I guess I get my question about Twilight seeing the letter was answered with a 'no'. I still want to know where Starlight found this letter as well?
Plus I agree with what others said about how this story should have been longer.
Very short, but very glad this didn't go down a dark path like what I feared when I first started reading.
Also, Luna, what the buck, were you on coffee and donut break or ...