[Under Edit/rewrite]
Heading home after the first vacation his family has had in over 4 years, Jason Richards finds that he has somehow translocated himself and his carry-ons to a completely different climate.
Hoping to find the nearest civilization, he heads towards a strange, narrow mountain in the distance.
If he had been better at geography, he might have realized that there was no mountain on Earth like the one he faced. Here's hoping he survives long enough to find out.
Rated T for large words and heavy thoughts.
I am starting the story with Jason telling of his arrival in his perspective. He is talking to other characters(Twilight & Co. specifically), but I will not be including their lines so you can have some fun making them up to match his responses.
Dialogue Notes for the discerning reader:
All-caps means louder(not yelling, speech styles are left to pertinent verbiage)
Bold is emphasized
Italics is a quote
Underline means higher pitch(like when you talk to a puppy)
PLEASE NOTE: THE "AU" TAG IS BECAUSE THERE ARE GOING TO BE CANNON DIVERGENCES AS STORY PROGRESSES.
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frayboy15
Hi! I am an avid reader and an aspiring writer. I work best when I have someone to bounce ideas off of. I hope to provide you with entertaining and thought-provoking stories.
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The story telling in the story is amazing! The character development is spot on and you have me counting down the hours till the next chapter.
all and all great job dude and keep up the good work.
-Goofball
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Oh wow, thanks! I spent about two years on the first several paragraphs before I churned the rest out.
The only reason this is getting so much writing from me is that I am stuck on my "main" story.
I'm very suprised/pleased that my writing looks so good.
Hey FrayBoy15,
Your thumbs up meter is most likely broken. thats why you don't have any votes. This happened on one of my favorite rising Authors by the name of Soren Mercer and her story "In The Eyes Of Death". Great story, lots of comments and positive feedback, but only 5 votes. 3 up 2 down. I told her that my vote wasn't registering and that I thought the meter was broken on her story page. This is all there under the comments for that story, if you would like to read it.
He/She looked into it and realized i was right. She got in touch with someone on fimfiction and had the webadmin fix it.
Just informing you that my thumbs up votes aren't registering for this story and there may be a problem.
The Monk
By the way I am watching this story, but I'm withholding comment until you get further along into it.
7798430
A good policy. I wouldn't invest my opinion in a story that's just starting either.
Like what?
7806116
" It's like the universe got tired of waiting and just gave up.
Well, the main thing is that I am going to stretch major show events like the wedding, tirek, ect. into longer ones. For example: Twilight will get the invitation a week before the wedding, rather then the day before like the show suggests (if times are taken literally).
I will also ignore all episodes and information regarding the CMC's cutiemarks(Gabby excluded because I can work with that). They spent nearly four seasons looking for their talents, and then, BAM! They get marks that say, "your talent is LOOKING FOR YOUR TALENT! Yay you.
I blame runtime constraints and the whole "there must be homogeny between the Crusaders" thing the writing staff had to work with. If they had had more time in an episode, they could have given each of the girls a unique mark in the same one. If they let go of needing them to get marks at the same time, they could have had a flashback episode where the three get together after a week apart from vacations or something, realize that they all got their marks while away, and tell eachother how it happened.
Other than that, the differences will be limited to, "there's a human in Ponyville and he's somewhat sciency."
If anyone's wondering, I need to do some rewriting of chapter 2 and edit chapter 3. I've been rewatching episodes to get the layout of the Ponyville and I realized that Golden Oaks isn't in the town square.
I am about halfway through chapter 4 and I found a good map to use as reference material.
In other news, I have two short(er) stories that I'm working on. Three chapters at most each.
Keep a lookout, folksies.
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Ok. Editing of Chapters is done. I'm over 2-of-4 Kilo-words into chapter 4. I've gotten my HAM license and almost have my CDL.
Wait, IT'S BEEN ALMOST A YEAR!?! WHERE HAS THE TIME GONE!!?
*Looks at watch* Oh, there it is.
Almost... *huf* There... Just a... *gasp wheeze* few dozen more... *cough* paragraphs.
7792724
Nice to see that I met your standards.
Looks like it hit your favorites list.
8664570
Keep this story going!!!
8983091
It goes. In a direction. At a speed. For a time.
Seriously though, I'm stuck! I started this project and my other works to polish my writing and to get better at true conversation and fluid exposition. I have four characters in a room and I can't get Jason or Twilight to shut up so the others can get a word in; and we still don't know how that translation spell was made!(I know how it works. So, there's that.)
In other news, I've put together a Discord server for those who want to talk story.(and maybe help me out of a jam?)
FiMFic Frayboy is the name and I would really appreciate any help you people would care to give.