Can I Go Back To My Old Life, Please?

by Tropical Beats

Chapter Two: Thunder Clap and Ocean Tide

"Whoa, sis! I didn't know that you had this much stuff to pack!" Thunder Clap exclaimed as he looked at Scarlet's room. "It hardly has anything put away!" Thunder Clap raised an eyebrow at his sister. "You don't wanna move either, don't you?" He asked.

Scarlet sighed and then laughed. "Bro, you know me so well!"

The two of them began to happily chat even though they were five years apart from age, and siblings. They made organizing like a game. They gathered each item in one place and began to throw it in. Whoever completed the most boxes win! They knew it was stupid, but it was something fun to play.

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"I win!" Scarlet said, beaming with pride. "I got four six boxes done, and you got two!"

"Yea, well... I kinda gave up when I got to half a box." Thunder Clap casually said.

"You can never take up a challenge!" Scarlet complained.

"And you always take up a challenge." Thunder Clap shot back. "It's annoying!"

"I'll calm down my spirit when you brighten yours up a bit." Scarlet said with a smirk. Thunder Clap stood there, not knowing how to reply. "Thunder, seriously! You've gotta know how to reply to stuff like this." Scarlet said with concern.

Thunder Clap vigorously shook his head. "Don't worry, I'll get it." He said with an unconvincing smile, but he put the matter aside. "Pretty weird that we packed your entire room." He said.

"Yea, I'll bring these boxes to the... Erm... Van..." Scarlet stammered as she picked up on box and slowly made her way outside.

Thunder Clap made his way back to the room he and Heaven Wings shared. He peaked through to see if she was there. Thankfully for him, she wasn't. He let out a sigh of relief as he swung the door wide open and sat down in the chair his twin was in a while before. He sat there in silence for a while, and then got up.

"I can't do this." He murmured to himself as he went to find Scarlet.

She was right there putting the last box inside the van. But the bad thing was that Heaven was right next to her. It looked like they've been... Talking...? Wait...

Shit! Thunder Clap thought. I can't face Heaven Wings now! Oh for Lauren's sake, help me find a way out of this!

"Hey, Thunder!" Scarlet called. Thunder Clap stood frozen in place. Scarlet raised an eyebrow at her brother. "Thunder! Get over here!"

Thunder Clap was about to walk over until he heard a car horn go honk honk! He looked to see a black Mercedes-Benz pull up in font of the house. Thunder Clap let out a sigh of relief, realizing that it was Ocean Tide's car. Emerged from the car was a short dark ocean blue girl. She had soft teal eyes and long wavy teal hair with a streak of hot pink on the right side. On the right side of her hair, a broach of the ocean tide rested upon her head. She wore a brightly colored teal T-shirt with lavender stars on it. She wore aqua shorts, and bright pink boots that went click whenever she walked.

“Ocean Tide!” He exclaimed, running towards the car.

Ocean Tide wore a soft smile. “Thunder Clap! I’m glad I’ll be able to see you before you move!” She happily replied.

They both high-fived and walked inside the house.

“So, how you doing?” Ocean Tide asked when they reached the room he and Heaven shared.

Thunder Clap sighed. “I really don’t know…” He said.

Ocean Tide looked at him with concern. “I know moving can be hard, but you have to accept it.”

“I’m not talking about me.” He said while looking down.

Ocean Tide looked at him, clearly confused.

“I’m talking about Heaven.” He said with a sigh. “She hasn’t been taking this lightly."

Thunder Clap felt a hand come to his shoulder. He looked up to see Ocean Tide staring down at him with a smile. “I know that it’s hard. I can understand Heaven. But I don’t think that’s the only thing bothering you.”

“How do you always know what’s going on inside of someone’s head?” Thunder chuckled.

“Dunno. Have a natural gift with empathy I guess.” She replied.

Thunder Clap’s smile disappeared. “You’re right. I’m not only concerned for Heaven, but I’m not feeling so well about the move either. I got to talk about it to Scarlet, but everything just still doesn’t feel right.”

“Mind telling me? I might be able to help.” Ocean Clap offered.

Thunder Clap nodded his head. “I just… Don’t know! I’ve spent all ten years of my life in Hiddenville! I just started middle school, and I love it just the way it is! I’m on the football team and the soccer team! I don’t want to leave that! What if I get to Springfield Junior High, there are no spots on any of the teams! And then I’m going to need to make new friends! I don’t want any new friends! I want to see Fruit Juice in science, and the two of us pairing up with you and Chill Wave. I want to be seated at lunch with you, Rosemary, Shining Crest, Night Breeze, Lilac Skies and my sister! I want to be at English with Rosemary, and everything with everyone I know!” He finished, looked down at his hands.

“T-thunder… Like I said, I know it can be hard, b-out you have to let it go.” She calmly said. She saw that Thunder Clap kept looking down at his hands. “Why don’t we play Candy Land and Monopoly for the last time together? Aren’t they your favorites?”

Thunder Clap slowly nodded his head. “Yea…”

All of a sudden, a loud honk was heard. They heard the shouting of Scarlet and Heaven.

“Their friends might be here now. Why don’t we play in the attic?” Thunder Clap asked.

Ocean Tide happily nodded her head, grabbed the board games, and followed Thunder Clap up in the attic.

Author's Note:

Just the second chapter with Thunder Clap and his best friend Ocean Tide! Next will be about Heaven Wings!
(#OceanClap)

Comments

[metroid_freak]

You're honestly not a bad writer. You have a good grasp of grammar and construction and with some more practice, you could be really good. This story isn't even bad. It's not that interesting in my opinion (because OC moving to a new city, usually Canterlot, has been done to death) but that doesn't mean it's bad by any stretch. What I take issue with is that you haven't done enough to make me excited about reading it. You've also got a lot of OCs and to be honest, I had trouble remembering who was who. Name drops aren't bad but you've got to make sure they're distinct enough to be memorable. My other issue is this:

r u sayin dat Lighting Tile isn't a good name? cuz u know this story is just me writing about my feelings and expreiences when i moves 3 years ago. im Scarlet, and my younger brother and sister are Heaven Wings and Thunder Clap and they're twins. my mom is Ember Sunrise, and my dad is Lighting Tile. so... uh.... what do u mean by that? and with ur pet comin up with better names than Lighting Tile... im not sure if thats a hate comment or.... uh... i dunno kay? but srsly wat do u mean?

How you present yourself on this site, whether it's through your stories, comments, user page, or anything else, is extremely important. Your comment made me suspect that the story was going to be an absolute train wreck, yet I was pleasantly surprised to find the opposite (which is why I left a thumbs-up). In the future, I recommend that you adopt a more formal way of commenting and responding to comments. That will encourage readers to take you more seriously, which never hurts. I'm not saying to write every comment as if you were addressing the Queen but making an effort to sound more mature and serious will result in good things.

It's "your", not "ur".

It's "because" or " 'cause", not "cuz".

I know shorthand is handy and popular but it has its place. I would refrain from using it to respond to people in comments, especially considering how many readers might be more mature and therefore, respect and appreciate more formal vernacular.

Anyway, that's my two bits. Have a wonderful day.

[Tropical Beats]

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Heh, thanks! Sorry about that comment. I'm not really the one to use proper sleeping in my comments. I do put a lot of time and effort in my work, I get good reviews and bad ones, don't really bother me. But the thing is that with that comment, I was just confused and in a hurry since I had a dentist appointment... But thanks for your comment! I'll try and keep my own comments written better, and about the OCS.... I practically live in an OC world. And the family that is moving is basically my family. I moved three years ago so I felt like writing a story about it with me OC and my brother and sister's OC trying to navigate a new school and niebourhood. I also am really bad at spelling though. I always double-check my stories because of my grammar. But anyways, I had a good time reading your comment. Bye!