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Next chapter will be the conclusion of the spider arc.
i think you mean embraced
aside from that it's a good chapter
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Well woopsy. That was a bit of a goof. Thanks for the early catch.
Held
Was
There are a few places I feel could have been worded better, but it's not that bad.
Feel really bad for Strawberry. :( I lost my own mother years ago, so it hits a bit close to home.
This story is the reason I keep coming back to this site everyday. Just incase another amazing chapter has been released.
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Same here
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no problem ^^
Nice chapter . Keep up the good work!
I feel like you're starting to make Ash too much of a mary sue by this point, he's gotten too OP for an earth pony really, first it was super strength, then glowing weapons and now blue flame powers that seem to be a rip off of Blue Exorcist. I really felt you took one step too far in this chapter with the character. He used to be one of my fav characters but now not so much.
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He has no super strength. He is as strong as a normal colt. The thing with the Hydra had nothing to do with muscles. It was the magic powered by his feeling to protect Dark.(he reaaaaly didn't want Dark to die)
Blue flames- I chose that color because I liked the color and I wanted a good visual display. I also considered purple and green.
He can only call on his magic when protecting others. If he was alone, he would be powerless. Its the nature of his element to protect others. And what he has done in this chapter will have a cost on him.
The blue gem is the true source of his magic. Its the Element of Guardianship and he is its bearer. It was given to him by Bountiful Wellspring. She also gave Celestia the Element of Light which gives her the power to nurture and guide. Major Spoiler Alert- Bountiful Wellspring is the Elemental Tree of Nature. She choose Ash and Celestia to be the bearer of two of her elements. Guess who will be the bearer of the Element of Shadow(name not final)?
Cruel and unusual punishment!
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Looks like someone need a hug from their mommy🤗
My depiction of Ash's magic in this chapter was largely influenced by the Blue Elfstones of the Shannara book series. The Blue Elfstones- When used as a weapon, the stones create a blue flame, whose form and strength is controlled by the wielder, and can instantly destroy all but the largest magical creatures and spells. Like most forms of magic, they exert a great toll on the wielder and when using them, the wielder must always be on guard against their destructive powers.
I always liked the idea of the elfstones and added my own thoughts and ideas about the magic of his element like how Ash can only use it when protecting others and its power is based on how much he cares for them. He also cannot use the magic for selfish reasons nor for revenge or against something none-threatening, if he tried, nothing would happen.
Someone pointed out that Ash's blue flames looked a lot like Blue Exorcist. Whether it does or not, that was unintentional and just a coincidence.
I thought about changing the color from blue to something like Green or Purple but decided to keep it blue because it just looks cool.
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Thank you all for your awesome support. I know I make mistakes and my writing is amateurish at best but its the kind supportive words from readers like you all that keeps me going after over a year of writing on this story. Every single day I work, adding a sentence or paragraph or complete pages at a sitting. Sometimes it flows easily but mostly I struggle and fight to get even a small sentence to come out right.
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You can give yourself more credit than amateurish, I hope.
This is one of the only two stories I’ve been staying updated on in a really long time. You make me interested in reading again, to be honest.
Thank you for all of your work and the hours of joy this brings me.
Yay! Caught up.
Now to wait for each chapter.
Thank goodness, I was getting a bit tired of spiders.
Also, did you refer to a stroke with that one mare who collapsed?
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yes, she had a stroke, and I too have been getting very tired of the spiders and will be very glad to be done with them.
I agree. After reading the thunderstorm-part I had just the same thought.
Good chapter!
I can't wait to see what happens next; especially with the spiders.
Replace the second 'they' so we know who they are. Something like 'the herd of ponies' or any kind of descriptor.
She? Which she?
Comma before 'but'.
she CAME UP WITH another
about TO smash
soil AND ATTEMPTING to pull
Ending punctuation.
Again a comma before 'but'.
STEPPING into the trees,
landED
And that makes three commas before 'buts', at least from what I found.
when SHE heard A rather
Cut 'of'
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I liked the Shannara book series even though only read through Scions of Shannara. The Blue Elf stones I thought were really cool. I think it is awesome that Dark gets to use something like them. I can't wait to see what happens next.
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You said Dark, when I believe you meant Ash.
your posting is always bittersweet, its always good and I know its 2 weeks till the next one
I was here for the clop.
But what i found was an extremly good story worth reading for many hours.
Welcome to my best of "pony adventure storys list". Not many finds the way there. I hope you will end the story so every one who things the same abbout the story as i do, will have the plessure to read it in one go.
Btw, the spiders are real in equestria. In one comic there was some kind of spider who did exaclty what you wrote. And they had a personality of some kind. If you consider this story takes place over 1000 years ago, the encestors of this spider could be a thing.
I will be waiting for updates. Keep up the good work.
WhiteSearch
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My bad, please forgive my grieves mistake. I should not make comments at that time.
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Your spot?
glad skye is ok looking forward to the update soon
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It should be out tonight. Be ready its a monster of a chapter. It was delayed because my editor was moving and hasn't got his internet set up yet.
Correction- I just found out that even though I am finished with the current chapter, the next available time to have it edited is this coming friday.
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Noooooooooooooooo
Well ok then back to watching the walking dead