Not bad man, not bad at all. I guess if there's any criticism I have is that since you focus so much on Starlight's perspective then why not make it first person in her point of view?
9482742 Not at all, I still like the story the way it's going. Since the story is clearly leaned more toward Starlight's perspective I thought "eh, why not just making first person then" since usually in these type of stories it goes from both perspectives of the main characters rather than one. At least from my experience. Like I said, it's not like it breaks the story or anything. You do what you think is best.
A hemipenis (plural hemipenes) is one of a pair of intromittent organs of male squamates (snakes, lizards and worm lizards). Hemipenes are usually held inverted within the body, and are everted for reproduction via erectile tissue, much like that in the human penis. They come in a variety of shapes, depending on species, with ornamentation, such as spines or hooks. --Wikipedia
http://www.anapsid.org/hemipenes.html I may take some liberties to make them more aesthetically pleasant, but Spike's genitalia is based on reptilian organs. 9482802 That's good to know! I hope you'll like what comes next!
This story is quickly becoming the highlight of my Thursdays. I get a little giddy every time I get a notification that it's updated.
The writing is absolutely captivating. I found myself sucked into Starlight's emotional state completely, to the point where I completely lost track of a conversation I was having online (I should probably get back to that conversation -- I'll just explain that I was caught up in a great story). The blend of "chaste" and "sensual" romance between the two is a rare delight to behold, and you've really captured Spike and Starlight's personalities and dynamics really well.
9483230 You know, you put a big goofy smile on my face with that comment. Thanks for the kind words, it really motivates me to keep going. I'll do my best to make sure the rest of the story is just as enjoyable (and tasty!) As for spice blends, it really depends on your preferences. I like hot, spicy blends, so I usually do a healthy amount of black pepper alongside cayenne and other powdered hot peppers. If you want to be a bit musical, mix some parsley, sage, rosemery, and thyme and see if it captures the Scarborough feel. Not exactly a spice blend, but if you like sweet popcorn, I've heard honey and peanut butter is a popular mix. You can also try something completely unhealthy by adding melted cheese (is it molten?). A sharp Cheddar with some mozzarella, plus some pepper and parsley can really give a different experience. Honestly, the sky's the limit as long as you manage to get a good grasp on what goes well with what.
“That is unless you buy into the theory that the story was supposed to be titled ‘the Quest for the Sapphire Statue’ and was later changed to Stone because the publishers wanted to dumb down the title so it could reach a bigger audience. Twilight told me about that once, but I can’t remember all the details right now. I think even Rainbow Dash found that to be boring.”
I love that Harry Potter reference.
“You thought you could evade me and capture the relic for yourself,” the slightly cartoony MGI Ahuizotl said with a cocky slur, “but you were sadly mistaken, Miss Do.”
Wait, if this is the first film in the series, shouldn't Ahuizotl be a practical effect like how Yoda was a practical effect in The Empire Strikes Back? I ask this because of this line:
Spike, for his part, only let out a short laugh. “I doubt I can recapture the same passion Twilight had when she gave her speech about how making Ahuizotl an MGI model instead of using practical effects ruined her immersion.”
This implies that Ahuizotl was a practical effect in the early films before the crew switched over to using MGI. Again, like how the Star Wars films started using a CGI Yoda starting with The Phantom Menace instead of a practical effect.
Also, love the subtle jab at Phantom Menace, as well as the reference to Star Wars in general.
Spike seemed to be about to say something too, but he suddenly arched his back and looked away. Starlight looked at him, worry taking over desire as she separated herself from the dragon. “Are… are you alright?” They separated from one another as his shoulders gave a spasm, a quick rise before slumping down back again, and his cheeks bulged just as a flame of green fire burst out of his mouth, materialising a thick scroll between them. They stared silently as the rolled up parchment fell to the floor, but Starlight managed to get a glimpse of the seal that closed it. It didn’t bear the bright yellow wax used by Princess Celestia but a different type, one that was all too familiar to them.
I knew this was going to get interrupted one way or another.
Wait, if this is the first film in the series, shouldn't Ahuizotl be a practical effect like how Yoda was a practical effect in The Empire Strikes Back? I ask this because of this line:
The movies themselves are recent. Considering Yearling is still somewhat young when she first appears in the show, I don't imagine the books are that old. I envisioned the movies being made in the five year jump before this story starts, and as with every modern movie, it used CGI--or in this case, Magically Generated Images--to create Ahuizotl instead of trying to recreate him with practical effects like it would've been made in the good old days, Celestia damn it!
Wait, how did she do that without Spike?
The same way Celestia does, I presume. No spell is too obscure when it comes to clamjamming a friend.
You just might be becoming my new favourite active author. You're definitely building up their relationship in a way that hasn't been done before and because of that I'm hooked. I did read your blog post in which you expressed your desire to explore a relationship not only as it becomes one in the first place but to build on it further and show how two individuals actually grow comfortable with each-other. This story completely reflects that mindset, which I applaud.
Not bad man, not bad at all. I guess if there's any criticism I have is that since you focus so much on Starlight's perspective then why not make it first person in her point of view?
That's just me though.
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I dislike first person for longer stories. That's the only reason, really. I hope it's not a problem.
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Not at all, I still like the story the way it's going.
Since the story is clearly leaned more toward Starlight's perspective I thought "eh, why not just making first person then" since usually in these type of stories it goes from both perspectives of the main characters rather than one. At least from my experience. Like I said, it's not like it breaks the story or anything. You do what you think is best.
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OK then, what's a hemipenes? It doesn't even show up on my spellcheck.
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http://www.anapsid.org/hemipenes.html
I may take some liberties to make them more aesthetically pleasant, but Spike's genitalia is based on reptilian organs.
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That's good to know!
I hope you'll like what comes next!
I love the AN with a different food for each chapter. I'll definitely be trying eggs benedict tomorrow morning
Also, dammit Cblocking Twi! At least Starlight nutted up a bit at the end haha
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They're delicious, you won't regret it.
Also, I'm glad you're liking the story (and the ANs)
This story is quickly becoming the highlight of my Thursdays. I get a little giddy every time I get a notification that it's updated.
The writing is absolutely captivating. I found myself sucked into Starlight's emotional state completely, to the point where I completely lost track of a conversation I was having online (I should probably get back to that conversation -- I'll just explain that I was caught up in a great story). The blend of "chaste" and "sensual" romance between the two is a rare delight to behold, and you've really captured Spike and Starlight's personalities and dynamics really well.
Also, any recommendations for spice blends?
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You know, you put a big goofy smile on my face with that comment. Thanks for the kind words, it really motivates me to keep going. I'll do my best to make sure the rest of the story is just as enjoyable (and tasty!)
As for spice blends, it really depends on your preferences. I like hot, spicy blends, so I usually do a healthy amount of black pepper alongside cayenne and other powdered hot peppers.
If you want to be a bit musical, mix some parsley, sage, rosemery, and thyme and see if it captures the Scarborough feel.
Not exactly a spice blend, but if you like sweet popcorn, I've heard honey and peanut butter is a popular mix.
You can also try something completely unhealthy by adding melted cheese (is it molten?). A sharp Cheddar with some mozzarella, plus some pepper and parsley can really give a different experience.
Honestly, the sky's the limit as long as you manage to get a good grasp on what goes well with what.
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O ho ho ho ho!
You have seen nothing yet!
I love that Harry Potter reference.
Wait, if this is the first film in the series, shouldn't Ahuizotl be a practical effect like how Yoda was a practical effect in The Empire Strikes Back? I ask this because of this line:
This implies that Ahuizotl was a practical effect in the early films before the crew switched over to using MGI. Again, like how the Star Wars films started using a CGI Yoda starting with The Phantom Menace instead of a practical effect.
Also, love the subtle jab at Phantom Menace, as well as the reference to Star Wars in general.
I knew this was going to get interrupted one way or another.
Wait, how did she do that without Spike?
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The movies themselves are recent. Considering Yearling is still somewhat young when she first appears in the show, I don't imagine the books are that old. I envisioned the movies being made in the five year jump before this story starts, and as with every modern movie, it used CGI--or in this case, Magically Generated Images--to create Ahuizotl instead of trying to recreate him with practical effects like it would've been made in the good old days, Celestia damn it!
The same way Celestia does, I presume.
No spell is too obscure when it comes to clamjamming a friend.
Loving the pace, and looking forward to the action that will come later. But hopefully not much later!
Great job!
You just might be becoming my new favourite active author. You're definitely building up their relationship in a way that hasn't been done before and because of that I'm hooked. I did read your blog post in which you expressed your desire to explore a relationship not only as it becomes one in the first place but to build on it further and show how two individuals actually grow comfortable with each-other. This story completely reflects that mindset, which I applaud.
Twilight’s in for a surprise when she gets home.
They're going to do it 4 days straight.
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Are you trying to kill Spike?
At least he'll die with a smile on his face...
and a convenient carrying handle for the paramedics to carry him out with.
Absolutely love this, also your recipes down in the notes are amazing! Thank you for this story and them, sure am interested in how will it continue!
It's been so long since a read a good sparlight fanfic, or a good romance around here, thanks!!
Loving the fic, please, don't stop!