Name: Dusty Woods
Age: Redacted
I believe I was once human but I don't remember much of it. As far as I reliably remember I have been infected with the Redlight Virus. I was all but born infected with it and Blackwatch had killed my parents, so it was either escape, or die. A few years later, while Heller got to fighting Mercer, I had been dragged somewhere off planet. This is my attempt at adapting.
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A huge thanks to Legionary for letting me use his multiverse for this story.
Chapters (4)
Such potential wasted it sound like a good trust me I know that beginning are hard to writeing a story is like pushing a Boulder down a hill it's hard at first but gets easier as the momentum goes forward what I'm saying is write more words
.... Needs more description on form feels like he only used rainbows and no one else's since none of them have black or red hair. Should really worked something about it when making it he ended up with a couple coloured stripes in his hair or such.
You got my attention my friend because I love playing prototype. But I must agree with mr xlu here, need more words but I understand that this is your first fic so I hope you get better on your writing skills and Good Luck
(P.S I am tracking this fic cause I love a story that is based with my favourite game that i once played
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7677846 minor spoilers ahead!
I loved playing prototype, but I always thought they were thinking way too small, considering DNA is code for all living things.....(meaning trees and animals as well)
Thank you very much for tracking my story and I am also looking for anyone to proof read and things of that nature. (It may be my first fic, but that doesn't mean it has to be bad.) I don't have too much time on my hands, but I try to work on it when I do have some.
7676818 I am starting small on the beginning chapters, as when I read stories I like to get a sense of what I'm getting into without too much time being spent on a story I don't even end up liking. I will be writing longer chapters as the story goes on. I would like to know what potential was wasted in what ,so far, has been written though.
7677016 I am trying to work on my descriptions, however I am certain I said that he had red highlights in blue hair. After all, if the locals all have "crazy" hair, having "normal" hair makes you look weird.
going to follow this story because i love the prototype game and its concept, but you do need to make the chapters longer i personally feel that chapters on this site should be more than two to three thousand words and no more than like 5 or 6 thousand eachyou know anything to were we dont finish reading in like 20 seconds or chapter that are to long like those chapters where there's like 30 thousand words and you just want the chapter to be over so you can take a break but that my honest opinion. but any way keep it up i love prototype stories. PS you should add this to the [PROTOTYPE] Fiction group
7680734 I am trying to keep the word count down for the first couple chapters, because I usually don't like spending time reading a story just to find out I don't really like it. The later chapters will have a word count more in the thousands. Thank you for tracking it! I don't really have a lot of time to do too much creative writing. I will try and write new chapters when I can though.
So.... nearly a month been waiting, when will a new chapter come out? i'll wait.
You updated it. Then cancelled it?
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Ya weird ain't it?
Why was this cancelled?
This was an unfinished chapter someone convinced me to polish off. Still cancelled for now. Might be resumed later.
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Lost inspiration. A lot of things I work on rely on passion of making it. Sometimes passion runs out and all thats left is a husk.
No comments? Sadness.....
Anyway pretty good start, no spelling errors i saw and great way to put things forward. But it is a little rushed, so slow down and try to add more detail to the story than just plain words. Otherwise it is good.