2: Ignorance
Back at the Astral Lord Territory a Lord had finally spotted what had happened "Very......Intriguing" said Xenath.
Ever-free Forest
"Hmm. Looks like I'm in some sort of overgrown forest. Who knows, it could be a jungle." He thought as he took a closer look of his surroundings.
He saw some sort of overgrown path nearby and jumped in the trees climbing (as silently as he can) through the branches. eventually he started to see a town through everything and decided to wait and observe what to do next.
Eventually he saw the 6 hybrids from before, all looking disheveled (most likely from walking through the wild forest.) When they were not paying attention he silently climbed down and took a loose hair from each of them trying to the best of his abilities to not let them know he was there, as they seemed to be very tired. Afterward, he slinked off to a nearby cave where he did his best to hide his heat signature, just in case something was watching.
Inside the cave, he started to look at patterns in the DNA from the hair he gathered and tried to form a disguise from what he found. There were, of course, a few errors. It took almost 4 hours to get the right shape, as well as to find out how the male forms look, without trying to overdo it. When he finished, he was left with a cyan 'fur' color with a short, blue hair and tail, each with red highlights; with a similar looking muscle structure to his human form. He also had jeans, and a blank gray t-shirt on.
“This will do nicely.” he thought. “Now, time to see what kind of information I can gather.”
As he made his way into the town, he was stopped by a pink blur, which then cleared up to be one of the hybrids from the castle.
“Hi! Who are you?! Do you wanna be friends?! I know you’re not my friend cause I'm friends with everyone in the town and I don’t know you, so it only makes sense that you’re new to town! And if you’re new to town, then we’re not friends yet! So do you wanna be my friend?!” she said over excitedly, without breath.
“Sure?” he responded, “Could you get off of me first though?”
“Yep!” she said as she bounded off of him, just staring at him, as if trying to ‘figure him out’.
Now that he got a better look of her, she had curly pink hair and tail, blue eyes, and pink fur. As far as clothes go she had on a pink t-shirt on with a cupcake design on it, along with a set of pink leggings.
“Seems like she enjoys the color pink.” he thought.
“You should meet me at Sugarcube Corner in 2 and a half hours, ok?” she said, jogging him from his thoughts.
“Sure.” he said.
“Pinkie Promise?” she asked.
He tilted his head in a questioning manner, obviously not knowing whatever a “Pinkie Promise” was.
“Okay, it goes like this, repeat after me,’Cross my heart, and hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye.’ alright?” she said, and with each section of the “promise” she had made an “X” motion over her left pectoral, a flapping motion with her arms, and from nowhere grabbed a cupcake to stick in her closed eye, licking it off afterwards.
“Cross my heart, and hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye.” he repeated.
“See you there!” she said, immediately disappearing and pushing up enough dust to blind him for a little.
“This is going to be a long day, isn’t it?” he thought, face-palming and shaking his head.
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Such potential wasted it sound like a good trust me I know that beginning are hard to writeing a story is like pushing a Boulder down a hill it's hard at first but gets easier as the momentum goes forward what I'm saying is write more words
.... Needs more description on form feels like he only used rainbows and no one else's since none of them have black or red hair. Should really worked something about it when making it he ended up with a couple coloured stripes in his hair or such.
You got my attention my friend because I love playing prototype. But I must agree with mr xlu here, need more words but I understand that this is your first fic so I hope you get better on your writing skills and Good Luck
(P.S I am tracking this fic cause I love a story that is based with my favourite game that i once played
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7677846 minor spoilers ahead!
I loved playing prototype, but I always thought they were thinking way too small, considering DNA is code for all living things.....(meaning trees and animals as well)
Thank you very much for tracking my story and I am also looking for anyone to proof read and things of that nature. (It may be my first fic, but that doesn't mean it has to be bad.) I don't have too much time on my hands, but I try to work on it when I do have some.
7676818 I am starting small on the beginning chapters, as when I read stories I like to get a sense of what I'm getting into without too much time being spent on a story I don't even end up liking. I will be writing longer chapters as the story goes on. I would like to know what potential was wasted in what ,so far, has been written though.
7677016 I am trying to work on my descriptions, however I am certain I said that he had red highlights in blue hair. After all, if the locals all have "crazy" hair, having "normal" hair makes you look weird.
going to follow this story because i love the prototype game and its concept, but you do need to make the chapters longer i personally feel that chapters on this site should be more than two to three thousand words and no more than like 5 or 6 thousand eachyou know anything to were we dont finish reading in like 20 seconds or chapter that are to long like those chapters where there's like 30 thousand words and you just want the chapter to be over so you can take a break but that my honest opinion. but any way keep it up i love prototype stories. PS you should add this to the [PROTOTYPE] Fiction group
7680734 I am trying to keep the word count down for the first couple chapters, because I usually don't like spending time reading a story just to find out I don't really like it. The later chapters will have a word count more in the thousands. Thank you for tracking it! I don't really have a lot of time to do too much creative writing. I will try and write new chapters when I can though.