Discord invites himself to Twilight's slumber party.
Rated teen just in case. Contains Fluttercord and Applespike. YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED
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I'm not sure I should be the one who offers constructive advice, as I am not particularly well-known (or even 'known') round these parts, but ...
To start, I would always double-check for grammar errors and the like before posting. Those who come across so many mistakes early may not stick around for the finish.
More attention to detail, I think, would help too. Some parts read like a stream of consciousness. Sometimes hard to follow everything going on.
When I read a Fic, I try to envision it as an unseen episode (possibly airing after 10pm) and follow along in my mind. Really good Fics make that task easy. Not-so-good Fic make the task difficult.
I read the phrase Discord said while using his magic to dramatically act it out, and it's hard to visualize. Too much left for the imagination, I guess. A bit vague.
I also try to avoid having different characters speak in the same paragraph, though that might be personal preference. (I admit that I have an easier time with 'script' formatting, which of course is not allowed on this particular site.)
(And Discord actually offering to clean up? That was more trippy than the whole thing with Pinkie Pie.)
Have you read the writing guide here? http://www.fimfiction.net/writing-guide
(I admit that I have not done so. Probably should, at some point.)
That guide might offer insight as to how to further your pony-fic writing aspirations.
Well, those are my two bits. Certainly hope you continue writing.
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Thanks, I'll try to be more descriptive in the next chapter.
Here is a advice!
Planning is a necessary thing for a multi chapter story.
After all! You need to know exactly what scenes I'll be writing, what order they'll be in, and how the plot will flow from beginning to end, or otherwise, the story may just end up abandon halfway. Trust me! I'm done many stories that I abandon halfway, so for experiences, I can tell you that. If you planning to have a story with multi chapters. You need to have an idea what order they'll be in, and how the plot will flow from beginning to end, or otherwise, you may abandoned your story halfway.
Anyway! That's my advice, and I hope you continue with this story.