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Aether Spark


I'm a highly imaginative and clever storymaker with a great imagination and desire to make great stories, i'll even help others with whatever they need and revive dead stories. :)

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Discord grows tired of Twilight and friends not getting that chaos magic is unlike theirs. So he then decides 'What if they were to see it for themselves'... And that was how Equestria was unmade.

[This story was a long work in process and I'm hyped to show it, this story would have been pretty subpar were not for my editor George. I owe the awesomeness of this story to his skills.]

Part one of the chaos trilogy

Chapters (9)
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Is this a crossover with MLP: Chaos is Dark Magic?

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Never heard of that story tbh.

Can you describe it?

Coverart Sauce: https://www.deviantart.com/heilos/art/Organized-Chaos-512777210 (SFW)

Haven't read this one yet, but it's going on my "read asap" list. :twilightsmile:

I have a feeling this might evolves into Magical Mystery Oops multiply by six. This should be grand.

oooooooh boy this gonna be GOOD

One down, five to go.

I wonder how annoyed Discord will be that twilight is a symmetrical draconequus.

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this seems like just the *perfect* thing for him to twig out about.

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I noticed that too, perhaps it's because Twilight is always so organized even her chaos is organized. :rainbowlaugh:

Comment posted by Crystonian deleted January 5th

Let the chaotic fun begin!

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The other four might be annoyed by this. But I am dreadful to think what would Pinkie might do...
Let's hope Equestria is still standing at the end of the day.

I just realized that if Twilight found this change difficult, the others are going to find it worse. Twilight at least has experience being in a non-pony form, and is used to strange effects of magic (even if she's not exactly used to CHAOS magic) but the other five? Pinkie might be alright, she's pretty chaotic as is, but I can just imagine the fit Rarity will have, or how angry Rainbow will be that she has to relearn flying. These next few chapters are going to be fun, I can't wait to see how the others are coping....Or perhaps more accurately, not coping.

I can imagine in the end Discord is going to regret what he did, there's no telling how overpowered the Mane Six or should I say Twisted Six, will become. And I do mean... OVERPOWERED. :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

P.S. why "Twisted" Six? Well. They have very flexible bodies now and even Chaos Magic is very twisted. >:)

Nice pictures. Wait oh god PINKIE!

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Pinkie is probably the best adjusted of them, honestly.

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There’s also the possibility that her being chaotic makes her unable to chaos magic and thus making her a normal pony and his being chaotic by not being chaotic.

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nope, she can use chaos magic

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Oh god we’re all going to die.

“Ah agree, clearly we didn’t get the message across the first time when we said we wanted a break.”

That is NOT Discord’s intention, AJ. But you’ll learn it soon enough.

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Here’s hoping that her reaction to nigh-unfiltered Chaos Magic hasn’t driven Pinkie any more round the bend that’s up the wall. I’m just hoping she doesn’t go Orendi (Pinkendi?) on us all.

A few of the characters are feeling a bit off to me. I didn't enjoy Pinkie's blatant 4th-wall shenanigans, Rarity's mane shouldn't be distressing her this much after "It's not the Mane Thing About You", and talking animals seems like one of the last things that would distress Fluttershy (who can understand animals through her special talent).

The other three seem okay.

Not off to a great start, but I'll see how I feel about the story in a chapter or two.

Dang. Looks like Discord is just being a smug jerk, and not even in an interesting way. I don't think this story is for me.

And you overused the word "irate".

As Discord reaches Twilight’s room he spots an owl sitting on a perch next to her door who saw him approach. "Ah, Twilight's inevitable guardian of the night. So what do you intend on doing to protect the library?"

This paragraph and one or two after are present-tense when the rest of the story is past-tense.

Yeah, considering how well Pinkie handled getting chaos magic in the show... we’re doomed.

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There is a very good reason that Derpibooru has the "pinkiecorn" tag implying "xk-class end-of-the-world scenario".

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Pfft, that was just Season 9 writing.

Everyone knows Pinkie is a proto-draconequus already! :pinkiegasp:

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I didn’t even know that clip existed thank you.

Pinkie wont be like Discord. She probably woke up, noticed and snapped herself back to normal and fell back asleep again.

I have to say, so far, this looks like an amusing start. Yeah, I could definitely see Discord pulling these sort of pranks and I could, at the very least see the reactions of two-thirds of the Mane 6 (Pinkie might enjoy harmless mischief, but I could see her getting upset by the pony who is like a second father to her getting turned into cardboard), but as another reviewer pointed out the pranks on Rarity and Fluttershy should not have upset them THAT much (Rarity because of previous experience, Fluttershy because the talking animals deal would be barely noticeable with HER special talent). I could especially see Rainbow getting freaked out by clouds looking for payback.

All the same, the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up ARE generally well done and I'm off to the next chapter.

Again, this IS a quite interesting chapter with a rather good job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Yeah, I COULD see Discord pulling something like this just to teach the girls and Spike just how difficult it is to manage chaos magic.

Anyway, on to the next chapter.

Excellent job on this chapter. Greatly adored the work that went into the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Yeah, I could see Discord reflecting on Twilight not bothering with guards (though, to be fair, most of Twilight's intruders would be beyond the abilities of most guards to handle, even if said guards were actually competent). And, yeah, I could see Twilight reflecting on how she never learned to snap her fingers when in her human body, but I DID really like Spike helping Twilight learn on that front. And, yeah, Starlight and Spike's reaction to Twilight reacting so calmly to her usual preferred order being disrupted WAS pretty amusing AND spot on.

On to the next chapter.

Once again, this was an enjoyable chapter, with some great exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Indeed, I really liked Applejack and Rainbow's reactions to their new forms and learning to move about Oddly enough, Applejack has had the easiest time learning to move in her new body thus far.

And, yeah, Pinkie should probably be saved for last because she would have the easiest time adapting to the chaos magic.

Anyway, definitely looking forward to more of this.

"Darnit! How the hay do you fly with two different wings!?” Rainbow shouted in frustration.

Why bother flying when you can just - snap - and you are there. Come to think about it, I never seen Discord 'fly' either. He just floats around.

I can hear Discord's theme from the show playing in the background as all these scenes unfold. :rainbowlaugh:

About time some of them started figuring their magic out. Looks like things are just getting interesting!

“...It’s a sad statement to my day that I'm not as shocked as I should be…” Rainbow Dash sighed and got up, ready to go retrieve her most likely scared-out-of-her-wits friend.

Well, you, a former pegasus, just got rescued from falling to death by a talking, flying rabbit. You probably used up all your shock stock.

“You can go after them later! If my guess is right that was probably Fluttershy, and she’s going to be the most delicate case.” Twilight said, taking charge.

...for some strange reason, I feel like Fluttershy might not be the most delicate case; I can see Discord actually teaching her.

I wonder how long it'll be before Celestia and Luna get reports about massive chaos activity, and they decide to practically nuke the place to stop it?
Or something else to try to contain the chaos?

Just thought of something. With the 'spike' tag I was half expecting him to be turned too. If for nothing else than discord keeping male friend around.

Ooh and the pink demon is to follow. I'm nervouscited!

Again, the exchanges, characterizations, humor and future chapter set-up are all pretty well done. REALLY enjoyed seeing Rainbow and Twilight both getting some pointers on using their chaos magic FROM their inner chaos. Also got a laugh out of Rainbow encountering a flying Angel and liked seeing Twilight working to calm Rarity down.

Definitely looking forward to the next chapter.

You better not.
Those designs are awful.
You don't just throw random colors together. There isn't even any proportions done right here. At least Twilight had color scheme.
She was symmetrical. Why would you make others be random?

Comment posted by Librarium deleted January 6th

This was a wonderful idea, but with ooc characters and random magical voices explaining all of the inner workings of Chaos magic, it completely destroys the entire point of them learning chaos Magic. The point was for the mane 6 to have to learn the chaos magic isn't as easy to control as they think, and instead you've given them random magical instructors that are supposed to be part of them, but don't act anything like them. When Discord makes copies of themself, they act like discord. When the mane 6 have copies of themselves, they're completely different people? That doesn't make any sense. It feels rushed,, like shortcuts have been taken so that it could be created faster. You can make it slower you know, there are authors who have months in between each update. Make it slower, and have it make a bit more sense from a realistic perspective. The entire point of Discord doing this is mitigated if they have magical tutors. They are supposed to be learning why chaos magic needs to be released, and having constant struggle and magical tutors to do so doesn't really make sense.

Part of the point was to have them try to stop their magic, and to fail. If they're constantly running around using it all, and they have magical tutors telling them how to use it, then they won't learn the lesson Discord changed them for.

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