What laws govern the universe far beyond the firmament of Earth's sky? What is the true nature of the twinkling stars that fill the night and dazzle the eyes of ponies? Outside of the influence of Celestia's sun, what mysteries populate the void of space?
When an incarnate cosmic force millions of times more powerful than Celestia and Luna threatens to devour the planet, Twilight Sparkle, Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie are sent on a mission to the Empyrean at the edge of space, to beseech the only being with the ability to save them: the Unmoved Mover, the impetus which drives the mechanizations of all the universe.
Meanwhile, on Earth, the Princesses are forced to deal with the tyranny of their reigning King without upsetting the balance of the galactic hierarchy, lest they themselves suffer at the mercy of the Elements of Harmony.
Editors: SSky and Nerevar117.
Cover art: "Celestial Navigation III" by lordsong on deviantArt.
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My interest has been piqued.
This is very interesting. But for some reason, all I can think of is google.ca/search?tbm=isch&source=mog&hl=en&gl=ca&client=safari&tab=wi&q=galactis&sa=N&biw=320&bih=356#i=7
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image is supposed to be Galactus, eater of worlds.
last line lol
1331518 Galactus was actually one of the inspirations for Apollyon. Also, Titan from The Immortal Game and a little bit of Dr. Manhattan. Visual inspirations were the zodiac associated with Sagittarius and the Biblical description of Abaddon's (also known as Apollyon) plague of locusts.
By the way, you may have already been told this, but the correct version of your name would be "Pax Equorum." Currently it means "peace horse," but I assume it should mean "peace of the horses" (like how Pax Romana means "peace of the Romans").
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So meticulous
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Meh, I know it isn't proper Latin, but I prefer how Pax Equus sounds. But you really seem to know your stuff, how much research did you do for the backstory?1331648Also, I wouldn't say meticulous, just knows his Latin.
The Doctor approves of this.
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1331702 I generally research for anything I write, especially when looking for inspiration. I wasn't sure what to make Apollyon look like, so I went to Wikipedia and looked up his namesake and his astronomical alignment.
Also, I don't know much Latin. I actually started fiddling around with another project today that had something to do with a Pax Equorum. And I'm pretty sure saying "meticulous" was meant to be an inside joke between us (he's one of my editors)
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Well now don't I feel silly.
Heh, it's not very often that you see a fic with the level of attention that this one has. Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon.
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Trust me, the attention to detail he goes into is mind-boggling.
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No, I was legitimately questioning your motive of pointing out a name.
How do they get there? With the Lunar Banishment Cannon, of course.
1331877 Shouldn't be too terribly long. Maybe a week or two at most.
1331937 Like I said, because I started derping around with another project that just happens to involve that, tangentially.
1332343 Surprisingly accurate, actually. Well, one of the three words.
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One out of three huh? I pick Cannon, because
Will read later. Added to said list.
EDIT: Btw, your source link doesn't work. I wanted that as my desktop background... XD
1332588 Perhaps.
1333972 Fimfiction screwed that up, not me... I don't think it's the right dimensions, but here you go.
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Oh. And yeah, I'll have to crop it or something. Thanks anyways!
Two problems I see here so far:
(1) (And perhaps most important) You have Twilight mention multiple times that the anomaly she is seeing is "moving toward Earth." It's generally agreed (on here, at least) that Equestria isn't on Earth, but on a different planet entirely (which some have named Equus, but, as far as I can tell, no consensus on the name of the planet has been reached).
(2)
In Elizabethan grammar, which Luna speaks, "Takest" is third-person-singular, the equivalent of "takes" in modern English. Luna is giving a command here, so what you want is second-person-imperative, which is the same as our modern (You) "Take."
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(1) Nope. Besides, for simplicity's sake, it's much easier to just refer to the planet as "Earth" when they're outside the atmosphere, plus it makes it easier to say why all of the stars in the sky are in the same position. Not that this is our universe, though. Obviously.
(2) Nope. Second-person singular (simple present). I did my research, I assure you--all of Luna's dialogue will be accurate.
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[Looks at links] Hm...Well all right then, I stand corrected. My apologies.
You may have noticed that each chapter is longer than the last. This trend is intentional, and will be followed throughout the story with only minor variations in the growth rate. Chapter four is one of such variations--the word count is too damn high.
I found the word count to be quite comfortable actually. Nice OC, by the way. As well, no grammatical errors I could spy. Good work!
The word count feels natural, no need to worry. Good OC by the way, although I really feel that the "chef" position was really a major excuse to have Pinkie Pie (because in all reality food would come in handy protein and vitamin needles, however unsatisfying it sounds).
1399643 Actually, I decided to have a chef before I even decided to take Pinkie, as inspired by Jules Verne's De la Terre à la Lune (which was also, obviously, the inspiration for the shape of the Aethon and its method of leaving the atmosphere). Ponies have had no excuse to develop freeze-dried meals, if they even have the level of technology to do it (and if they do, do they keep the machines hidden in waiting for the mission?). If we assume they didn't have the technology three millennia ago, why would they go through the trouble of switching it out just for worse-tasting meals?
Besides, even if they've already developed space food and have the means to produce it nearby and ready, why? Celestia wields the power of the sun, so energy isn't a problem to an extent. The mission is backed by the Princesses and the Royal Treasury, so money isn't a problem to an extent. All the decision would really effect is added convenience (giving the crew more time to be bored and read) and worse taste.
I thought navigator would be the one people would think was an excuse, because really, it was. Rainbow's never really navigated a thing in her life.
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RD was the excuse role, as MBM said. :P
Actually, the chef was the first role he had down XD. The chef role was based off a book about a space journey.
1414347 They say brevity is wit...
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