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Night--Mist


Son of Princess Luna. A Bat Pony Alicorn who's small for his age.

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His name is Chad Harding. Yeah, not a name that seems to jump at you. He is one of few in the world who has been able to harness only some magical abilities. He works for some scientists who wish to make the world better. But when an experiment that was meant to transport people to other places on earth went wrong, that's where his story begins in Equestria. Follow him as he begins his life in a world of ponies and creatures that were only seen as myth or pure fantasy in his home world. Read as he must learn of the Magic of Friendship and how he will help change Equestria for the better and how Equestria changes him, like literally.

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 55 )

What happened to the magic within? I like that story...:applejackunsure:

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Don't worry, I'm still continuing on that story as well as my other stories. I just had this Idea and it had to be put out there, do you like or dislike? I hope I did good.:twilightsmile:

2303026 oh ok. and just saying this it feels kinda rushed. but good. have a spike :moustache:
and I like it

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Thanks. Have an Applejack. :ajsmug:

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Wow. Yikes. So. Many. Ponies. Can't. Hold. Them. Up. (Collapse). Following ponies pile on top: :ajsmug::fluttershyouch::pinkiehappy::rainbowderp::raritystarry::scootangel::eeyup::unsuresweetie::trollestia::twilightoops::applecry::derpytongue2: Oh and a dragon.:moustache:

SHOCK WAVE IS NOT A BLOODY HUMAN'S NAME.

Landing in Canterlot Castle, Becoming Friends with everypony (in ten seconds flat :rainbowdetermined2: ) and last but not least, he will become one of the Royal Guards.

The Story ist good but for me to fast.

2304771 Could be a code name, we don't know exactly.

It's a bit jarring that he accepts this all so quickly. The fact that the ponies trust him almost instantaneously is a bit strange to. I have favorited but I will reserve my thumbs up for a later date.

hmm, rushed but interesting. fix that wall of text at the start.

It's a great story. But i feels a little bit rushed.

Really good story but a bit rushed

That was a nice chapter; I can't wait to read the next one. :twilightsmile:

Yeah, that's a pretty cool story, but i find the start being rushed a little, like, the encounter between the ponies and the human was pretty fast! :applejackunsure:

Awesome dis is good! NEED MOAR!!!:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:


Also what's with Pinkie Pie being out of character?:rainbowhuh:
She would have thrown a party by now.


Oh well it's your story so certain shit doesn't need to happen.:moustache:

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Hey now, watch the language. I don't know how many readers are viewing this story that don't want to here certain words. Anyways, about the party, I'll see what I can do. Stay tuned.:twilightblush:

Comment posted by Tison deleted Mar 28th, 2013

Overall it felt very rushed but at the same time I am looking forward to how this story will develop!
A few problems I found--

"Well ya'll could stay at my place in Ponyville at the apple farm, Sweet Apple Acres, that is if it's alright with you your highnesses," Apple Jack offers.

There's no space in Applejack...:ajbemused:

He was amazed by the scenery of this world and wondered how he had never heard of this show he was in.

Bit of a logic flaw here, how does he even know it's a show in the first place if he had never heard of it before, and not an entirely new planet, or it's own reality with no connection to ours?:pinkiegasp: (Besides the one he just made.):twilightblush:
I really like the story and hope that my bit of criticism helps you make this even better!:pinkiehappy:

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Thanks for the help. I made the corrections and changed the second mistake best I could. I support constructive criticism and suggestions to my stories. I like to keep my readers interested. I thank everypony who helps me out with my stories.:twilightsmile::pinkiehappy::ajsmug:

Shock shock, hump-a-dump, You got lazered!:pinkiecrazy:


Good.:pinkiehappy: *Real expression--->:pinkiecrazy:

Y3S those wolfs can suck a rock.

Shock wave superior equines inferior.

This story? Love it! Keep up the good work dude!

People were going about their daily lives as were all the Animals.
People were going about their daily lives as were all the Animals animals.

2990637 Soon Shock wave went onto the platform and he had his father's old sword with him, should he run into trouble on the other end.
Soon Shock Wave went onto the platform and he had his father's old sword with him, should he run into trouble on the other end

Comment posted by Officialmoxieteenz731 deleted Jan 18th, 2014
JBL

Is this a human turned pony story?

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Not at this time. The thought has crossed my mind, but I have to think of a good way to approach it. Might think about making a sequel when all is said and done.

JBL

3523605 So...... you're thinking about turning him into a pony some time in the future?

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Yes. I do have one idea in mind to make that happen in one of the future chapters, but I have to think about what to write before hand, er, hoof to make it work.

JBL

3523614 Ah, that's too bad then.

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Um, how soon did you want him ponified, if it's not too bold too ask?

JBL

3523657 No, I don't want him ponified at all. I generally stay away from stories like that, which is why, if I suspect a story to contain said element, I usually ask first before I begin to read. Saves me the disappointment.

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Ah I see, so your saying if I do the ponification, you will stop reading, but if I don't you will continue to read. You got me in a corner with that decision now.

JBL

3523686 Heh, you should do what you believe is right for your story, and what your readers want, not just me.

Comment posted by hs0003 deleted Nov 23rd, 2013

5128346 On it right now, please be patient.

Such... Goodness... :pinkiesmile: For the worlds goodest fanfic writer award I give you Night--Mist! His stories are mind blowing!!!

And yes goodest was intentional. :rainbowlaugh:

cacajun skin? .... Caucasian by any chance? sorry for nitpicking but thats just an odd mistake

6894554 Sorry, spell check didn't catch it, so I'll change that when I can.

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