"Hey God, are you there? It's me, Rainbow Dash," the prismatic-haired girl said to herself as she lay spread-eagle on the carpet. "Why am I surrounded by pussies?
1- that made me laugh more than I should 2- missing quote at the ending
"What about me, huh?" Pound asked, stepping in front of Spike and nearly causing him to trip. "What am I?" "A broken condom–" "Isn't the weather just lovely today?" Fluttershy interrupted, shooting Spike a displeased glare.
You made your way to my top 5
"Yes sir, that's my dad," Fluttershy lied, grabbing Pound's palm and following. "He just loves jacking those lumbers."
Man I'm loving this, looking foward to the next chapter
And now, this one is longer. Is each one going to get perpetually more chapters? My heart will be a mess at the end of it. Unless you make the last chapter some kind of comedic harem chapter. Otherwise, I'm going to cry, I think.
I mean... it wouldn't surprise anyone, but I swear it's ONLY Flutters that writers ever give the baby crazies. Well, except some of the future fics where you'll occasionally get Rarity going "MY BIOLOGICAL CLOCK IS TICKING AAAAAAH!"
6848530 Hopefully not, but I'm not sure at this point. This chapter needed a lot more pacing than the last two, and I didn't want to make something close to 20k words if it got that long.
6848651 Thanks! That's the objective of the story, or at least what I'm trying to accomplish. It's less about how the girls and Spike work as a couple, and more about how they interact with and react to him. The Main 6 are the main characters, Spike is more or less the reason for the story.
"Hey God, are you there? It's me, Rainbow Dash," the prismatic-haired girl said to herself as she lay spread-eagle on the carpet. "Why am I surrounded by pussies?"
{ "Sorry, Dashie, but I used up all the awesome when I made you."
I think the thing that threw me off with the first episode is the sex tradeoff of Big Mac for Spike, which made it feel really clopficcy, as opposed to this trade, which is Spike's help with babysitting alongside Fluttershy cleaning.
And I love the Disney Princess feeling of Fluttershy and her woodland friends cleaning a castle. :)
You know this chapter was great. Pinkie and Fluttershy's joke on Soike was hilarious and I really like the attitude of the Cakr twins. The play family game with Spike, Shy, and the Twins was adorable and it's cute that Shy has a sketchbook with drawings of Spike and sheMs starting to get confident enough to pinch his ass. This chapter was great and I hope that the second part comes soon,
6848922 It really didn't come across as sarcasm. A), AJ rolls her eyes at him as if she thought he was serious, and B), Spike refrains from acknowledging her strength, as if he were trying to dodge around the truth.
So... did anyone else read Pumpkin "wishing she was taller" as she watched Spike walk away to be amusing? Sounds like someone might have a precocious little crush.
Not gonna lie, I wasn't exactly looking forward to Fluttershy's part as she came off as the least 'qualified' so to speak in this story - except her comments which were both biting and hilarious in the last chapter - but HOLY SHIT I'm so glad you proved me wrong. Spike was cool as a cucumber, I can sense a tiny bit of a crush forming from Pumpkin towards our hero, and Fluttershy was great. Just great, more complex than she lets on, she seems like a blast to have as a friend, and her little moments o mischief always hit the nail on the head.
...This is the best Fluttershy evar. There, I said it. I wanna meet someone like her now. Damn you for creating this awesome version of her! Also, baby crazies. I love it
She smiled at him mischievously, and Spike started to wonder if she'd been spending too much time around Pinkie. "You just wait until the kids are asleep."
6849424 No, it was vary clearly sarcasm, you just have a skewed view on thing. Also, don't be so quick lash out like some over zealous social justice warrior.
It's becoming a trend that every chapter mentions how superior big mac is to spike, somehow a freaking DRAGON feels inadequate compared to a PONY. SERIOUSLY?
Not... exactly. In this story, a young HUMAN feels less masculine than the local superhumanly strong, kind-hearted and handsome farmer. And as soon as Spike feels those feels, it's proven that he's still attractive in his own right, just in a different way to Big Macintosh.
So, the entire plot of the story is about SUBVERTING what you're saying... and on top of that, the characters are not ponies or dragons in the first place. Which kind of makes it all totally irrelevant anyway.
6885895 oh so this is one of the story's that change them all from unique creatures and into humans, nothing wrong with that just well... there is all ready tons upon tons of it, and it gets kind of boring, so that why the porn gets weird. bring back the weird please.
thats what its for, the only real reason other reasons are just excuses.
As in, the mention of hands and fingers and breasts and the detailed physical descriptions, and the discussion of Spike being a young MAN, and all that other stuff... at no point did you realise this isn't how a pony works?
6890731 Sorry, I was in the process of writing the chapter when I accidentally pressed the 'publish' button. Had to undo it because it wasn't finished yet.
Spike, buddy. Ain't nobody ever taught you that still waters run deep?
1- that made me laugh more than I should
2- missing quote at the ending
You made your way to my top 5
Man I'm loving this, looking foward to the next chapter
ChillOut
Oh you damn tease.
~Skeeter The Lurker
I've had to say that more times than I probably should.
And now, this one is longer. Is each one going to get perpetually more chapters? My heart will be a mess at the end of it. Unless you make the last chapter some kind of comedic harem chapter. Otherwise, I'm going to cry, I think.
I mean... it wouldn't surprise anyone, but I swear it's ONLY Flutters that writers ever give the baby crazies. Well, except some of the future fics where you'll occasionally get Rarity going "MY BIOLOGICAL CLOCK IS TICKING AAAAAAH!"
6848530 Hopefully not, but I'm not sure at this point. This chapter needed a lot more pacing than the last two, and I didn't want to make something close to 20k words if it got that long.
Okay, look, I'll admit I had this down as 'amusing idea for a clopfic' when it started. And the Applejack story didn't change my mind.
But this? This? Dude, this is changing the story into a character study as the girls interact around Spike that's really getting interesting.
Especially for the bit about jacking the lumbers. :)
6848651 Thanks! That's the objective of the story, or at least what I'm trying to accomplish. It's less about how the girls and Spike work as a couple, and more about how they interact with and react to him. The Main 6 are the main characters, Spike is more or less the reason for the story.
{ "Sorry, Dashie, but I used up all the awesome when I made you."
{ "Ha! Knew it!"
6848701 Do you know what sarcasm is?
Sees this story has updated
Yaaay! I wonder if it's a quickie though.
Sees the char count is 10K exact.
Nope, time to get ready.
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I think the thing that threw me off with the first episode is the sex tradeoff of Big Mac for Spike, which made it feel really clopficcy, as opposed to this trade, which is Spike's help with babysitting alongside Fluttershy cleaning.
And I love the Disney Princess feeling of Fluttershy and her woodland friends cleaning a castle. :)
Real talk: If I was Fluttershy, I could not be friends with these fucking lunatics.
I laughed so fucking hard at so many points in this story.
You know this chapter was great. Pinkie and Fluttershy's joke on Soike was hilarious and I really like the attitude of the Cakr twins. The play family game with Spike, Shy, and the Twins was adorable and it's cute that Shy has a sketchbook with drawings of Spike and sheMs starting to get confident enough to pinch his ass. This chapter was great and I hope that the second part comes soon,
6848922 It really didn't come across as sarcasm. A), AJ rolls her eyes at him as if she thought he was serious, and B), Spike refrains from acknowledging her strength, as if he were trying to dodge around the truth.
Is this the end to Fluttershy's ending?
Because this chapter seems to end with quite the suggestive cliffhanger.
6849424 It's called lampshading.
6849435 No, there's going to be a part 2. I had to split it up so it wouldn't be anywhere close to 20k in a single sitting.
And here I thought your Fluttershy ark would include this at some point:
But seriously, good chapter. Just gotta wait for the next part now...
Damn Spike, that was so much bullshit you could fertilize a dessert!
Why does this seem so true every time I see kids?
Also I died.
Oh my god, Pinkie, just oh my god.
Unsmiley. Update this. Immediately.
Please?
Cake Twins: Do you have someone you love more than anything?
Spike: (sniffles)
Cake Twins: Do you value your teeth?
So... did anyone else read Pumpkin "wishing she was taller" as she watched Spike walk away to be amusing? Sounds like someone might have a precocious little crush.
Congratulations, Spike. You're someone's Rarity.
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Not gonna lie, I wasn't exactly looking forward to Fluttershy's part as she came off as the least 'qualified' so to speak in this story - except her comments which were both biting and hilarious in the last chapter - but HOLY SHIT I'm so glad you proved me wrong. Spike was cool as a cucumber, I can sense a tiny bit of a crush forming from Pumpkin towards our hero, and Fluttershy was great. Just great, more complex than she lets on, she seems like a blast to have as a friend, and her little moments o mischief always hit the nail on the head.
...This is the best Fluttershy evar. There, I said it. I wanna meet someone like her now. Damn you for creating this awesome version of her!
Also, baby crazies. I love it
Oh wow
Someone should tell Fluttershy what bukakke is before something bad happens.
I think that's all we need.
Fluttershy's father loves jacking wood.
6849424
No, it was vary clearly sarcasm, you just have a skewed view on thing.
Also, don't be so quick lash out like some over zealous social justice warrior.
Wow, that went from salty to sweet (and back) like whoa. Serious guilty pleasure (which Fluttershy would know something about).
It's becoming a trend that every chapter mentions how superior big mac is to spike, somehow a freaking DRAGON feels inadequate compared to a PONY. SERIOUSLY?
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Not... exactly. In this story, a young HUMAN feels less masculine than the local superhumanly strong, kind-hearted and handsome farmer. And as soon as Spike feels those feels, it's proven that he's still attractive in his own right, just in a different way to Big Macintosh.
So, the entire plot of the story is about SUBVERTING what you're saying... and on top of that, the characters are not ponies or dragons in the first place. Which kind of makes it all totally irrelevant anyway.
6885895 oh so this is one of the story's that change them all from unique creatures and into humans, nothing wrong with that just well... there is all ready tons upon tons of it, and it gets kind of boring, so that why the porn gets weird. bring back the weird please.
thats what its for, the only real reason other reasons are just excuses.
Damn you feature box, don't tease me like this! I thought it was there because of a new chapter!
EDIT: Wait, this is now at the top of my 'recently updated' list? What on Earth is going on?
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So... wait. You didn't know they were human?
As in, the mention of hands and fingers and breasts and the detailed physical descriptions, and the discussion of Spike being a young MAN, and all that other stuff... at no point did you realise this isn't how a pony works?
Did... did you actually read the story at all?
6891628 nope~ just got it on read later.
wait if spike is a human does that mean he is a dovahkiin with that dragon soul of his? that would be kinda cool.
6890731 Sorry, I was in the process of writing the chapter when I accidentally pressed the 'publish' button. Had to undo it because it wasn't finished yet.
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DON'T YOU TOY WITH OUR HEARTS LIKE THAT
So far so good. Can't wait to read more
famous last words
Great part 1! Cant wait for more chapters!
“Do you have a sister you love more than anything?“
“Do you value your teeth?“
Pervertshy.