S'ok either way. Long as I get more man-Spike being an adorable mildly-overwhelmed sweetheart at the center of his own really weird harem anime, I'm golden.
Well, you're definitely doing SOMETHING right when your story grabs my attention and keeps me hooked reading it for hours until I catch up. These stories have been fascinating so far and I've been really enjoying them, but the 'hub' they're all launching from, that first chapter, feels weirdly and inappropriately vulgar and raunchy now, given how serious and thoughtful and deep and introspective the ensuing stories have been so far. Which feels odd to say about a fic with this much sex in it anyway, but the feeling's there nonetheless.
Despite that, though, I'm really enjoying these stories and looking forward to more of them (and just dying to see the Rarity path).
--CG
(kind of surprised we haven't seen Pinkie's side of the wager yet, especially when she and Twilight had a perfect opportunity to discuss it just now. Really curious/hopeful to see where that suplot goes/who Twilight names for a private party and that it doesn't get pushed offscreen, because the subplot of her and Mac in the AJ path was exceptionally entertaining.)
So far, flawless characterization with equally fascinating dialogue and wonderful character development that definitely captivates my interest and holds it until the chapter is over.
On that note, I'm not only looking forward to seeing how Pinkie will win over Spike, but also how Dash, Rarity, and Twilight will. I think it will be less of winning him over and rather them getting past of their individual insecurities. For Twilight I think it might manifest as some kind of guilt, for Dash it'd be her own ego and hesitation for intimacy, and for Rarity...I'm actually stumped on her. I can see the possibility of it being the more somber out of the three but who knows I can see the others being the same given their behavior so far. The previous chapters with Applejack and Fluttershy were joyously surprising in how they unfolded, so I can't expect too much.
In the end though I know of at least one certain thing: I'M SO EXCITED FOR THE REST!!!
(Seriously this has to be in my top 3, if not number 1, Spike fic right now regarding relationships with members of the Mane 6)
I've always been a huge fan of brilliant, socially-perceptive Pinkie Pie. As the show has relegated her more and more into cheap comic relief, this interpretation of her character has gotten so frustratingly rare. I'm glad to see it alive and well here.
You continue to impress, as always. Looking forward to more.
I really thought this story was dead,sorry, but damn pinkie is almost a good a strategist as sun zu himself, please dont make me wait months for another chapter, also please do spilight its one of my favorite ships. What she did to rarity thou XD
Just, awesome! Don't die, Unsmiley! Just in general.
7384633 I noticed that too. I like how in the previous chapters when Spike conversed with the respective women, it was mainly about accepting a humble life style and he coming to terms with it. I can't wait to see the rest. :)
7385235 It did seem like he was going to continue with the usual absurd-comedy style à la Man About Town but I was just as surprised as you were when he released the first scenario with Applejack and as it turned out for me it was a like a perfect mix of absurd-comedy and something emotionally coherent and deep. That made this fic one of my favourites.
i like the story so far it will be intresting when twiliys and raritys parts come altho 1 thing i dont like is that i feal spike it kinda objectifide and that he is ok with it.my toghts :D keep up the good work
Reading this makes you realize how disgusting the prospect of manipulsting another person on a deep-psychological level is. Think women using sex to get men to do what they want. Think how Pinkie is analyzing Spike here to get what she desires. Think. And see, how unusually cruel it is.
Before even seeing this, and viewing some of the other comments, I'm definitely interested. And to be frank, I'm actually quite surprised that you are the author of this fiction, Mr UnSmiley, since other times I'm seen you vehemently lobby against Spike and him being in harems, along with others I will not mention. But then again, there's nothing against an author that will write whatever's he writing regardless of his opinion of the matter. I have to give you props for it. at least. Salud.
Whoops, I made a when I referred to the author. I mistakenly was thinking that the author was Mr. Ignornable, and ashamedly I thought that because the first handle I was thinking of when I saw the handle of the author was Mr. Ignorable instead of re-reading it and seeing that it's MrUnsmiley. And as a result of me mistaking MrUnsmiley for Mr. Ignorable, it made me think it was a quite peculiar thing that the author of a Spike Harem story would be someone that is well-known for pretty much bashing Spike and any ship with him and any or all of the Mane 6 (similar to another well known Spike hater, but I don't want to hijack the comments).
I'm sincerely sorry for that, MrUnsmiley. It does give me a glance to look into other stories that you have personally penned, and I'm pretty sure that I may have read a couple of them--I'm officially been online here since 2012. Again I'm sorry for any confusion.
7675996 Thorough reviews like this are my lifeblood. Thanks for typing all that out, it means a lot to me when people convey the things that my stories make them think about and feel.
Ever heard the term opposites attract? Not trying to sound like a fanatic Sparity defender (though I don't mind it) but I think your 'square peg in a round hole' analogy can apply to many successful relationships more than you might realize. You should read the fic "Lies and Lyres" by King Of Beggars as it explores this concept really well.
Also you mentioned this being a Harem story? Harems involve polygomy... these are self-contained what-if scenarios involving Spike with each of the Main Six.
There are plenty of proper Spike's harem stories in which he's involved with all of them concurrently. Not my cup of tea really though there are a few I find pretty well written.
7530785 actually I thought that originally, how they were in a sense manipulating spike , made me feel funny in a bad way.....still a good story though.
So I feel rainbowdash is next.....and my insticts tell me rarity after and then twilight will be last since she is closest to spike. But I could be wrong and rarity might be last so continue........very interesting.
WOW I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS FOR LIKE MONTHS AND YOU UPDATE WHEN I'M AT WORK
i cannot has sploosh at work ._.
you are cruel, mister unsmiley. you are a very cruel mister indeed.
7384539 This isn't really the kind of chapter you'd sploosh to anyway, but your enthusiasm is appreciated.
7384561 so you're a tease. gee golly gosh.
S'ok either way. Long as I get more man-Spike being an adorable mildly-overwhelmed sweetheart at the center of his own really weird harem anime, I'm golden.
That Pinkie...
Interesting observation about Spike and "alpha women"... especially since you've saved said alpha women for the back half of the story.
Also that milkshake sounds amazing.
Wooooooo new chapter
Oh man!
If anyone ever asks how to write Pinkie Pie, I'm just gonna point to this fucking chapter.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Well, you're definitely doing SOMETHING right when your story grabs my attention and keeps me hooked reading it for hours until I catch up. These stories have been fascinating so far and I've been really enjoying them, but the 'hub' they're all launching from, that first chapter, feels weirdly and inappropriately vulgar and raunchy now, given how serious and thoughtful and deep and introspective the ensuing stories have been so far. Which feels odd to say about a fic with this much sex in it anyway, but the feeling's there nonetheless.
Despite that, though, I'm really enjoying these stories and looking forward to more of them (and just dying to see the Rarity path).
--CG
(kind of surprised we haven't seen Pinkie's side of the wager yet, especially when she and Twilight had a perfect opportunity to discuss it just now. Really curious/hopeful to see where that suplot goes/who Twilight names for a private party and that it doesn't get pushed offscreen, because the subplot of her and Mac in the AJ path was exceptionally entertaining.)
Unsmiley, I swear to Christ that if you make me wait two more months for the next chapter...
So far, flawless characterization with equally fascinating dialogue and wonderful character development that definitely captivates my interest and holds it until the chapter is over.
On that note, I'm not only looking forward to seeing how Pinkie will win over Spike, but also how Dash, Rarity, and Twilight will. I think it will be less of winning him over and rather them getting past of their individual insecurities. For Twilight I think it might manifest as some kind of guilt, for Dash it'd be her own ego and hesitation for intimacy, and for Rarity...I'm actually stumped on her. I can see the possibility of it being the more somber out of the three but who knows I can see the others being the same given their behavior so far. The previous chapters with Applejack and Fluttershy were joyously surprising in how they unfolded, so I can't expect too much.
In the end though I know of at least one certain thing: I'M SO EXCITED FOR THE REST!!!
(Seriously this has to be in my top 3, if not number 1, Spike fic right now regarding relationships with members of the Mane 6)
I've always been a huge fan of brilliant, socially-perceptive Pinkie Pie. As the show has relegated her more and more into cheap comic relief, this interpretation of her character has gotten so frustratingly rare. I'm glad to see it alive and well here.
You continue to impress, as always. Looking forward to more.
When you uploaded the chapter, I think it cut out your spacing for your paragraphs. Its all one continuous blob.
I expect the next chapter on my desk tommorow morning.
...if not thats cool
I really thought this story was dead,sorry, but damn pinkie is almost a good a strategist as sun zu himself, please dont make me wait months for another chapter, also please do spilight its one of my favorite ships. What she did to rarity thou XD
Ron Perlman would disagree with you on that.
Just, awesome! Don't die, Unsmiley! Just in general.
7384633
I noticed that too. I like how in the previous chapters when Spike conversed with the respective women, it was mainly about accepting a humble life style and he coming to terms with it. I can't wait to see the rest. :)
7385235
It did seem like he was going to continue with the usual absurd-comedy style à la Man About Town but I was just as surprised as you were when he released the first scenario with Applejack and as it turned out for me it was a like a perfect mix of absurd-comedy and something emotionally coherent and deep. That made this fic one of my favourites.
Perhaps not the intended reaction, but I have to ask: did Applejack go camping by herself then?
7387050 Yep.
i like the story so far it will be intresting when twiliys and raritys parts come altho 1 thing i dont like is that i feal spike it kinda objectifide and that he is ok with it.my toghts :D keep up the good work
Reading this makes you realize how disgusting the prospect of manipulsting another person on a deep-psychological level is. Think women using sex to get men to do what they want. Think how Pinkie is analyzing Spike here to get what she desires. Think. And see, how unusually cruel it is.
Oh, god! Please not Hiatus!
So why is it on hiatus?
Before even seeing this, and viewing some of the other comments, I'm definitely interested. And to be frank, I'm actually quite surprised that you are the author of this fiction, Mr UnSmiley, since other times I'm seen you vehemently lobby against Spike and him being in harems, along with others I will not mention. But then again, there's nothing against an author that will write whatever's he writing regardless of his opinion of the matter. I have to give you props for it. at least. Salud.
7675494
Whoops, I made a when I referred to the author. I mistakenly was thinking that the author was Mr. Ignornable, and ashamedly I thought that because the first handle I was thinking of when I saw the handle of the author was Mr. Ignorable instead of re-reading it and seeing that it's MrUnsmiley. And as a result of me mistaking MrUnsmiley for Mr. Ignorable, it made me think it was a quite peculiar thing that the author of a Spike Harem story would be someone that is well-known for pretty much bashing Spike and any ship with him and any or all of the Mane 6 (similar to another well known Spike hater, but I don't want to hijack the comments).
I'm sincerely sorry for that, MrUnsmiley. It does give me a glance to look into other stories that you have personally penned, and I'm pretty sure that I may have read a couple of them--I'm officially been online here since 2012. Again I'm sorry for any confusion.
7675996 Thorough reviews like this are my lifeblood. Thanks for typing all that out, it means a lot to me when people convey the things that my stories make them think about and feel.
7677491 "I'm Yours", by Jason Mraz.
7675996
Ever heard the term opposites attract? Not trying to sound like a fanatic Sparity defender (though I don't mind it) but I think your 'square peg in a round hole' analogy can apply to many successful relationships more than you might realize. You should read the fic "Lies and Lyres" by King Of Beggars as it explores this concept really well.
Also you mentioned this being a Harem story? Harems involve polygomy... these are self-contained what-if scenarios involving Spike with each of the Main Six.
There are plenty of proper Spike's harem stories in which he's involved with all of them concurrently. Not my cup of tea really though there are a few I find pretty well written.
7755864 I'm talking about the thing I doodled, not the story part quoted!
7755864 Crude but amazing! Thank you for taking the time out to do something like this, I'm glad my story inspired that in you.
7530785 actually I thought that originally, how they were in a sense manipulating spike , made me feel funny in a bad way.....still a good story though.
So I feel rainbowdash is next.....and my insticts tell me rarity after and then twilight will be last since she is closest to spike. But I could be wrong and rarity might be last so continue........very interesting.