Now l... Honestly I don't know how to feel about this one. Not cause I am unsatisfied with what has occurred, oh no, I loved every second of it... Almost, but mostly cause I saw a part one, what happens in the next part or is the next part a different woman? I am worried there will be a part two to this story and I feel trepidatious on where it will go.
6808686 I believe each "Path" is each member of the Mane 6 after they win the bet, so the next 5 paths will be Rarity, Flutters, Dash, Pinkie, and Twily, in no particular order.
6808703 Kids this is why you shouldn't stay awake for 3 days, you can't even read a four letter word right. I read part instead of path... Someone, boss preferably, knock me out please!!
Man, this story really came out swinging. Based on the first chapter I was expecting pure and simple clop in all ways, not this. This is so, so much better than another clop story, this was perfectly paced and sweet and right in all the ways it possibly could be.
I was keeping an eye out for updates with mild interest before, but this chapter has got me hooked. If the other five's stories are as good as this one then this is going to be one exceptional fic.
I gotta say, this style seemed quite the departure from your earlier work. I mean your stories and characters can get excessively OTT and that's what make them hilarious but this was rather... sweet.
Ok, the sex scene between Twilight and Mac was funny and hot. Likewise, the way you made the build up for sex scene between Spike and AJ was amazing. They both became extremely close via camping, getting comfortable with their nudity, AJ expressing desires of escapism while Spike unashamedly tells her about his opinions about sex and the women of Ponyville, before culminating in a sensual yet emotionally intimate sex scene. The ending with AJ serenading Spike was incredibly sweet and I hope to see how the other girls would equal or top that. Thanks for this chapter. You get a fav.
Wow... Man, I really love clop fics, even more when they have a bit of story behind it, and you pulled both parts perfectly. Bravo, good sir. Bravo. Small typo, though:
It was something that, despite Applejack's affections for the young man, caused her no small amount of frustration, though she did well to hide it.
*After reading path 1's ending & AJ X Spike sex scene*
Did those two become max perverts after having sex once? I mean Spike was thinking ball gags and shit during it and idk if that's supposed to be normal.
Wow At first I thought that this is a typical "CLOP ALL THE MANE 6" story as usual, but I am very intrigued about how this is going. The time you took to develop the chapter is refreshing
And the Spike ships are totally unappreciated, so keep it up
Well that was a very well written peace of work. I'll be honest. Was more in it for, Spike and AJ, then, Twilight and Mac. Was nice of, AJ, to trade Mac, though. And thank you for not putting to much time on them. Not a ship I care to ride very much, but you handle their interaction very well.
And more points for make, AJ, first! My favorite part had to be the 20 questions!
The worst part about this is i love this applejack/spike ship you've set and infear for my heart if the others are just as good. I'm particularly afraid of Rarity's chapter
Love AJ's unique take on subtlety here. "It's nature, everything out here is naked. Including you and me now. Get used to it." Real smooth.
Also funny how AJ reacted in the end about Twi and her brother, while she and Spike are an item now too. Hypocrisy fun times! Especially if it still persists even after a month
Still though, this was an amazing read, can't wait to see more!
Good story so far but leaves me wondering. Is this going to be one of those stories where the heroine has to fight off all the other girls to keep her man or if it will be a harem or even an alt reality story where the bottle lands on a different person with each chapter. Which ever way it goes I cant wait for the next chapter.
I'll be straight, I skim over the actual clop- that level of detail is just kind of jarring when written out, especially with this cast, but that's not really your fault- but this was great at building Spike and AJ's relationship (and fleshing out Twilight and Mac as well). I'm honestly as enamored by AJ's thoughts of them building a life together as she is, and even as I look forward to the others getting their chances, this ending-cum-beginning makes me
>His tongue slithered out of Twilight's pussy, clinging to the roof and brushing so hard against her clit that Twilight swore she could count the taste buds as they passed.
>In that moment where he bottomed out, in that single infinitesimal moment in time, Twilight knew a peace that defined all understanding. She perceived the universe in motion around her, the cures to any and every disease, saw even the moment of her death in the far off future, and welcomed it all lovingly.
>Then McIntosh pulled his dick out of her,Twilight slid across the sheets with him because she was clamping so tight, and as he thrust back into her, Twilight could only scream "FUCK!" as the universe collapsed around her.
>In the heat of the moment she had answered Fuck No, I Want Your Big-Dicked Babies.
Simply outrageous. My brain just cannot wrap around how can someone write this well.
I jelly
The only thing I beg of you is to not stop writing like this.
"Fine, sure," he said, cracking a half-smile. "Besides, you'll need someone to keep you safe for when things get scary out there."
Applejack had rolled her eyes, hands planted firmly on her hips. "Thank goodness I've got such a big, strong man like yerself to keep me from harm's way," she drawled. Neither of them addressed the fact that Applejack could kick a tree in half if she so chose.
Why is this even here? I haven't even scrolled down yet, and Spike already looks like a fucking idiot with a delusional viewpoint of gender roles.
Post-read edit: Things definitely got better when the sex started. I love that AJ picks Spike up and carries him to the tent like what Tarzan would do with Jane.
6848701 He is sarcastically saying that she needs him to defend her. It literally points that out at the end of that quote by saying
Neither of them addressed the fact that Applejack could kick a tree in half if she so chose.
It's called lighthearted ribbing, me and my girlfriend do it all the time. I'll jokingly tell her to make me a sandwich, and she'll point out that she burns cereal and I'm the chef in the relationship.
There is no need to be up in arms about stereotypes all the time. Yes it used to be socially acceptable and looking back even most Men find it terrible. And yes the ones who don't fall under that "most men" deserve to be berated for misogyny. But joking about old gender stereotypes isn't sexist.
"If you could have anyone out of the six of us," she started, and this caught Spike's attention, "who would it be?" Spike hesitated, leaning back and looking at the night sky. "Pinkie," he decided, looking back at his companion. Truth be told, Applejack was surprised, but not out of disappointment. "Why not Rarity?" "I don't..." he sighed. "I don't think I feel that way about her anymore," he said, to Applejack's immense surprise. "Not as strongly, at least." At her insistent look, he continued. "It's just, the more I think about it, the more I felt ridiculous for ever really thinking it would happen. It feels like I'm in a different league than her, sometimes. Like she's operating on a different level than me." He spoke as if he'd thought about the subject at length. "And Pinkie isn't?" "Pinkie's on everybody's level," Spike stated, and Applejack found that she couldn't really argue that point.
DAAMMNNN.....that really threw me on a loop a bit...
I was with Applejack--it would be obvious that Spike would choose Rarity. But really undestanding his clarifications, it shows that Spike has truly mentally matured, even though there is still some time to go, if the initial scene in the stream was an indication. And Spike's right--unlike Rarity, Pinkie just clicks with everyone, and when it comes to trying to find a relationship, one have to look at people that are compatible. Rarity and Spike obviously were as a compatible as a square peg in a round hole--there's too much that has to be changed to even have a chance, and often times it's too much baggage and stress to go through it. Not to say that you shouldn't though--if you and your loved one can make everything work out despite those obstacles, more power to you; you've probably found your soulmate and never ever let him/her go.
THis is by far the best well-written story I have ever read on this site. Bar none. I will be re-reading this full story over and over till it's finished. I am curious as to what the story would be if it landed on Twilight.
That was surprisingly sweet, not what I was expecting. In a good way.
All my YES.
I lost it at "big dick babies"
Now l... Honestly I don't know how to feel about this one. Not cause I am unsatisfied with what has occurred, oh no, I loved every second of it... Almost, but mostly cause I saw a part one, what happens in the next part or is the next part a different woman? I am worried there will be a part two to this story and I feel trepidatious on where it will go.
6808686 I believe each "Path" is each member of the Mane 6 after they win the bet, so the next 5 paths will be Rarity, Flutters, Dash, Pinkie, and Twily, in no particular order.
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Kids this is why you shouldn't stay awake for 3 days, you can't even read a four letter word right. I read part instead of path... Someone, boss preferably, knock me out please!!
You are just the best Mr Unsmiley
6808686 I had a similar thought, but I came up with a reasonable solution.
What if each chapter is a "here's what would happen if *X* won the trade"?
This was spectacular, reminds me of how my current girlfriend and I came to be together. Keep it up my friend, your writing is outstanding.
Really great start looking forward to seeing more.
D'awww.
I think this is the only AppleSpike i've ever read, and damn... Hit me right in the feels.
Quite a interesting read. Looking forward to the other parts. Particularly Pinkie's. First on claiming Fluttershy is a closet S&M Queen or something.
Man, this story really came out swinging. Based on the first chapter I was expecting pure and simple clop in all ways, not this. This is so, so much better than another clop story, this was perfectly paced and sweet and right in all the ways it possibly could be.
I was keeping an eye out for updates with mild interest before, but this chapter has got me hooked. If the other five's stories are as good as this one then this is going to be one exceptional fic.
I gotta say, this style seemed quite the departure from your earlier work. I mean your stories and characters can get excessively OTT and that's what make them hilarious but this was rather... sweet.
WHO ARE YOU?!
Wow. Just...wow.
Ok, the sex scene between Twilight and Mac was funny and hot. Likewise, the way you made the build up for sex scene between Spike and AJ was amazing. They both became extremely close via camping, getting comfortable with their nudity, AJ expressing desires of escapism while Spike unashamedly tells her about his opinions about sex and the women of Ponyville, before culminating in a sensual yet emotionally intimate sex scene. The ending with AJ serenading Spike was incredibly sweet and I hope to see how the other girls would equal or top that. Thanks for this chapter. You get a fav.
Wow... Man, I really love clop fics, even more when they have a bit of story behind it, and you pulled both parts perfectly. Bravo, good sir. Bravo.
Small typo, though:
souldn't it be "a small amount"?
*After reading path 1's ending & AJ X Spike sex scene*
Did those two become max perverts after having sex once? I mean Spike was thinking ball gags and shit during it and idk if that's supposed to be normal.
Lovely!
But I wish you'd have gone a bit more with Twi and Mac.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Wow
At first I thought that this is a typical "CLOP ALL THE MANE 6" story as usual, but I am very intrigued about how this is going. The time you took to develop the chapter is refreshing
And the Spike ships are totally unappreciated, so keep it up
Well that was a very well written peace of work. I'll be honest. Was more in it for, Spike and AJ, then, Twilight and Mac. Was nice of, AJ, to trade Mac, though. And thank you for not putting to much time on them. Not a ship I care to ride very much, but you handle their interaction very well.
And more points for make, AJ, first!
My favorite part had to be the 20 questions!
The worst part about this is i love this applejack/spike ship you've set and infear for my heart if the others are just as good. I'm particularly afraid of Rarity's chapter
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No, he had it right. By putting "No small amount" it's saying that it caused her a large amount of frustration.
That was the perfect blend of sweet and erotic. Love it!
Love AJ's unique take on subtlety here.
"It's nature, everything out here is naked. Including you and me now. Get used to it."
Real smooth.
Also funny how AJ reacted in the end about Twi and her brother, while she and Spike are an item now too. Hypocrisy fun times! Especially if it still persists even after a month
Still though, this was an amazing read, can't wait to see more!
Good story so far but leaves me wondering. Is this going to be one of those stories where the heroine has to fight off all the other girls to keep her man or if it will be a harem or even an alt reality story where the bottle lands on a different person with each chapter. Which ever way it goes I cant wait for the next chapter.
I'll be straight, I skim over the actual clop- that level of detail is just kind of jarring when written out, especially with this cast, but that's not really your fault- but this was great at building Spike and AJ's relationship (and fleshing out Twilight and Mac as well). I'm honestly as enamored by AJ's thoughts of them building a life together as she is, and even as I look forward to the others getting their chances, this ending-cum-beginning makes me
...That said, I'll be in my bunk.
6810281 I think there was a misunderstanding. We saw it from AJ's perspective. She was thinking all that.
Simply outrageous. My brain just cannot wrap around how can someone write this well.
I jelly
The only thing I beg of you is to not stop writing like this.
Why is this even here? I haven't even scrolled down yet, and Spike already looks like a fucking idiot with a delusional viewpoint of gender roles.
Post-read edit: Things definitely got better when the sex started. I love that AJ picks Spike up and carries him to the tent like what Tarzan would do with Jane.
Well played, sir/madam/whatever-the-fuck-you-want-to-be, well played
6848701 He is sarcastically saying that she needs him to defend her. It literally points that out at the end of that quote by saying
It's called lighthearted ribbing, me and my girlfriend do it all the time. I'll jokingly tell her to make me a sandwich, and she'll point out that she burns cereal and I'm the chef in the relationship.
There is no need to be up in arms about stereotypes all the time. Yes it used to be socially acceptable and looking back even most Men find it terrible. And yes the ones who don't fall under that "most men" deserve to be berated for misogyny. But joking about old gender stereotypes isn't sexist.
Awwww, how heart warming!
And warming of other kinds
This fic is so good!!!!!!
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DAAMMNNN.....that really threw me on a loop a bit...
I was with Applejack--it would be obvious that Spike would choose Rarity. But really undestanding his clarifications, it shows that Spike has truly mentally matured, even though there is still some time to go, if the initial scene in the stream was an indication. And Spike's right--unlike Rarity, Pinkie just clicks with everyone, and when it comes to trying to find a relationship, one have to look at people that are compatible. Rarity and Spike obviously were as a compatible as a square peg in a round hole--there's too much that has to be changed to even have a chance, and often times it's too much baggage and stress to go through it. Not to say that you shouldn't though--if you and your loved one can make everything work out despite those obstacles, more power to you; you've probably found your soulmate and never ever let him/her go.
What song is she singing at the end?! It's one the tip of my tongue!
…Yeah, I'm just gonna read this again.
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Jason Mraz, I'm Yours
THis is by far the best well-written story I have ever read on this site. Bar none. I will be re-reading this full story over and over till it's finished. I am curious as to what the story would be if it landed on Twilight.
I really expecting this to be so well written and emotional. 10/10!