• Member Since 17th May, 2012
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Mr Unsmiley

Writing the stories you didn't know you wanted. I think.

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Holy shit this characterization.

Hot damn it's good.

Man, this is a version of the Mane 6 I haven't seen before. Horny as hell and with sarcasm at the tip of heir tongues, even from the mouth of Fluttershy.

at first i was skeptical but then i saw the comments and iam intrigued

Pinkie and Rainbow Dash are hilarious.

Don't you fucking dare to disappoint me. Thiz iz gunna B gud!

"I keep a gun in my purse in case it ever gets to be too much," Fluttershy disclosed.

I lost it...

>Horny and vulgar Mane 6

Nice, this should be good.

>Main love interest is Spike.

Even better.

>Sees author name.

Why am I not surprised? Great stuff Unsmiley, can't wait to see how this turns out.

Sweet Mother Mary giving Budda a lapdance! This is glorious!

This is gonna be good.

... So.

Let me get this straight.

The Human Main Six are playing spin the bottle with this, and whoever the bottle lands on will get to do whatever with Spike?

... Kay.

Just so you know, you are now creating six different timelines...

I wonder which will be the darkest...


:moustache: So let me get this straight - you spun the bottle to see who gets me and as it spun it wobbled and landed on its bottom
Pointing up to the ceiling? What the heck it that about?
We all get you!

Okay I read over this story, and the characterization seems both very in character, and very out of character at the same time. I don't know how you pulled that off, but I'm impressed.

Overall I've been laughing pretty damn hard at the witty back and forth banter. This is definitely worth reading further.

It's criminal how on-point your characterization is, despite the huge leap in appropriateness. As crass as they are, I could totally see the six talking like this in, like, five to ten years. Or if they were starring in a sitcom instead of a children's cartoon.

Also, your Spike is hilariously nonchalant, the perfect mixture of oblivious innocence and frank pervertedness. Though he is kind of an idiot in the third scene for not realizing that he probably shouldn't be anywhere near that bedroom door.

Good God man. How the fuck does anyone write this well? Fuck off, mate.

Ok. Alright, ok.

This'll be damn good, I suspect.


Blow us the fuck away, author.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Pretty fun so far, can't wait for more!

6788267 You magnificent bastard I'm going to have to steal that line now!

6787446 Damn straight it's good!

The title caught my interest. The premise drew me in. After reading this first chapter, you quite definitely have my attention. I'll be watching.

-everyone's human but not Equestria Girls somehow
-everyone's completely obsessed with sex and Spike
-Fluttershy isn't shy at all
Why am I clicking the favorite button?


I know, right? This is when I knew this fic was going in my favorites.

You've got them acting out of character, but in a believable way.

It's like you've taken the beam of light that is their personalities and moved back the wall of decency and appropriateness they were running into before. The light doesn't change, its aim doesn't change, it just goes farther down the way then it did before.

Normally I hate stories like this because they involve changing the personalities rather than just expanding them - but this seems like it could be fun.


I assume that it will have alternate endings based on who gets chosen so I vote Rainbow Dash first if you are taking requests.
Good story so far I will continue reading it.

Story actually seemed good right up until the Human tag killed it completely.

6790645 I'm truly sorry that you felt so compelled to express your distaste at my story's lack of horse fucking.

Man, every time I read one of your stories, Unsmiley, I'm reminded that at least half the reason I fucking love them so much is your work with dialogue and just overall character interaction. It's just so snappy and witty, and makes your stuff a joy to read, among other, well-written reasons. :rainbowwild:

Definitely going to be following along with this one, and thrilled to see you're still plugging away. Cheers!

... Vad fan gjorde jag just läst ...?
Well, good sir, thou hast piqued mine interest.

By all means, feel free to. There is more where that came from.^^

As always, that characterization.

this seems interesting can't wait for more. but I do find it weird that Twilight would refer to her friends as Spike's aunts. I find the age gap between Spike and the girls too short to view them as his aunts, but that's just me.

Also Twilight really doesn't seem to want her friends being with Spike. :twilightsheepish: = cock block

I love your Fluttershy :rainbowlaugh:

Fuck me running, this was entertaining. Normally I'm not big on the Spike coming-of-age stories but this one was not only oddly realistic but hilarious enough to want more. I wouldn't be me, however, if I didn't ask a question regarding Pinkie's "I know my dick gets hard" comment: Is that futa or typical obtuse Pinkie humor?

6792029 It would be the latter, I don't engage in those kinds of shenanigans.

oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooh yes

This: right here. Further proof that raunchy comedy is, hands down, the best comedy.

"I keep a gun in my purse in case it ever gets to be too much," Fluttershy disclosed.

HALP I CAN'T BREATHE :rainbowlaugh:

I kinda hope we get to see any other incidental spicy scenes in addition to Spike. *Nudge nudge wink wink* :raritywink:

Great dialog and pace, the characters are very well adapted and in general the story is very fun spiced with great saucyness, followed and liked, hope to see more of this soon, congrats!

Any bets on which one turns out to be the DARKEST TIMELINE?

whats the name of the tublr name? i seen that art style before but i cant put my finger on it

6796060 The artist is conoghee.

This is far from the worst second hand embarrassment I've ever had but damn it made the list. I could imagine the akward situation in which this all occurred I physically winced from the embarrasment that could be felt. Again you have a strong piece of work here. If only you updated more regularly, trust me I never lie, you could be one of the best fic writers I know.
I've never liked a fanfiction in which Twilight has another stallion besides Spike, assuming Spike exists. Mostly because it goes in a direction that cuts Spike from Twilight's life, either significantly or completely being the only flavor. Usually this would be where I stop reading, but because it is you, because of the esteem a friend of mine holds for your writing skill I will continue on.
Now onto the errors, error in this case, there was only one glaringly obvious mistake I read while going through this. When rainbow dash is exchanging quips with applejack after lying to Spike about the wager she says element of harmony instead of element of honesty which is what I assumed she meant.

6788736 This has to be the bonus ending. :3

6796354 oohh boy now i remember O///o

Fluttershy is killing me with the witty remarks :rainbowlaugh:

I must have more

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