It's date night for your parents. Which means you have a babysitter watching you tonight. Yet, this babysitter is different from the others. She's Princess Cadance, the newly crowned royalty-in-training. She loves her job. Perhaps, too much.
Sweet Celestia...I know it's been said before but this Cadance is fking dark. This is one of the few fics I've read where I get an unnervingly real sense of irreparable emotional damage being done.
Alright, from now on I'm starting a counter for every time I say "Yandere Cadance is Creepy" to myself in this story. This chapter alone kicks it off at five. The best part is that the way you write her still makes it so damn natural and believable...
While reading the newest chapter (Chapter 7), I was just as nervous as Cadence was throughout it until she got back to her room. I guess she didn't screw anything up... Yet. But, she might not mess anything up at all. It's quite obvious though that something big is going to happen in the next chapter or 2, and I can't wait for the next one! Amazing story!
Okay, I am officially freaking out right now! It's like I'm watching a little guppy getting lured into the dark deep by a beautiful little light... Only to get trapped in the jaws of an angler-fish.
I seriously hope Anon realizes what kind of situation he's in right now and escapes before Cadance completes her evil love plan. No matter how nice she seems you can't trust someone whom you've only known for a few weeks Anon!!!
I just waiting for the sh to hit the fan back in canterlot when celestia finds out. Seriously though make more stories like this with the other characters.
Ok, this is more than some clopfic. This dark AU Cadence you have created is a lying, manipulative witch that plays with the lives of others and the main character's emotions for her selfish gratification. And I love EVERY moment of it! Seeing this witch pull strings is like sampling fine wine; I can't help but be intoxicated. It's sheer pleasure to read. Carry on the good work.
irreversible? You mean at the time that that ancient book was written. Either way even if that spell is irreversible a new spell that does the reverse can always be used on top of it.
irreversible is also a pretty good movie if you haven't seen it. I can't recommend it enough.
Huh. Doesn't seem like Cadence wants to dump her new toy any time this life. That last line is pretty ominous. How far is she willing to take it? To death do they part? How fitting.
Where's Celestia in all this? Is she doing something about Anon's disappearance? Does she even know yet? No clue.
Speaking of clues, I'm starting to see a crumb trail of clues. I can already see how they'll find out. If they find out.
I don't get why they have to leave. It seems like Celestia views Cadence's pedophilia as a minor annoyance at worst. You'd think she'd be up to letting Cadence keep him as a pet and bribe the parents into thinking this is somehow therapeutic. That said, this is all intriguingly creepy.
One would think Celestia would have taken a special interest in this considering. On the other hand though she has been allowing Cadence to do pretty much anything she wants, so who knows how much Celestia really cares
This is Easily the Best Story i'v Ever Read on here and i'v searched far and wide for something this intriguing, captivating, the story Reels you in like a fish. but in this Case i'm Willing to be Reeled in...i love how there is so much more then just Sex. it's a Saga Between innocence and Deviance...i LOVE IT! keep it Coming it's Truly Great Works.
Am I the only one who doesn't see Cadence as a bad thing for anon. For everyone else of course but people keep saying that Anon is in a trap, or he needs to be saved but that would be like saving a remora from a shark. Sure, the shark may kill everything around it but the Remora is safer with the shark than by itself. Before you send my comment to dislike hell let me explain. Yes, Cadence is not good! I'm not saying she's a good roll model or that her actions are perfectly fine, what I'm saying is that Anon is in no danger with her and in a little while as her plan progresses he might be in more danger without her. Now, yes, she is manipulating him but you have to remember that Anon does genuinely like her, while she's artificially sped up the process, he did like her from the get go and would probably still like her even without her manipulation. She hasn't forced him to love her, she's trying to make him need and crave her kind of like an addiction.
To reiterate, I don't think Cadence is a bad pony in this story, but I don't think she's good either. She's kind of like Trixie or Lightning Dust. While what's she's doing isn't good per say, she's not doing anything too bad either.
There are plenty of books in here that you’ve rented out to read to Twilight, Shining's sister. She’s such a smart little filly.
Oh no! Oh hell no! Are-Is-Is Cadance going to turn him into Flash Sentry? There's just no way...
You miss your Mom and Dad. What could they be doing right now? Maybe they’re making amends with each other. Maybe they’re even missing you, but if you were the cause of their fighting, probably not. With you not there, maybe they won’t fight. Maybe they would even work things out all by themselves and wouldn't need Cadance's help at all.
Can't overstate how important these childhood fears are in this story.
This is just a nice vacation with your special somepony. She wouldn't want you to be sad or lonely. That’s not like her at all.
Oh no, it is very much like her. This isn't taking and using a Dark tag, it is earning it
“You couldn’t get rid of me if you tried,” she whispers.
... Wow.How scary is that? Did I just notice how well you write now, or is everything coming together now?
OOooooooo... you know what I realized, that pony she asked to do shit to Anon... the guards might question him, and if he is so inclined, he might tell the guards about what Cadence wanted him to do... I don't recall her telling him not to tell anyone... SHE MADE A MISTAKE! She should have killed him when she had the chance!
7252089 Actually, Cadence has made a ton of other mistakes that could get her plan found out. Just look at how she handled getting those forbidden books from the library. I'm pretty sure the powers that be in Canterlot keep a very detailed record of anyone who enters the forbidden section and they keep a thorough list of all books from there that were checked-out and returned, as well as the contents and spells of each individual book. Considering the subject and spells contained in the books she stole, it wouldn't be hard to link their disappearances to Cadence, but it also wouldn't be hard to determine the reason why she stole them. After all, the royal guard is well aware of her connection to Anon as his babysitter, so it wouldn't take much more than logic to put the pieces together.
However, Cadence's biggest mistake is something so obvious that she completely missed it: It isn't going to take very long for everyone to realize that she's missing. She's a princess in training who is studying directly under Celestia, and she just vanished without telling anyone she was leaving. Once its clear she's missing, I'm pretty sure finding Cadence will become the top priority of the royal guard, and no doubt the first thing they'll do to find her is retrace everywhere she went that morning, which would eventually lead to the library. At that point, its only a matter of time before they realize she stole the books.
Cadence may be a genius when it comes to manipulating others, but she is terrible when it comes to covering her tracks. I honestly don't see her getting away with this after the trail of breadcrumbs she left behind.
7255362 Personally, I think the biggest mistake would be those explicit doodles she mentioned doing in her notebook. There isn't an alibi in Equestria that could explain away those, if they were found.
7252089 Shit, yeah! Especially since he didn't do much more than she hired him to, and she force-choked him for it. I wouldn't be feeling particularly loyal after that.
I love this. The porn is good but just the sheer story of depravation... I also can't help but wonder... what abaut Annon's past? Before the orphanage? Real parents? Other orphans? Orphans are always good to show in flashbacks, expecially disabled ones.
What if the plan works and it ends up in the right way? I think Anon would craft himself a new identity somewhere on the royal castle. Maybe one of the ponies that are doing administration and tax counting. Also taking up the name of which "Nonny" is also a short form. Like Nominal. Nominal Value, Royal Treasurer. I'm sure Cady could pull this off, unless she plans on living with him in the wods. I wonder what would be his reaction for this job...
I will say this...you have certainly written something I can't stop reading. I don't know how to respond besides the fact I like this overall for its interesting take on cadance.
Now I don't know where this is going put please.more. soon.
This form of "dark clop" is the scariest shit I've ever read. First there was "Maid to Please" and subsequent fics, but now this? I am terrible person! Y'all are terrible people!
7293576 If you place a story in 'tracking,' you'll be notified when the story gets updated. That way you won't have to keep checking back constantly to see if a new chapter is posted. It took much longer than you'd think for me to realize this, so I hope this information helps.
It's been a long time since I had goosebumps from being unexpectedly creeped out. What a great way to end the chapter!
Sweet Celestia...I know it's been said before but this Cadance is fking dark. This is one of the few fics I've read where I get an unnervingly real sense of irreparable emotional damage being done.
By all means, carry on.
Alright, from now on I'm starting a counter for every time I say "Yandere Cadance is Creepy" to myself in this story. This chapter alone kicks it off at five. The best part is that the way you write her still makes it so damn natural and believable...
Looking forward to the conversation between Cadance and Celestia after Cadance gets caught.
While reading the newest chapter (Chapter 7), I was just as nervous as Cadence was throughout it until she got back to her room. I guess she didn't screw anything up... Yet. But, she might not mess anything up at all. It's quite obvious though that something big is going to happen in the next chapter or 2, and I can't wait for the next one! Amazing story!
Also, what Cadence said at the end there...
I love it.
Great chapter keep it up
7245946 I can agree with you as of now... But, we'll have to wait and see what happens next.
Okay, I am officially freaking out right now! It's like I'm watching a little guppy getting lured into the dark deep by a beautiful little light... Only to get trapped in the jaws of an angler-fish.
I seriously hope Anon realizes what kind of situation he's in right now and escapes before Cadance completes her evil love plan. No matter how nice she seems you can't trust someone whom you've only known for a few weeks Anon!!!
I just waiting for the sh to hit the fan back in canterlot when celestia finds out.
Seriously though make more stories like this with the other characters.
Ok, this is more than some clopfic. This dark AU Cadence you have created is a lying, manipulative witch that plays with the lives of others and the main character's emotions for her selfish gratification. And I love EVERY moment of it! Seeing this witch pull strings is like sampling fine wine; I can't help but be intoxicated. It's sheer pleasure to read. Carry on the good work.
7248390 I'm with this guy!
Dayum, if this turns into a twist that Cadance is actually Chrysalis in disguise, it'll be shocking.
irreversible? You mean at the time that that ancient book was written. Either way even if that spell is irreversible a new spell that does the reverse can always be used on top of it.
irreversible is also a pretty good movie if you haven't seen it. I can't recommend it enough.
That was fun, may I have another? Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
Hmm. A very good chapter I suppose anon will love eternally.
Huh. Doesn't seem like Cadence wants to dump her new toy any time this life.
That last line is pretty ominous. How far is she willing to take it? To death do they part? How fitting.
Where's Celestia in all this? Is she doing something about Anon's disappearance? Does she even know yet? No clue.
Speaking of clues, I'm starting to see a crumb trail of clues. I can already see how they'll find out. If they find out.
I don't get why they have to leave. It seems like Celestia views Cadence's pedophilia as a minor annoyance at worst. You'd think she'd be up to letting Cadence keep him as a pet and bribe the parents into thinking this is somehow therapeutic.
That said, this is all intriguingly creepy.
One would think Celestia would have taken a special interest in this considering. On the other hand though she has been allowing Cadence to do pretty much anything she wants, so who knows how much Celestia really cares
This is Easily the Best Story i'v Ever Read on here and i'v searched far and wide for something this intriguing, captivating, the story Reels you in like a fish. but in this Case i'm Willing to be Reeled in...i love how there is so much more then just Sex. it's a Saga Between innocence and Deviance...i LOVE IT! keep it Coming it's Truly Great Works.
Am I the only one who doesn't see Cadence as a bad thing for anon. For everyone else of course but people keep saying that Anon is in a trap, or he needs to be saved but that would be like saving a remora from a shark. Sure, the shark may kill everything around it but the Remora is safer with the shark than by itself. Before you send my comment to dislike hell let me explain. Yes, Cadence is not good! I'm not saying she's a good roll model or that her actions are perfectly fine, what I'm saying is that Anon is in no danger with her and in a little while as her plan progresses he might be in more danger without her. Now, yes, she is manipulating him but you have to remember that Anon does genuinely like her, while she's artificially sped up the process, he did like her from the get go and would probably still like her even without her manipulation. She hasn't forced him to love her, she's trying to make him need and crave her kind of like an addiction.
To reiterate, I don't think Cadence is a bad pony in this story, but I don't think she's good either. She's kind of like Trixie or Lightning Dust. While what's she's doing isn't good per say, she's not doing anything too bad either.
7249737 you spelled role model wrong. dislike
7250414 How DARE you!
7250458 hehehehehe
Oh no! Oh hell no! Are-Is-Is Cadance going to turn him into Flash Sentry? There's just no way...
Can't overstate how important these childhood fears are in this story.
Oh no, it is very much like her. This isn't taking and using a Dark tag, it is earning it
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Wow.How scary is that? Did I just notice how well you write now, or is everything coming together now?
OOooooooo... you know what I realized, that pony she asked to do shit to Anon... the guards might question him, and if he is so inclined, he might tell the guards about what Cadence wanted him to do... I don't recall her telling him not to tell anyone...
SHE MADE A MISTAKE! She should have killed him when she had the chance!
Awesome job on this man, awesome job!
this is going to be a crazy ride. what did i get my shelf in to. No i take that back this is a crazy ride. and I love it
7252089 Actually, Cadence has made a ton of other mistakes that could get her plan found out. Just look at how she handled getting those forbidden books from the library. I'm pretty sure the powers that be in Canterlot keep a very detailed record of anyone who enters the forbidden section and they keep a thorough list of all books from there that were checked-out and returned, as well as the contents and spells of each individual book. Considering the subject and spells contained in the books she stole, it wouldn't be hard to link their disappearances to Cadence, but it also wouldn't be hard to determine the reason why she stole them. After all, the royal guard is well aware of her connection to Anon as his babysitter, so it wouldn't take much more than logic to put the pieces together.
However, Cadence's biggest mistake is something so obvious that she completely missed it: It isn't going to take very long for everyone to realize that she's missing. She's a princess in training who is studying directly under Celestia, and she just vanished without telling anyone she was leaving. Once its clear she's missing, I'm pretty sure finding Cadence will become the top priority of the royal guard, and no doubt the first thing they'll do to find her is retrace everywhere she went that morning, which would eventually lead to the library. At that point, its only a matter of time before they realize she stole the books.
Cadence may be a genius when it comes to manipulating others, but she is terrible when it comes to covering her tracks. I honestly don't see her getting away with this after the trail of breadcrumbs she left behind.
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Whoa, I... overlooked those details, you're right XD Holy crap, Cadence is screwed!
hehehe
I can only think about the ways that this will end badly. Not horribly, just badly.
I kind of realized how fucked up this story is. Like, really.
It's not a bad story, not is it not entertaining. It's just kind of messed up.
No romance tag?
7255362 Personally, I think the biggest mistake would be those explicit doodles she mentioned doing in her notebook. There isn't an alibi in Equestria that could explain away those, if they were found.
7252089 Shit, yeah! Especially since he didn't do much more than she hired him to, and she force-choked him for it. I wouldn't be feeling particularly loyal after that.
7268031 Ooooooooh, I forgot about those, hehehe, she's leaving a dastardly trail everywhere!
7268032 Legit though, hahahah
7273520 I help if I spot an error, not much more to it than that.
*Check 2 times/day for a update*
This story really got me, i n~e~e~d to know how it ends!
I wonder if celestia will kill anon for the greater good or something
7299208 they are indeed the biggest they can be.
I love this. The porn is good but just the sheer story of depravation... I also can't help but wonder... what abaut Annon's past? Before the orphanage? Real parents? Other orphans? Orphans are always good to show in flashbacks, expecially disabled ones.
What if the plan works and it ends up in the right way? I think Anon would craft himself a new identity somewhere on the royal castle. Maybe one of the ponies that are doing administration and tax counting. Also taking up the name of which "Nonny" is also a short form. Like Nominal. Nominal Value, Royal Treasurer. I'm sure Cady could pull this off, unless she plans on living with him in the wods. I wonder what would be his reaction for this job...
I will say this...you have certainly written something I can't stop reading. I don't know how to respond besides the fact I like this overall for its interesting take on cadance.
Now I don't know where this is going put please.more. soon.
I need moar!!!
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Y'all need Celestia
This form of "dark clop" is the scariest shit I've ever read. First there was "Maid to Please" and subsequent fics, but now this? I am terrible person! Y'all are terrible people!
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This guy gets it.
7293576 If you place a story in 'tracking,' you'll be notified when the story gets updated. That way you won't have to keep checking back constantly to see if a new chapter is posted. It took much longer than you'd think for me to realize this, so I hope this information helps.
God, Cadence is positively despicable! I absolutely love it!
Um, Cadence, you're starting to sound less like a maverik and more like a maniac (sorry watch way too much pony.mov )
I swear, while at first I was partly rooting for cadence; with every new chapter, I ever more gain the urge to see her fed to Mr Eaten's Well.
To use a semi familiar phrase: