A criminal escapes Tartarus and hides in Ponyville, only to be found by Twilight. She knows she must report this to Celestia, but is unsure if he truly is guilty. A new evil rises while new visitors stir new feelings in the element wielders.
Twilight Sparkle needs to organize Rarity's birthday party, but all her friends seem troubled. As if that wasn't enough, Cadence sends Twilight a mysterious jewel possessing mystical powers... as well as a dark secret.
Many years ago, shortly before the birth of one Twilight Sparkle, Celestia, ruler of Equestria, found a small item in a forest. That item? An egg. Around the same time, Celestia, ruler of Draconica found something small in a forest. A pony.
When the diamond dogs kidnap Rarity, it's up to Spike to save the day and win her heart. But not all is as it appears, and as things spiral out of control, the gods themselves must intercede to contain the chaos.
Good
It goes a little fast but I love your concepts and the humor
I do recommend that you get an editor to help you with the pace issues
WOW And they say my stories move too fast