• Published 18th Dec 2015
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Timberjack and Flutterbat - Dark Nightshade



Applejack gets a Flutterbat like form.

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Meet Timberjack

"And don't come back, ya varmits!" Applejack yelled as she chased some timber wolfs of off Sweat Apple Acers.

Strange, Ah don't think their usually that easy to chase off, thought Applejack. They might be planning something. Oh well. Untill then, Ah'm going to have to expect it. Ah need to ask Fluttershy a out this.


Applejack finally got to Fluttershy's cottage. She walked up to the door, and was about to nock, when Fluttershy opened the door.

"Oh, hi Applejack, I wasn't expecting to see you here," she said, sounding kind of nervous.

"Surprise! Anyway, Ah might need some help with some timber wolfs that keep trying to steal some of the apples from the orchard," said Applejack.

"Oh, really?" asked Fluttershy, suddenly sounding really interested.

"Yeah. They seem to be retreating more then they usually would," Applejack said.

"Huh. And it's just you chasing them?" Fluttershy asked.

"Yeah," replied Applejack.

"Huh. Yeah, either something is wrong with them, or their planning something," Fluttershy said.

"That's what Ah thought," said Applejack.


Later, when it was starting to get dark, Applejack said "Ok, Ah don't think we're going to find em tonight. Sorry Ah dragged you all the way out here."

"No, it's ok," Fluttershy said. "I've been meaning to find some timber wolves anyway."

"Why?" Applejack asked.

"Remember when I turned into Flutterbat?"

"How can I not? Again, Ah'm mighty sorry fer making you do that."

"I've been turning into that every full moon."

"Seriously?! Why have you not told us this?" yelled Applljack.

"Because I don't want you girls to worry. Also, my Flutterbat transformation magic has started affecting some of my animals," Fluttershy whimpered.

"Really? Has it affected any of us?" Applejack asked.

"I'm not entirely sure," Fluttershy said.

"Ok, that could be bad," Applejack said. Suddenly, out of nowhere, a timber wolf tackled Applejack.

"Ahhhhh!" yelled Applejack.

"Oh my!" Fluttershy yelped. She started punching it, and her eyes started glowing.

"Let! Her! GO!" she yelled as she was incased in a glowing white light. This white light soon disappeared, and reviled Flutterbat. The timber wolf, sensing how powerful she was, turned and ran, with its tail in between its legs.

"OhmygoshIamsosorry!" Flutterbat yelped.

"Wait, Fluttershy, are you still there?" Applejack said, quite surprised.

"Yes. Most of the time, I am in control," Flutterbat said.

"Most of the time?" Applejack asked uneasy.

"Yes. Anyway, are you ok?"

"Yes, Ah'm fine."

"Are you sure? Usually when I transform, something happens to the animals looking at me."

"Really? Well, now that you mention it, Ah do feel kind of weird. Ah suddenly want to eat a ton of meat."

"Interesting. I hope I didn't bond you with the timber wolf," Fluttershy said as Applejack started to glow. There was a flash of green light, and when it was gone, Applejack was there in body, but maybe not in spirit. Applejack was now had some vines covering her body, her eyes were glowing green, she had sharp, nasty looking claws, sharp, nasty looking teeth, her breath was starting to smell, and her cutie Mark were still apples, but they looked dark green.

"Oh my gosh. Applejack? Are you in there?" Flutterbat asked nervously. "I suppose I should actually call you something else. How about Timberjack?" Timberjack snarled, and pounced at Flutterbat.

"Ahhhhh!" she screamed. After about a minute and a half, Timberjack managed to tackle her.

"Applejack! Please, wake up! I know you're in there, and K know it's hard, but please, wake up!" Flutterbat yelled. Timberjack froze.

"What am I doing?" she asked.

"I think you were just trying to eat my face off. Applejack? Are you back?"

"Where did I go? And what do you mean, trying to eat your face off?"

"You mean you don't remember?" Flutterbat asked.

"Remember what?" Timberjack asked.

"You should pay more attention to what your legs look like," Flutterbat said. Timberjack focused on her legs and screamed.

"How did these vines get here? Is my skin color darker? Why's the apples on my cutie mark green?" Timberjack asked, starting to freak out.

"Calm down. You must have bonded with the timber wolf when I transformed. I wonder why?" Flutterbat asked herself.

"Ah don't normally care about what my hair looks like, but sheesh, it is really messed up! Also, have you already come up with a new name for this form?" Timberjack asked.

"Yes, your new form should be called Timberjack," Flutterbat said.

"Timberjack. I like it. Wait, how are we going to break this to the others?" Timberjack asked, the worry clear on her voice.

"Maybe we don't. What they don't know can't hurt them. Probably," Flutterbat said.

"Fluttershy, or Flutterbat, I guess, I hope you're right," Timberjack said nervously. Unfortunately, Pinkie was secretly watching them, and had seen the whole thing.

So, she can merge pony's with things, huh? Maybe she can merge me with my party cannons. Or a cherry-changa. And if she can only merge pony's with living creatures, maybe she can merge me with a snake, or griffin. Hmmm, I could probably use this knowledge to my advantage, but how? Eh, I'll figure that out later. Time to invite more people to a party! Pinkie thought as she snuck away.

Comments ( 45 )

The first thing I thought before I read this was how painful it would've been to transform.
And now that I read it I wish it would've been like that. Anyway, great story! It was a little rushed but it had some funny parts in it that made me laugh :twilightsmile:

I agree it did feel a little rushed and could have been opened up so do you mind if I do some expanding on this Flutterbat and Timberjack?

I am disappointed you didn't make a "Lumberjack" joke.

I like it. But They seem a bit to at ease with the hold thing.

A interesting idea, but agree with the others, feels rather rushed.

With some more polish this could be really interesting, but right now the whole story feels rather average.

having just come from watching transformations from Kamen Rider Gaim...after reading this, my mind is going places and i am not complaining...

6745077 Nice, glad you liked it.

6745470 more like i was imagining LockSeeds for Timberwolf and Fruitbat...but hey,

6745894 LockSeeds were the primary Henshin (Transform) item gimmick for Kamen Rider Gaim, in essence, they were created from the fruit of an inter-dimensional forest and used with a belt called a Sengoku Driver. it looked like this...

please make a sequail please:applecry:

6835796 I think I will. Who do you think I should do next?

6837123 Ok, that should be interesting.

Comment posted by OceanRider deleted Jan 15th, 2016

6837123 What do you think she should bond with?

I think she would be a good dragon or a little cat

Comment posted by OceanRider deleted Jan 17th, 2016

6841833 Glad I could help:twilightsmile:

Beautiful premise. This could be the beginning of something great.
My advice? Fiddle about with the pacing until it feels a bit smoother. In action scenes in books & movies you don't spend as much time in one shot as you do for peaceful scenes, and parts of this felt rushed or drawn out. :trixieshiftright:
Play with perspective- writing as though the 'camera' were next to a character's head, or in a closeup, or from farther away.
Work on your character's actions. I'm sure you didn't mean to make it feel as though they were static except for the action scenes... the movement can be inferred- 'Flutters waved a hoof in front of Applejack's maw in a desperate attempt to gain her attention', 'She backed away slowly as the realization hit her', 'Pinkie ducked back into the bush'... but it helps if you describe it. :applejackunsure:

Lastly- I advise you to get someone to help you with your English. There are a couple places where the sentences structured oddly are, and parts where their are words aren't spelled properly for there purpose. :facehoof:
TLDR - In summation, YOU ARE A GOOD WRITER. All the problems I had with your writing WILL BE FIXED WITH EXPERIENCE, but it would help you establish yourself as a writer if you worked on fixing them right now. You have the potential for greatness. Seize it! :pinkiehappy:
NightlyGrape out.

7044022 Thanks! I have a slight problem with spelling.

7048706 As we say in theater, Break a leg!

6746099 If this story made you think of that (and if you liked it), then you should read this.

:pinkiegasp:I like it. Good concept. Have a like! I also like the idea of Pinkie silently scheming.

7455899 Good! I'm working on the sequel!

This is an interesting story! Guess that explains why the fang was still there at the end of the episode :raritywink:

7457483 Thanks! Glad you liked it!

God Fucking Dammit Pinkie!

7652926 Judging by your comment, I'm not sure if you liked it or not. Did you like it?

7654821 ARE YOU KIDDING ME! I LOVED IT!!!!

7657647 I actually just released a blog post on it, asking which of the two animals on it you would like to see Pinkie as.

6842072 I've started writing the sequel. I've done a blog post about it, check it out!

Sweat Apple Acers lol

Fun read. Noticed some glaring errors, the most consistent being

timber wolfs

the proper plural of wolf that I learned was "wolves"

Strange, Ah don't think their usually that easy to chase off, thought Applejack. They might be planning something. Oh well. Untill then, Ah'm going to have to expect it. Ah need to ask Fluttershy a out this.

Your missing the B

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Ah, thanks. Did you like the story?

May I ask where that art came from?

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