1: Draggin' Your Feet
...ugh...
This just isn't my day.
...am I dead? No. I can't be dead. I'm thinking about being dead. Can dead things think? Do they turn into thoughts? Does that mean all of the thoughts I've ever had were dead things?
...what was I thinking about again?
Right. I suppose I'm not dead, then. But if I don't open my eyes, maybe someone here will think I'm dead. That would be funny, in a gruesome, kind of...jerky way.
Hey, where is here, anyways?
Slowly, the young male opened his eyes and fought off his bleariness to survey his current condition.
His name was Krikaan Drake. He was a quadripedal dragon, with red scales on his back and head, an orange underbelly, green eyes that looked almost like emeralds, and a tail reaching about 3 feet long. His wings were very impressive, reaching almost five feet at full length, and strong enough to blow back anything twice his size. He had nothing on his body except for a single chestpiece, silver in color and fitting right below his neck, with one single gem in the middle. This gem was the same color as the dragon's eyes, but the emerald itself was more intricate and beautiful than any other seen before. If one looked closely, they could see their own soul inside, and possibly...something more?
Well, young Krikaan was already aware of these things and more, but the most pressing thing that was coming to his sleep-induced mind was the fact that-
My leg hurts.
He looked at his rear left leg and noticed that even though his legs weren't as strong as he would've liked, they definitely weren't supposed to bend that direction.
"Yeah, okay, this REALLY hurts now!" His deep, yet young, voice called out in the hopes that someone would hear and take sympathy on him.
But nobody came.
Jerks.
"Alright, calm down, Krikey. I just gotta-" This statement was cut off with a grunt of pain as the young drake pushed himself up with his remaining three limbs. "-Just gotta keep my head, and walk until I find some civilization."
Krikaan saw that he had somehow ended up under a tree in the middle of a forest. There were no sounds of any sort of creature, which was odd in and of itself, but more interesting was that this type of forest seemed...unnatural.
He grimaced at the fact of walking anywhere in this situation, but he had faced worse circumstances before. And with no other choice, he limped forwards into the dark reaches of the forest. He walked...
...and he walked...
...and he walked...
...and walked until he collapsed from exhaustion. Apparently, walking for hours (days? Krikaan couldn't remember) without any sort of food besides berries and absolutely no water was not healthy.
No...have to keep going...have...to finish...my mission...
His ears perked up as he heard a soft voice talking.
"Now, Angel Bunny, I know you don't like the Everfree Forest, but please try not to grab my leg too hard."
Who...need help...
"Help me..."
"AHHH! Who said that?" the soft, timid voice shrieked.
His vision was fading and his voice got more distant.
"...please..."
"Ohmygoodness! A dragon! Angel, we have to get out of-" Fluttershy paused as she got a better look at the dragon. He looked miserable and exhausted, and she was pretty sure no leg was supposed to bend that way. She knew she could never leave any creature in this sort of condition, even something as scary as a dragon. "Wait, you're hurt! Um, d-don't w-w-worry, I'll get some help for you, okay?
After hearing this comforting voice, darkness fell over Krikaan's world.
"I'm telling you, Twi, he's going to destroy everything!"
"Rainbow Dash, we can't pass judgement until-"
"-ghastly thing in Fluttershy's cottage, then you've got another think coming!"
"But Rarity, Fluttershy needs those needles to sew back the wings-"
"-you do trust me, right, AJ?"
"...I reckon you ain't never made a mistake, but it just seems odd is all."
"It's 'haven't ever', Applejack. Proper pronunciation is the most-"
"-andballoonsandcakeandmaybesomestreamersandcakeandlotsandlotsofpresentsanddidImentioncake?!"
"...did you get into my coffee again, Pinkie?"
"..."
"..."
"...maybe?"
"...Celestia dam-"
"-don't know why, but it just seemed like the right thing to do."
"Fluttershy, you know I trust you when it comes to animals, but-"
"Oh, but dragons aren't animals, at least not technically. Do you consider Spike an animal?"
"Well, of course not. But you weren't there, they were rude and I'm afraid that he's going to hurt you like-"
Now, aside from his physical injuries, Krikaan was hurt by what he thought were Twilight's words before he fell back into unconsciousness.
Darkness, and then light.
Krikaan woke more rested than he had ever been. He first wondered why he had slept so well. His second wondering was why his leg didn't hurt anymore. And thirdly, he wondered why he was covered in a blanket in someone's cottage.
"Oh, good, you're awake! I was worried at first, but it's nice to see that you're recovering."
He was mildly surprised to see that the creature talking to him was a pegasus, but he passed it off. He had seen weirder things before.
He made an effort to speak, but the sound that came out was more of a dead cat than a voice.
"No-no," remarked the yellow pegasus with a shake of her head. "Here, drink this first, then maybe you'll feel like talking."
She held out a cup of something hot and steamy. She pushed the cup gently into Krikaan's claws, and watched as he gently sipped the drink.
He grimaced at the taste, but medicine always did, so he downed it in a few gulps to get it over with.
He then smiled at this new creature that had come into his life. "Thank you," he muttered quietly, his voice still a little raspy. He furrowed his brow and asked, "I feel really...good. How long was I out?"
"Um, I think it was about a month?"
The next few minutes involved the spitting out of a drink into a face and some stammered apologies from both parties, one for spitting directly in one direction, the other for surprising him with such...surprising information.
"A week! Are you sure it was that long?"
"Well," said the yellow pony as she wiped off the medicinal residue, "I didn't really pay attention to a lot during that time, but I think you have been mostly unconscious during that time."
"A week..." His mind raced. If he was out for a week, that meant he was running out of time! He leapt up from his comfortable position, and his blanket rested softly on his head as he cried out, "Mm sho chrry bt a hv to goo!"
The pony blinked at the strange choice of words. "Um, cherry what?"
Krikaan blew the blanket off his head and repeated his statement: "I'm so sorry but I have to go!"
She looked alarmed at this. "Go? But-but you're not fully rested and you only just got here and-"
He put a claw against her lips, then spoke in a deep, quiet voice; "Miss Fluttershy, I'm very grateful for you nursing me back to health. But trust me when I say that my presence here will leave you in grave danger."
She moved the claws from off her mouth, and wondered, "How did you know my name was Fluttershy?"
Krikaan then gave a knowing smirk. It was time to reveal something he did not reveal to many others.
"...I know your name is Fluttershy because I heard pretty much everything over the past week. I know that your friends are named Twilight Sparkle, Rainbow Dash, Rarity, Pinkie Pie, Applejack, and Spike. I know that your friends have had some experience with dragons, including Spike, who I assume is also a dragon. They don't seem to trust me, but they trust you, even though you decided to take care of a dragon, which you are deathly afraid of. I know that because I have the ability to see and hear everything when I'm asleep, and I also have enhanced sight and hearing when I'm awake. I heard pretty much all six of you while I was 'asleep'. On top of all that, I'm very observant...which is how I also know that your friends I just mentioned are listening to this whole thing outside your door."
"...oh."
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THANK YOU! I've been waiting for someone to write a good dragon oc. There are not many around here.
first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first
gotta say, the descendant's pretty sweet.
(edit) dammit. feel like deleting that, grekoy?
(edit) thoughts: aaight. dragon meets mane six. funny resemblance to hie fics where the human has some dramatically convenient yet poorly placed superpower, but not dramatically convenient or poorly placed, because this guy actually has powers beyond human. your premise seems solid- a dragon who is not only not an asshole (or is he?) but is on a mission befriends ponies. culture shock and epic saga and/or lulz ensue. btw, the conversation with flutters that introduces this is rather stilted. rather small upload; im used to authors taking forever on monstrous beasts of chapters rather than the little one-off youve got goin for you here, but thats fine. younger viewers? what? if youre omitting something, then dont; its frustrating to us and detracts from your story. a note on biology: once hydrated and nourished, and when first aid was applied to that leg, he would not likely have been out for a week. 'specially if hes a warrior; as i assume from that emerald-gilt armour. spike should be an oddity to this guy; he should have expressed interest in him a little more. the pacing here is weird; you tried to chunk the passage of time into those little blurbs, and the point where he woke up especially feels abbreviated; id like to see a little more of this guys head before he just jumps in to his quest; makes him a little flat as a character as it stands. if this were in first person id feel more comfortable with that sort of thing for reasons, but this is third.
not holding my breath, but might be some fun. i like the whole hie feel this thing has, b/c that is not the standard of dragon fics and it is evidently a refreshing departure from the usual fare of hie that im used to. the mystery tag gives it enough flavor to keep me interested for now. too early for predictions. happy writing, good sir!
6726980
What? someone actually likes stuff? That I do? How and whyyyyyyyy
thanks anyway
6726994
Agreed, The Descendant is my best inspiration!
Also, I'm afraid you didn't get first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first first, but I hope you enjoy second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second second
it's not that bad
6726994 are you asking me to delete my comment?
Well, I think you have done great so far! I love dragons, so as a dragon lover, I'm already biased to this story a little, but I also enjoy the story itself as well! Keep writing, my friend!
6727052
Yes, dragons are beast! Not actual beasts, some are actually quite intelligent, as I tried to demonstrate here. I will write some buddy stuff between big red dragon and small purple and green dragon soon
Great story hope more comes soon!
6727027 uhhhh what? .... maybe?
6727069 aaight! those guys might really hit it off!... once you give this guys existence some context of course.
and yes; dragonlover since 2004. dragons ARE beast.
6727027 i just really like being first.
6727069 Ya know, I'm actually doing a story centered around dragons as well. I wonder if maybe one day we could collaborate? I've never done that before, and I'd find it fun.
6726994
Well, I certainly appreciate your honesty and constructive criticism. I might need to get a proofreader for my stories!
6728065 nah. too early for that. although, id have fun with it if it were me, but ive been told im a little bullheaded. and unclear.
seems fine so far. the only complaint of real substance i have is that conversation. but that sorta thing is commonplace in this form of casual reading.
happy writing!
update?
6819846
soon
Interesting, it has potential, just needs some work like a gem that needs a little refining.
Eg.
His traits could be mentioned piece by piece in the chapter, not all at once.
You also need an editor cause I spotted a number of mistakes
Just a heads up. When asked, Fluttershy said he was out for a month, then he asks "a week?" Not very observant, eh?