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Gboyd


Imagination writes the stories behind the windows to the soul. Music fuels that. I am no different, and I can't wait for others to discover the same.

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Hardships, trials, strife. These are part of things we call life. And in this giant whirlwind of life, there are the little that we so hardly notice. It's the fore-front we see, not the back-ground. Until unbidden secrets and past actions come back to haunt us, whether we've done them wrong or not. I'm sure this is a story you've heard before.

It's scary, really, when one thinks about how a loved one can change so much in so little time. How when one sees a friend, a sister, or mother go from loving to stone-cold within the span of just a few years. It's scary how deeply words can scar us, even when we never let it show. How actions speak of who we are, no matter how we go about them. And how the past will always be there, lurking in the backs of our minds. The past came back to haunt them. To shred them. To bury them, using just a few tools. Jealousy, miscommunication, oversight, gossip, to name a few.

After all, only one in a million receive tutelage under one and only ruler of the known world on Equus. And how much envy and rumors would this cause? How many would try to ruin her? How many would kill her for that spot? And many times can one's heart be broken before it refuses to fixed? How many times can a friendship be broken before it can't be healed, no matter how thick that bandage is?

Princess Twilight has always struggled to make time for her family and friends. To maintain her friendship with her sisters in harmony. And even after a few years of being in royalty, she succeeds. But one session of gala planning could ruin all that. After lost feathers, a broken bridge, a few spoken words, missing marks, a sacrifice made via magic, and an evil seed planted in one heart, the girls find themselves behind closed iron bars. Unhindered, their anger begins to grow, directed at the one who earned her crown only three years ago.

How far is the daughter of a supposed lost kingdom willing to go to save her friends after years of torture and conflict? How deep is that pain going to dig, leaving no room in her heart for others? How many innocents is the Element of Magic itself going to hurt in order to keep her secret? And how long is that shadow going to linger in the corners of one's mind?

And how did six constantly fighting siblings get in the mix of all of this?

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 37 )

I didnt understand a thing.

9801864everything will be explained, I promise. I would explain it, but that would be spoilers, and spoilers are murderers. Sorry! Did you at least get who the characters were?

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- I maybe can if I read it carefully.

So these forms are what the Elements used before the Mane 6 found them? Interesting...

You had my curiosity, but now you have my full attention! Tracked, faved and saved.

My current theory:

Twilight was replaced by somebody, who would then give the Mane Six their “gifts” which in reality would be warping their minds like Rarity’s was at the end of this chapter.

To what end, I’m not sure. It seems like the Human Embodiments of The Elements are the villains here, so it’ll interesting to see how all this turns out.

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Well, gifts can be used and remembered in many different ways. Good theory. But what makes you think the Elements of Harmony are the villains? Just curious, if you don't mind me asking. :D

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Well, maybe not the Elements per se, maybe Anti-Elements?

Anyway, the one that put Twi to sleep had said that "they" were "the entire chessboard." Can't think of anything that can fit that description other than Harmony itself, therefore, the Elements.

Hmmmm..... some new elements coming into play.... interesting.

Comment posted by Dark Rose 777 deleted Sep 24th, 2019

Hey, I am absolutely LOVING what you put up so far, the 4th wall break with Discord was comedy gold, and the way you switch emotions in the blink of an eye is really interesting. The characters don't lose their personalities to fast, the mature and serious side of your versions is refreshing to read. I'm tots keeping an eye on this story. I love reading and I noticed there were a lot of grammar mistakes, (that's to be expected, this IS your first story) I was wondering if I could help you edit your story.
~ Dark Rose

Comment posted by Dark Rose 777 deleted Sep 22nd, 2019

Mystery, doubts, anger? Those emotions can really make a plot thicken! I can't wait to see what happens next!

No! Rarity don't think like that! I think Twilight needs to clear her schedule for a week, and do nothing but hang out with her friends. Also, is Twilight avoiding her friends? Something tastes like rotten apples here. . .

HAha! I can't wait to see the ensuing cat fight!

Looks good so far, I caught couple mistakes, but they didn't bother me . I have a feeling Lily is going to show up a lot more often in the future.

Wow, reading this was almost like watching them fight in the show! Very good.

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

Oh wow. Just started this............already amazed. It was a little confusing, but....I think I got it.

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Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading! :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by Gboyd deleted Dec 10th, 2019

Welp, that reporter be ded.

:rainbowlaugh: Not quite---Twilight's not THAT cruel! Glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

Can I ask what is the story about without you spoiling anything?

I don’t get it, how does the actions from those that knocked out Twilight affecting all this?

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This particular part doesn't explain anything about the current story. This is a flash-back that calls back to events in Season 2, when the girls started notice..... strange things about Twilight. I can't reveal anything here without giving you spoilers, but this flashback reveals some backstory for what happens in the sequel to Stroke of Luck. Yes, there will be a sequel.

This story has been in development for six years, and me and my devloper finally gathered up enough courage to post it in the website for the rest of you to enjoy.

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Basically, this story is asking the major question of how far and how hard you can stretch a friendship before it finally snaps.

The show did a mediocre example of this in "The Return of Harmony, Part 1", but it was fixed almost too quickly. My and my devloper wanted to see how the girls would.... I don't know, react when their friendship is forcefully torn apart by another, and how long a healed friendship will last.

And, if I'm being completely honest, I guess I'm also questioning myself with this story... When my friendships got broken.... They never fully healed. And this story is an exprience of that.

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Okay, got it. It's like, I'm here thinking "How does the first chapter have to do with any of this?"

To the author - omg freaking god it's amazing. despite some spelling and wording errors [for there's too many to list them] i know those two mares & that story you are referencing Running from myself by torrentialCAM.
Obabscribbler (now known as scribbler productions on yt) audio fic reading/drama was incredible!

p.s: on your user page the 'him' i'm referring to Blackgyrph0n has some sketchy issues going on twitter right now, so please careful about throwing his name around and don't want other people attacking you
also my story's set in season 4 (only goes up to celestial advice from season 7) then everything after that is non canon!

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Oh... wow... Okay! Thanks for the warning! I'll be sure to check out your story and YT account! Catch ya later! :raritywink:

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yeah.i don't know if anything was settle offline or even at all!

about this story it's an m/m ship of dusk shine x spike (please have an open mind...took the r63 character name only! i'd love to give you more details but currently describing it to another author in PM's.) within a slightly dark subject matter:rainbowhuh: instead going to post a shorter fic featuring that same couple so readers are more comfortable with them

p.s: i'm temporarily leaving this site and yt accounts due to my three old 'Dell' laptop breaking down! i've tried everything and nothing works.
don't worry i have another laptop but it's an older model and will pop in every now and then on fimfiction:twilightsmile:

Uhh. . . No words for what is going on. My mind, and your story, are hopping everywhere, and it makes sense, and I love it.

Wow, this is insane. It was rather short, but I think the level of foreshadowing, and considering how INTENSE this chapter was, made up for it. Twilight is the perfect protagonist, soon to be antagonist, for this story, and I believe we will see another side of her, considering Magic loves her to much to stop her. I like Chisled Dagger's character a lot, and you wrote his thought trian almost perfectly, it was like I could hear his voice as I read it. Flawless dialouge with Twilight and Chisled, by the way.

I like this so far, as I have stated on previous chapters, but I feel the story is starting to feel rushed. Perhaps you slow down a bit.

I feel like Twilight is rushing into this "I'm going insane because I no longer have my friends by my side so I'll become evil instead!" too fast. Maybe fill us in on little more on why Lily is the antagonist? I would love to see more of her and what her plans are for the girls.

I literally just noticed that they were humans...:rainbowlaugh:

To the author - Hi!👋 i've read the latest chapters of your story (thus far)
Review: ch.3 is mostly about the trial and twi trying to a loophole/counter measure, have no thought or comment.
with ch.4 Twilight's doing a good thing getting spike out of harm's way by having him visit the dragon lands.
This is third time i've seen of the elements of harmony being voiced & having emotions:heart::raritystarry:
you have one spelling error - it's 'guard' not gaurd!

now to the personal side of things: hope you're doing okay. as for me finally on my new laptop a Samsung notebook 7 which took about two years,lol (i'll explain in more detail on it with a blog post...eventually) still i'm gonna post fics just not the one i told you about but will have the same pairing/couple😉

p.s: don't know what that 1st fic was called nor it's title but remember certain details like pinkie and her element of laughter whisked every pony away & had dance party on Princess luna's moon!
the second is called To love the moon by Baxter1984. a twiluna story but has a r63 version of luna whose known as artemis.

this message was written out on 4/25/22

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