A magical flare has struck Equestria, which has indefinitely suspended unicorns spells. Can Twilight, and the rest of the unicorns that inhabit the great Equestrian land, cope with the seemingly infinite struggles that the lack of magic brings? Can Twilight manage to find a fix to this dire problem while she endures the inconveniences of life without magic?
Author's note: Go easy on me, this is my first time writing in a long time so I'm looking for proofreaders who can help me build on my writing. Also, there are other chapter to come ;).
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Just like the Great Black out on the 60's perhaps... when that Solar flair fried all the power supplies... Great job so far...
Well, this is gonna go downhill quickly. Bet the Cakes are doing fine though.
You should try to watch out for your vocabulary use, because there are a few instances that you've used words wrong. To be honest, simple is best and considering how this is your first fic (in a long time, you admit), I recommend you try to aim for flow rather than eloquence. Errors are bound to happen but it's always good to do a self review a few times before publishing a chapter. As for a proofreader, you really only have to join one of the many groups on FIMfiction or go on ponychan because there's bound to be a few people always willing to lend a hand.
As for the fic itself, I really appreciate your handling of Twilight and Spike's personalities. There's a few things to be nitpicky about such as Spike calling Princess Celestia as just "Celestia" and a few other things but overall you've shown to have a good grasp on the characters and what you want to have happen. All you really need is to rack up experience and you get that by just writing and reading.
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Thanks for the advice man. I had a hunch my vocabulary might been off a bit. (I get mixed up with some words
) I'll make sure to simply my words in the later chapters while keeping them fresh.