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Deep down his forgotten complex of enchanted rooms and trapped corridors lies buried the one wicked book whose existence threatens all Equestria. The one book he has left for his heir to wreak havoc and ravage the kingdom with.

Celestia cannot permit such a volume to endure.

So Twilight accepted to face the dangers of the underground compound to recover that accursed volume and bring it back to her mentor for destruction.

An expanded version of the (terrible) minific submitted to the October '15’s WriteOff event, 'Illusion of Choice'. Inspired by the graphic novel 'On the contrived Earths', part of the 'Valérian and Laureline' SF series.

Set in season 1/2/3 (featuring a plain, vanilla Twilight).

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Comments ( 8 )

Well, that went dark fast and never stopped.

Whoa, a lot more twists than the original. You took out that last bit I loved, but it was still an interesting read.

Well, I liked the writeoff version of this story, so I decided to give this one a try. Maybe it's just because I'm not a huge fan of dark stories, but I honestly liked the writeoff version better. I think the biggest problem with it now is that the twist ending seems to just come out of nowhere.

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Yeah, someone told me the same thing.
I had many ideas for the conclusion, some less dark than others. I plumped for the darkest. I know it will sound contrived to some, but that’s a risk I was willing to take.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

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