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InkSlinger


If you're not supposed to have midnight snacks, why is there a light in the fridge? Hm!? - Writer, Polite cur & overall Gentleman.

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He normally always listened to them. The voices in his head. They'd never done him wrong so far, and now, they were going to see him do right; at any cost.

A new religion is spreading throughout Equestria, rapidly but silently; a Cult that, legends say, can raise beings from the dead through the practice of dark, long-forbidden magic; and they WILL raise beings for a price so high, many deem it inconsiderable.

Grimack, a young hippogryph, has had voices in his head since he was a child; he listened to him; they told him stories, of other places and times, and, as he grew older, of dangers, and threats that he could neutralise without too much of a disastrous consequence.

Now he is told of a future that may come to be, if a Cult of mere legend does not succeed in it's plans, and it is up to him to aid them.

Faith will be tested, friends made, selves found, and all under the curtain of darkness. Equestria doesn't need to know. It can be left in the dark for this one.

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Comments ( 7 )

I like the idea where the cultists are the supposed good guys, and the grammar is pretty good in my opinion.

6476740 Thanks dude -- Appreciate the feedback! This is mainly just a draft - Got loads more to write but planning is going good for now ;)

6477014 Can't wait to read more of this, and considering that this is just a draft I'm having high hopes for the rest.

Oh, now, that's much better...!

The inner monologue is easier to follow; the conflicting priorities of the entities...

Remember those index cards...!

Crystalheart

6485352 Yeah we're not really index card people ol' chap :moustache: but good thoughts regardless ;)

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As long as you two plan the story out, it works, however you do it...

InkSlinger's chapter was much clearer after his edits; and the knife was a nice touch.

Good Luck! Keep on writing!

Crystalheart

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