War of the worlds.

by Shadow-Aura

Chapter 7 the end?

*Canterlot*
There were dozens dead ponies on the road. Their outlines softened by the black dust. All was still. houses locked and empty, shops closed... But looters had helped themselves to wine and food and outside of a jewelers shop some gold chains and a watch were scattered on the pavement.

"ULLA!"

I stopped, steering towards the sound. It seemed as if that mighty desert of houses had found a voice for my fear and solitude.

"ULLA!"

The desolating cry worked upon my mind. The wailing took possession of me. I was intensely weary, foot so, hungry and thirsty Why was I wandering alone in this city of the dead? Why was I alive? When Canterlot was lying in state in its black shroud. I felt intolerably lonely, drifting from street to empty street, I was drawn inexorably towards that cry.

"ULLA!!"

I saw, over the trees on Starswirl Hill the fighting machine from which the howling came. I crossed the canal. There stood a second machine, upright, but as still as the first.

"ULLAAAAA....!"

Abruptly the sound ceased. Suddenly, the desolation, the solitude became unendurable. While that voice sounded, Canterlot had still seemed alive. Now suddenly there was a change the passing of something and all that remained was this quiet.

I looked up and saw a third machine. It was erect and motionless, like the others. An insane resolve possessed me. I would give my life to the Martians here and now.

I strode recklessly towards the titan and saw that a multitude of black birds was circling and clustering about the hood. I began running along the road. I felt no fear, only a wild trembling exultation. As I ran up the hill towards the motionless monster. Out of the hood hung red shreds at which the hungry birds now pecked and tore.

I scrambled up to the crest of Starswirl Hill and the Martian's camp was below me. A mighty space it was, and scattered about it, in their overturned machines were the Martians. DEAD...slained after all Equestria's devices had failed. Killed by the humblest things. Bacteria. Minute, invisible, bacteria!

When the invaders arrived and drank and fed, our microscopic allies attacked them. From that moment, they were doomed.

The torment had ended. The people scattered over the country
desperate, leaderless, starved... The thousands who had fled by sea (including Twilight) all would return. The pulls of life growing stronger and stronger would beat again.

As life returns to normal the question of another attack from Mars causes universal concern. Is our planet safe? or is this time of peace merely a reprieve? It may be that across the immensity of space they have learned their lessons and even now await their opportunity. Perhaps the future belongs not to us, but to the Martians...

Comments

[BillyColt]

I notice you've added a number of stories to the All-OC stories group, but the ones I checked all have canon characters tagged.

You might want to double-check the group guidelines to see if the stories really qualify before adding them.

[Shadow-Aura]

6430709
my OC is mainly the main character, but I use canon characters to fill the spots in the rolls. I'm not good at making new characters

[Lazydrill]

Just gonna leave this here...

Imagine hearing that on a misty morning...

[Shadow-Aura]

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This would have gone well in jeff Wayne's musical instead of the Ulla scream.

[Lazydrill]

6433734 I agree with you on that mate!

[Penn Hooven]

You have expressed an interest in having me review this story on L.O.V. Review. While the concept of this story is interesting, there are several things that I'd like to see fixed up before I review it (at least, review it in a positive way. As is I could review it, but I'd be pointing out the things that need to change and the mistakes rather than how good it is. I could do that, if you want, but I wouldn't want to unless you were okay with that.).

1. Miss spelled or incorrect words. How to fix? As someone to be an editor. That's the simplest way.

2. I understand you have a set image in your head, but it seems that you're limiting yourself by doing so. The story seems too fast pace, and while I understand where you're going with it, I'm not enjoying it because there hasn't been anything (descriptions, characters, character development, atmosphere building of any kind or plot interest) That makes me want to read more or draw me in and make me read more.

I don't want to recommend this to anyone as is, but I could see it being great, as there's a lot of potential here. I won't review, unless you don't mind it being in a more negative light, as a lot would have to change for this to be good for others. Sorry.

[Shadow-Aura]

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I based it off of a musical so I didn't know much about the characters or description just knew the plot. That is why it is fast paced and some of the lines are the songs.

But I've checked it now using a British spell checker (America and Britain spell stuff different) and everything seems fine.

When you review make sure to mention the musical stuff

[Keldeo_of_thepast]

This was great 🙂

Though could of been interesting see what was going on in the Crystal empire 🤔

Pretty sure they would of got wiped out Farley quickly