She gave Deepy a big grin. "Ol' Pearl just can't turn off, can she?" Granny Smith gave a hearty little chuckle. "Oh, I hope you know what yer gettin' yerself into. My grandson takes after his grandpa, ya see, and there's a reason I got hip problems. Forty years o' gettin' humped by a stallion hung like a dragon 'll do that to ya."
Man, that chapter was hot. Good for Deepy and Big Mac. Gotta say. I didn't expected Granny Smith to be so helpful to Deepy or that there was an old mare, Pearl Necklace, who had a special talent like Deepy. I'm surprised at how perverted the old mares are/used to be and I wonder how Pearl knew Smith enough to give Deepy permission to screw Big Mac. Still, thanks for the interesting story.
I love how both the plot and the 'plot' are interesting. Honestly I like seeing how Deeply gets through her general life as much as if not more than the sex. I suppose though those are very similar things for her.
I am very interested to see were her life goes now.
I try, I try every chapter and say, "I'm not going to fall for the setups and punch lines. I'm going to invest myself into this girl's life and her daily struggles."
Every time I fail.
Hardcover, if your reading this, I'll will deepthroat your cock because of this masterpiece of literature.
6267025 / Five out of five mustaches, couldn't have said it better myself.
I just wish you had added that bit about this being Deepy's canon and feeling free to deviate from it last chapter before involving her with characters from the show. That way there would be more freedom as to what she could be doing after graduation.
6270066 I think, one way or another, most people seem to put Deepy in Ponyville for whatever reason. As for involving her with Big Mac, well, if we're talking about a pony who lives to suck cock, I think it would be shocking if she didn't get a taste of him at least once, personal headcanons about Big Mac's sexuality notwithstanding.
6270166 fair enough; but I honestly don't expect this story to wind up in ponyville of all places, now whatever happens or doesn't happen will be subject the massive amounts of bias each the readers are bound to have, which is something you wouldn't have to deal with if the story was entirely composed of OCs.
Besides as I said before defining her job and place of residence already defines a huge portion of Deepy's life and so it limits what other authors can do with this character and premise being what would happen if a pony special talent was in sex.
So while I completely accept and embrace your decision to put Deepy in ponyville, I feel other authors would feel more encouraged to write their own Deepthrot Cockslut stories if they are welcome to put her in whatever settings they choose to without having to draw her out of ponyville first, as they would need to if it becomes established that she lives in ponyville.
6270226 I think you're giving me more credit than I deserve. I don't own Deepy or control her fate any more than anyone else does. My note was only meant to express that if anyone is taking cues from me, feel free to stop at this point. Authors and artists are definitely going to stop taking cues whenever they feel like it, and good on them to do so.
Also, don't worry about show characters. It'll go back to the regularly scheduled onslaught of OC's by next chapter.
6270243 Alright, but in the author note ffor this chapter you especially single out this point as the one to deviate from rather than stating that people should feel free to use any and all parts of the background you have built for this OC to write about her if they wish to use that same interpretation of who Deepy is.
I take you just wanted to inform the readers that next chapter you will finally begin the rising action by introducing the conflict that it's going to inevitanly lead to the climax of this story assuming you are following standard storytelling format.
Is just that the way you worded that it gave me the impression that you where trying to encourage people to use your setting to narrate their own stories about Deepy.
What I like about this story is that it's not just the clop that is well written but the actual story has a real appeal to me. Often authors focus too much on one. But this story has a really good balance. Can't wait to see the next chapter ^.^
My grandson takes after his grandpa, ya see, and there's a reason I got hip problems. Forty years o' gettin' humped by a stallion hung like a dragon 'll do that to ya.
... and I've officially lost all ability to have an erection.
And the name alone cracks me up...I am totally adding this to my read later shelf and I hope it gets finished soon so I can read it in its entirety...LOLZ!!
She gave Deepy a big grin. "Ol' Pearl just can't turn off, can she?" Granny Smith gave a hearty little chuckle. "Oh, I hope you know what yer gettin' yerself into. My grandson takes after his grandpa, ya see, and there's a reason I got hip problems. Forty years o' gettin' humped by a stallion hung like a dragon 'll do that to ya."
Excellent as usual
HA! Two dirt old mares. I wonder just how many other old mares are just as dirty as them because Granny SMith and Pearl were HILARIOUS!
Aaaaand I died.
Man, that chapter was hot. Good for Deepy and Big Mac. Gotta say. I didn't expected Granny Smith to be so helpful to Deepy or that there was an old mare, Pearl Necklace, who had a special talent like Deepy. I'm surprised at how perverted the old mares are/used to be and I wonder how Pearl knew Smith enough to give Deepy permission to screw Big Mac. Still, thanks for the interesting story.
6264719
LIIVVVEEEEEE
O and, by the way, if you died in space, could you retrieve my sides for me? I think their a couple universes away from earth.
*sigh* Finally. *CTRL+SHIFT+N* Let's do this.
Granny Smith. One of the earthiest earth ponies ever.
And best headcanon for hip problems ever.
And then Deepy found her lifepartner in Big Mac and they lived happily ever after. Except for her new hip problems. The End.
I love how both the plot and the 'plot' are interesting. Honestly I like seeing how Deeply gets through her general life as much as if not more than the sex. I suppose though those are very similar things for her.
I am very interested to see were her life goes now.
Awesome again
Okay. Seems normal enough.
ಠ_ಠ
6266652 At this point, I honestly wonder what you were expecting.
6266652
6266662
I don't get it... Maybe I'm trying to hard.
6266723
http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=pearl+necklace
6266760 i am surprised at my perverted mind for not knowing that one. Good on ya Rusty.
6264708
All of them. They are old and are allowed to be inappropriate.
I try, I try every chapter and say, "I'm not going to fall for the setups and punch lines. I'm going to invest myself into this girl's life and her daily struggles."
Every time I fail.
Hardcover, if your reading this, I'll will deepthroat your cock because of this masterpiece of literature.
This story is the epitome of how well rounded, sexy, and funny a clopfic should be.
This story is the
horse'sdog's bollocks.6267025 /
Five out of five mustaches, couldn't have said it better myself.
I just wish you had added that bit about this being Deepy's canon and feeling free to deviate from it last chapter before involving her with characters from the show. That way there would be more freedom as to what she could be doing after graduation.
6270066 I think, one way or another, most people seem to put Deepy in Ponyville for whatever reason. As for involving her with Big Mac, well, if we're talking about a pony who lives to suck cock, I think it would be shocking if she didn't get a taste of him at least once, personal headcanons about Big Mac's sexuality notwithstanding.
6270166 fair enough; but I honestly don't expect this story to wind up in ponyville of all places, now whatever happens or doesn't happen will be subject the massive amounts of bias each the readers are bound to have, which is something you wouldn't have to deal with if the story was entirely composed of OCs.
Besides as I said before defining her job and place of residence already defines a huge portion of Deepy's life and so it limits what other authors can do with this character and premise being what would happen if a pony special talent was in sex.
So while I completely accept and embrace your decision to put Deepy in ponyville, I feel other authors would feel more encouraged to write their own Deepthrot Cockslut stories if they are welcome to put her in whatever settings they choose to without having to draw her out of ponyville first, as they would need to if it becomes established that she lives in ponyville.
Makes sense?
6270226 I think you're giving me more credit than I deserve. I don't own Deepy or control her fate any more than anyone else does. My note was only meant to express that if anyone is taking cues from me, feel free to stop at this point. Authors and artists are definitely going to stop taking cues whenever they feel like it, and good on them to do so.
Also, don't worry about show characters. It'll go back to the regularly scheduled onslaught of OC's by next chapter.
6270243 Alright, but in the author note ffor this chapter you especially single out this point as the one to deviate from rather than stating that people should feel free to use any and all parts of the background you have built for this OC to write about her if they wish to use that same interpretation of who Deepy is.
I take you just wanted to inform the readers that next chapter you will finally begin the rising action by introducing the conflict that it's going to inevitanly lead to the climax of this story assuming you are following standard storytelling format.
Is just that the way you worded that it gave me the impression that you where trying to encourage people to use your setting to narrate their own stories about Deepy.
What I like about this story is that it's not just the clop that is well written but the actual story has a real appeal to me. Often authors focus too much on one. But this story has a really good balance. Can't wait to see the next chapter ^.^
6265034 Imagine what Granny Smith went through.
6320932 Like Granny like in-law granddaughter.
this is surprisingly excellent.
Just gonna leave this here
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... and I've officially lost all ability to have an erection.
whens the next part coming?
6559978 All in good time. School has been kicking my ass lately, but I will find time one way or another to finish this.
This is seriously one of the best fics out there!
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6264719 My reaction to that was this.d2ws0xxnnorfdo.cloudfront.net/meme/285902
And the name alone cracks me up...I am totally adding this to my read later shelf and I hope it gets finished soon so I can read it in its entirety...LOLZ!!
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6650887 Soon! I promise!
And that's how I met your mother.
Took me a bit to realize what she meant. At first I thought she meant a LITERAL bull.
I think this was one of the better chapters. Couldn't say why.
Granny Smith: Giver of Zero Fucks.
So you aren't the creator of Deepy, I think I read that already, but who did make her, then?
7706930 Jon Fawkes on Tumblr.