The Unusual

by Sparkling Shadow

Youtuber City

"Ahhhhhh" Twilight and friends screamed, as they landed on the ground with a *polp.* "Where are we?" Pinkie muttered.
"Your in Youtuber City duh!" An unusual voice said

"And may I ask who you are?"

"Well I'm mlpstopmotion. But you can call me Lizzy."

"Hey Lizzy!" Another unusual voice said. "Hey soda...WOW!" Shouted mlpstopmotion, immediately noticing that they weren't youtubers. "A-are you t-the m-mane s-six?" "Oh man run!" Rainbow screamed, and they went running down the path.

Author's Note:

Hey guys!

It's me Nightime Dream, hope you enjoyed my first story!

Please don't post hateful comments, Pony's have feelings you know.

Don't forget to follow (watch) me to become a Friendship Warrior today!

Comments

[Windlife]

Do you even care about grammar? I mean, it looks like you pushed this out after ten minutes, tops.

You need a editor. Please get one.

[Sparkling Shadow]

Your right.

I really do need an editor, but I do try my best.

[Elric of Melnipony]

On a cloudy day, the mane six, discover a magical portal.
It this story, the mane six, discover a magical portal, that leads to a mysterious land.

This is an example of excessive comma use.

[Sparkling Shadow]

Saylux,

Thanks for correcting me!

[Sparkling Shadow]

Elric of Melnipony,

Did I use too many commas?

[Rye Snoot]

Well you don't have to have an editor because I do hate sharing with another writers or editors you should try Google docs and make sure you have it locked so only you can change it let the grammar and spell checks lead you to victory.

[CherryBlossom6420]

Some of your grammar was wrong. No offence. I can tell. Anyways can't wait for more!