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The Unusual

On a cloudy day, the mane six, discover a magical portal.

It this story, the mane six, discover a magical portal, that leads to a mysterious land.

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Unusual Sightings · 31st Mar 2015 · 740 words
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The Magic Mirror · 31st Mar 2015 · 204 words
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Youtuber City · 31st Mar 2015 · 98 words
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Comment posted by Sparkling Shadow deleted Apr 2nd, 2015

Windlife

Windlife #2 · Mar 31st, 2015 · · · Youtuber City ·

Do you even care about grammar? I mean, it looks like you pushed this out after ten minutes, tops.

You need a editor. Please get one.

Sparkling Shadow

Sparkling Shadow #3 · Mar 31st, 2015 · · · Youtuber City ·

Your right.

I really do need an editor, but I do try my best.

Elric of Melnipony

Elric of Melnipony #4 · Mar 31st, 2015 · · · Youtuber City ·

On a cloudy day, the mane six, discover a magical portal.
It this story, the mane six, discover a magical portal, that leads to a mysterious land.

This is an example of excessive comma use.

Sparkling Shadow

Sparkling Shadow #5 · Apr 1st, 2015 · · · Youtuber City ·

Saylux,

Thanks for correcting me!

Sparkling Shadow

Sparkling Shadow #6 · Apr 1st, 2015 · · · Youtuber City ·

Elric of Melnipony,

Did I use too many commas?

Rye Snoot

Rye Snoot #7 · May 13th, 2015 · · · Youtuber City ·

Well you don't have to have an editor because I do hate sharing with another writers or editors you should try Google docs and make sure you have it locked so only you can change it let the grammar and spell checks lead you to victory.

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