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Well, can't say if I'm pleased to see the Grand Ruler utterly broken. Plus, Daybreaker and Tempest! (Excuse me while I squee for a moment.)
Yep, Starfleet's boned.
Let me just get this in right now.
Music Maestro!
*bows*You are amazing, bless this fic
Okay, I've gone over this two-parter and I can say, without a doubt, loved it!
The fight scenes were epic!
The heartwarmers were epic!
The deaths were epic!
The cameos were epic!
All of it! Pure, unadulterated Epicness!
Cried at Starla and Dementia's reunion and I'm glad Lightning's finally sorted himself out. He and Krysta are gonna' be okay.
Epicness from Cadence and Luna and I loved the Nidra cameo.
Discord was a magnificent bastard, as usual!
The truth behind Unicornicopia was very climactic and I loved how it played out.
The Flutterponies are awesome and kick all kinds of ass in the name of whimsy!
And I eagerly await Twilight Sparkle's rebirth.
And now, as I did with Rhymey, I've composed a song for the late and unlamented Grand Ruler Celesto.
Sung to this tune.
Ahem.
A one, a two, a one, two, three, four...
Old Grand Ruler
Ain’t no Dueller
Here and now, at last, he dies!
Sweet Celestia
Worked to best ya’
No-one weeps at your demise.
Cold and chronic
Quite moronic
There’s no-one else we more despise!
Now Dark Conquest
Starts a F**k-Fest!
Shoves his shaft through both your eyes!
Now at last
Your foul reign has passed
Harmonia Equestria's on the rise!
Hear us sing for
Legendbringer
You’re the one we idolise!
It's a great story, real fun ride. I just have one real problem; the villain.
Don't get me wrong; the Grand Ruler is appropriately despicable and the supporting villains have all been entertaining and intriguing with their sub-plots and character-arcs. You did real well on those villains.
No, I just have a problem with Dark Conquest. He's just kind of a generic edgelord bad guy. 'Ooh, he rapes people to show how EVUL he is!', or 'Ooh, he fiddles the dead to show how DEPRAVED he is!' There is just no creativity to his villainy; just the bare basic 'Rape so people hate him' thing. There's no real emotional manipulation going on, there's just nothing interesting or engaging about him. Now, he doesn't need redeeming qualities or a redemption arc to be interesting, but I just have no enjoyment while reading sections with him in it. He's unlikable, but not in the right way for a villain. He's just too generically, cartoonishly evil without any real depth to his character, or even a personality outside of 'typical 90s edgy villain'.
There are ways to make irredeemable, despicable villains entertaining in a different way to Grand Ruler. Just look at Palpatine from Star Wars, or Megatron from Transformers: Animated, just to name a few; monstrous, evil characters that received no redemption arcs, but still had depth and were entertaining to watch. Conquest just... lacks this. I don't feel rage or despise him, because there's not enough depth there for me to hate. There's just... boredom.
Other than that, you are phenomenal with the other characters. Really developed them well. Kudos on that. Just a bit of constructive criticism. (Bit late to change, I know, but just keep it in mind for the future.)
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Kind of intentional. For what I've gathered he's the embodiment of Grimdark Hate Fics and the people who enjoy them.
Is that meant to be a nod to Kefka Palazzo?
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90's? I was aiming for 80's!
Ok, I kid. No, I don't mind the constructive critism, I relish it. It shows that I have a lot to grow from, and a lot to learn. Hey constructive critisim is why I think I improved on the villians Kudos, Raven, and Rhymey. And like Cosmic said,
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Conquest is the embodiment of all grimdark hate fics in existance. He is the one who people write when they come up with the Sailor Moon dieing horribly, or Pokemon getting abused. He is the living embodiment of all of those little hate stories that we create once in a while. Wich...is why he is so silly. After all, Hate can be a silly thing at times. Why not embrace a story with love, laughter, and joy. Like our girls.
While I love writing for him because he has no limits and I can be silly and depraved as much as I want to, I will make no argument that he is still just a fun villian. This is also why I loved having Celestia be the first one to make him mad.
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Why, yes. Yes it is. FFVI is my second favorite Final Fantasy game and I alos love the Ponified version to death.
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You know, there are days when you are feeling down and feeling sad. Then I see comments like this and I am dancing on cloud nine.
8585889 I HAVE THAT GAME AND I LOVE IT TOO!
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Mental note I must give that game a try
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Well, I've been reading this fic a while and I do get your concern but you see, Conquest starts to stand out in his own way as the story progresses.
Conquest isn't just a 'villain', he's not just the embodiment of 'villainy', he's the embodiment of 'the villain'.
When a world demands his presence, when a world has become so corrupt and malicious that its hatred can be felt across the cosmos, Conquest is drawn to it.
The fact that he quite literally gets off on rape, slaughter and barbarity isn't just in his character, it's his purpose. He is, in himself, the ideal nemesis and however bad the world he's entering, the worse he will be for them. And since Starfleet are already far closer to villains than heroes, he's going all out.
In a way, he considers his presence there and all the destruction he brings appropriate justice.
While Conquest is clearly enjoying every minute of being Conquest there's an underlying sense about his character that lends him some amount of morality ambiguity. By upsetting the established order, his actions indirectly aid the real heroes (The Bearers of Harmony) and teach the failed heroes the error of their ways (Starfleet) and he seems strangely aware of this. Around the Elements and reformed Starfleet members, he shows a certain amount of honour and respect, impressed by their efforts and even more so by their successes however gradual, acknowledging them as the true heroes of this world who've earned the right to rule it. And around his fellows, such as the Necromancer, Kudos, Titan and Raven, he's really quite chummy, appearing to just be as touched by the Magic of Friendship as the heroes, telling us something about just how far that magic can go.
So, despite him at first having all the subtlety of a live chainsaw down the front of one's pants (And roughly the same end result) his motives become more and more mysterious as the story goes on and the meta vibes about his existence and how he's drawn to any kind of spiteful, hateful fanfic and rips them a new one, make him quite an interesting character.
8585898 Added to the Retcon part of this fic's TV Tropes paeg. :D
A thought hit me... if Grand Microdick von HAAAAAAAAX was an Equestrian all along... does that mean he banned the next generation from getting cutie marks because he himself could not get one? Or was the mark he got, if he obtained one, not what he wanted?
While I'm a little disappointed that the Grand Ruler turned out to be such a paper tiger...everything here was absolutely effing awesome. Unfortunately it's taken me so long to read this (two bus trips too and from work) that I can't give any specifics except that Trixie's speech was the high point for me.
And I was a little shocked that you really weren't kidding about Captain Shaina's student loans.
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0-0 oh then it just too bad CMC weren't there at that time period
8593207 As far as I'm concerned, the CMC got their marks before Grand Dweeb even came into the picture.
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*Blinks* Wait...I knew I forgot to talk about something during the reveal!
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Maybe the trio could've helped saved the entire planet.
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Well, in the eariler chapters (Way back in chapter three) I made mention that Sweetie had her cutie mark already. See, this story got it's start before season five was a thing, and thus no "Crusaders of the Lost Mark." So, in this particular world, Sweetie got hers first, followed by Apple Bloom, and then Scoots. I was never really expecting something like them basically becoming haralds of the next generation of foals and helpers of arts, work, and sports.
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That comment we had a few chapters ago kind of inspired me to write it. I figured I had so many great motivations, wouldn't it be kind of fun to just have a punch clock villian who's main reason is rather common.
8593887 Still, it is food for thought.
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I CAN HEAR THE REACTION OF CELESTO MCDWEEB WHEN CONQUEST OUTS HIM AS A BLANK FLANK.
And then he got his cutie mark of a circle; things go full circle for him.
What did you mean by that? *perplexed*
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And Leilani! Every chapter I've been bugging you about her and now you finally reveal the truth I forgot to comment on it!
That was very clever. Very clever indeed, I had no idea.
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I was talking about her guards. The Lion heart stallion cameo, that is actually Squall Leonheart from FFVIII, and I was joking that in the other princess's guards we have Terra Brandford (FFVI, wich is also the story that inspired Ditzy) and Cloud Strife from FFVII
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Thank you *Bows* That twist was one I was curious to see your reaction to.
8594140 Ah. :D
I did a ponified fanart of Terra... but it'll need to be redone, since that was done in my GIMP days and I polished my skills with SAI in the time since.
8594140 Say... plan on doing anything relating to Grand Dickhead's cutie mark?
Hmm, just for curiosity (and convenience's) sake is there any chance we can get a list of Meadowbrook's Eight Items and their properties?
It took me so long to comment and I just want you to know, I do read your stories, it simply takes me so long to finish. I absolutely love how this two parter went, I like how you exactly capture the villains mimicking a certain someone reacting to the heroes ideals. I can't wait to read more, and I hope to see the next chapter soon.
Take care LB and have an interesting day
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This should explain everything
So looking over this past chapter again the thought occurs that DC has seriously shot himself in the foot with his latest move.
Alright, yes. He's generated enough hatred to fill his batteries for quite some time. Something he's been doing steadily since he arrived. However he's also proven (or rather, Pinkie Pie has proven) that just as hatred strengthens him things like love and laughter are like his own personal kryptonite (or even worse).
Facing facts, GR was the chief source of hatred and divisiveness that was keeping Equestria from being truly united. Under normal circumstances I'd say his death would only change so much as the Space Ponies would still likely work to carry on his example in their blind eagerness to serve him, but Conquest just ripped that veil away so hard it left rug burn. There is literally no reason for anyone to continue following Celesto's example.
Which means there is little, if anything, to keep the Space Ponies and all the various races of Equestria and Star Fleet's allied planets from accepting whatever reparations and alliances Celestia and Luna put forth. If nothing else the Royal Sisters are diplomats and, alongside the Knights of Harmony and the Umbran Circle, they'd already gathered scores of allies. Add to that the fact that the fact that the Equestrian forces are no longer being run by a complete idiot who was convinced that Conquest would switch to "Monster of the Week" tactics because that's what he personally was used to and...
Well, Conquest might have won the battle, but I have a feeling he's about to lose the war. Hard.
Still convinced he's somehow involved with Team Four Star's Mr. Perfect Cell.
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Heh,heh. Well, Conquest's voice actor in my head is Takahata01. That and I do get inspired by their Cell and Frieza.
With Conquest pulling the rug from under GR's society, I'm surprised the hatred and resentment that follows hasn't reached breaking point and turned Conquest into resident reality warper. With that much hatred, it's going to take a lot to break through that.
Apparently, someone left the background music on.
Just when you thought Conquest couldn't get anymore messed up.
Other than that, I can honestly say: FREEDOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM!!!!!!!!!
P.S. The fight between Trixie and Shaina? Hilarious!
Grif: MY NAME DOES NOT HAVE TWO “f’s” IN IT!
In all seriousness this is a great story