The Ending (part 1)
"Welcome to the Factory"
Those were the last words that were heard throughout the room.
Rainbow Dash was poised and ready to pull the lever that operated the machine. Discord was just sat there, a maniacal grin plastered on his face.
Just as Dash was about to pull the lever to lower the knife into the struggling colt, a loud crash was heard, as a dark hooded, bi-pedal figure dropped into the room, stopping Dash in her tracks. Discord fell over in utter surprise and shock.
The hooded figure pulled a slender pipe from his back, that had suddenly appeared there. He placed it in his hands and a loud bang was heard as the pipe discharged. Rainbow fell over, screaming in pain. He pulled back something on the pipe, causing a small, red cylinder to fall out of a hole in the bottom of the weapon. Whatever the pipe was, the colt knew that he didn't want to be on the business end of it.
Loud bangs and clacking noises were heard throughout the room as the weapon was being discharged at Discord, who kept teleporting away.
The figure howled in frustration as he slammed the weapon to the ground.
He swiped his hands down as a BZING was heard. Two pronged, blood red blades appeared out of his arms.
He charged at Discord, swiping his arms down. Discord doged it with ease.
This only angered the figure more.
He once again charged at Discord, although this time he moved so fast that he was a blur.
All Discord could see was the figure getting ready to charge, then, in less than a blink of the eye, he was in front of him, with his head in a headlock and the blades pointing at his chest and throat.
"I thought you were reformed, Discord." The figure said in a raspy, metallic voice. "Such a shame Fluttershy insn't here to save you."
The blades were then pushed into Discord's chest who screamed out in excruciating pain.
"I thought you would know what plasma would do to flesh." The figure said with a smirk, as he pushed them in further, earning a bloodcurdling scream from Discord. "But it turns out you don't."
Discord's body soon went limp, and the figure pulled his blades out of Discord with a smirk on his face.
He turned around to Rainbow and said with a maniacal grin, "You're next!" And launched at her.
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The battle between the figure and Dash lasted for awhile. All the colt could do was lie there and watch the events unfold.
The figure got Dash into a head lock and pulled her towards the machine.
"Now you turn this thing off or die." He said in his metallic voice.
Rainbow was on the verge of tears. "OK." She said and pressed the red button to turn it off.
He released her from the headlock and just as she was about to fly away, he wacked her with the butt of his weapon.
Dash fell to the ground, unconscious.
The figure then walked casually up to the colt and pulled down his hood revealing a pair of black headphones and a pair of black rimmed shades, with red lenses.
He approached the colt whom was shaking in utter fear. The figure had a warm and comforting smile on his face.
He reached down to the bindings and ripped them clean off.
He held out his hand and gestured for the colt to take it. He did and the figure helped him off the table.
He gave the colt a rectangular device with a screen on it.
"This will help you get out of here. I should be off now, I have places to be." He said as he rose into the air, with Dash in his arm, and flew out through the hole in the ceiling.
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The figure landed outside of a small house in the Everfree forest. He unlocked the door to the house and went inside.
He slumped the unconscious form of Rainbow Dash onto the couch, went into the kitchen and opened the fridge.
Just as he was about to pull out a microwaveable lasagne to have for his dinner, he heard a low moan and shuffling come from the couch.
He slammed the fridge door in frustration, almost causing the fridge to tople over and take with it the Rekorderlig cider bottles on top of it, and returned to the living room.
There he saw that Dash was now awake and looking around the room in confusion.
She turned towards the figure that had entered and suddenly realised that he had foalnapped her.
"Why did you foalnap me?" She screamed in anger as she flew at him.
He stopped her in her tracks with one hand holding onto her head.
"Now, now Rainbow Da..."
"How the hay do you know my name?" She screamed at him, struggling to get closer.
"Now there's no use in fighting me, you know I'm a lot stronger than you are." He said flatly.
Dash sighed in defeat and let herself drop to the floor.
"Who are you and where are we?" She said, anger still resonating in her voice.
"I was the one that stopped you from killing that innocent little colt and now you are in my house in the Everfree forest." He said.
"What do you want with me?" She asked still sounding angered.
"I want to help you to fight the insanity that is inside of you, but it looks like the whack I gave you with my shotgun did that for me."
"Wait. You whacked me?" She said shocked, but still angered.
"Eeyup. That was the only way to get you here that would not involve in anymore bloodshed than what was necessary." He said, matter-of-factly.
"But still..."
"That was not the response I was hoping for. Usually ponies ask me what a shotgun is."
"Well... What is a shotgun?" She asked him.
"A shotgun is a weapon that causes great pain to someone when fired from a mid-range. Short-range however, you die from one shot. It uses shells that have a explode sending little tiny balls flying towards you at a high velocity."
Dash shuddered at the thought of that thing killing ponies with the shotgun.
"But, I know what you're thinking, I will not harm or kill anyone unless absolutely necessary."
She sighed in relief. 'At least he won't kill any pony in coldblood.' She thought to herself.
"So mister." She addressed the figure. "I ain't seen any pony like you in Ponyville or even Equestria. Can you shed some light onto what and who you are?"
"My designation is Overdrive and I am a techno-organic vampire. I was a human, but a virus, that almost killed me, made me into what I am today." He said. "But do not fret little pony, for I do not wish to suck your blood."
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Filly means girl. Please stop using filly for male children. The word you want is either foal, which is baby or child, or colt, which is boy.
Basically saying, "I DONT LIEK DAT RFC STOREE! TIME TO FUCK UP THE ENDING!!1!1!1" Don't go Myaki on that.
Oh and the description is for the actual story synopsis. Save your backstory for the authors notes.
5532808 I corrected myself. Sorry
5532812 Wat da fuq dude? I like the story, it's just that the ending wasn't solid enough. I get that it's trying to get some mystery in the ending, but I felt that it just wasn't enough.
Deadreaderz>> If you post a comment that accuses me of writing bad stuff and saying bad/rude things about me, your comment will be deleted was I don't like people who do that.
Constructive criticism is still welcome though.
5535143
Don't delete comments. Unless he says to kill yourself, you have no right to censor people.
5535928 soz mate. I'll take that into consideration
5535143
Wait did I?
*looks at deleted comment *
Oh, my brother did it. I'm not joking, my bro accidentally comment on my account.
So forgive me if my bro being bad to you.
5536683 I forgive you dude, but relating to the comment, what did your brother say? If it is rude and has swear words, bleep them out or reduce the rudeness.
5536696
IDK.
He never tell me anything about it. I didn't know he comment this until when I find your fanfic.
However, I read your story before I look at the comments.
Now I Read the rainbow factory condemned before and I read the ending again before I read this.
Anyway, on to the story.
Now here's one problem about this, at least to me. Discord's death
Here's my reaction.
"Uhhh, you know, you should be aware that you're fighting Spirit of Chaos that can do things like
This
This
And This (Well he's ill but hey, that sneeze.)
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Reaction end.
See those are like my reaction to that part, and I find it, well, Bullshit
How can you kill Spirit of Chaos by stabbing him in the chest?
In reality, he could dodge something like this img0.derpicdn.net/img/view/2014/5/10/622828__safe_animated_screencap_discord_magic_hub+logo_twilight%27s+kingdom_spoiler-colon-s04e25_lord+tirek_denied.gif
Unless if you gonna revive Discord on the later chapters like he survive the stab and plans a revenge on him, that will be fair.
If not, then, I'm disappointed.
But that doesn't mean I fully hated the story all because this happens, I'm gonna continue reading to see what happens next until it completed. Then I'll express if I either like or hate it. Or love-hate it. Keep on to your story.
P.S Hope we can see some back story for that Organic-vampire guy.
5537070 I'll think about reviving him much later on, but no promises. As for the back-story, it will be explained in the next chapter. Hope you enjoy it.
5537070 And its techno-organic, as in Sari from TF animated in the episodes where Sondwave puts the Autobots into a dream world and turns them into humans. The vampire was inspired by the main character in Techno Illogic.
NEW CHARACTER! Vinyl Scratch (DJ PON-3) will now be in this story. For reasons that I cannot tell as there will be big spoilers if I do.