Standing up

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Every day is a nightmare. Becuase of her. She has had to deal with her as long as she can remember. But not today. Today she fights for blank flanks everywhere. Not just herself, but for everypony. Because THIS. IS. EQUESTRIA!

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PegaSeraph

PegaSeraph #1 · Jan 11th, 2015 · · · The Punishment ·

I may not have my cutiemark, but you don't see me teasing other ponies in order to get my xutiemark.

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Cavenerd20 #2 · Jan 11th, 2015 · · · A Victim No more ·

I may not have my cutiemark, but you don't see me teasing other ponies in order to get my cxutiemark.

Someone else already corrected the X, but I would have written, "you don't see me teasing other ponies to get it!" That sounds more natural to me. More like speaking, you know?

I once read a tip that I think you might find useful; when writing dialogue, try to hear the character saying it in your head, and if it doesn't sound right, rewrite it so it sounds better. I do that myself.

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