• Published 5th Jan 2015
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Wish upon a Star - TerminatorPON47



Danny Roger; a 16 year old brony; wishes upon a star to see the world of Equestria. After being hit by a truck, he suddenly woke up in Equestria.

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A Very Eventful Night

Started by TitanKiller finished by TerminatorPON47
Chapter 1: a very eventful night

Danny Roger was writing a fanfic outside in the stars. Sitting down on the grass with the wonderful scenery of the sky upon him. As he finished his third chapter, he dropped his notepad and pencil and sighed. “Wow, the stars are cool today, look at that one, all twinkling and stuff.” He said with enthusiasm. “OOH! Cool, It’s a shooting star!” He looked at it with awe. He then closed his eyes and said “I wish I could be in Equestria so I can meet Rainbow Dash! Since that's what a person who's not sane would wish, I wish for infinite wishes!” . As he finished , he looked at his watch “Oh Shit! It’s way past my bed time!” It was 12:45 am. He then hastily stood up and went to his car, while driving, he kept looking up at the sky to see how cool it will be while he’s in motion. He then looked at his front and saw a truck; bigger than his car. ”Shit!” He swore as his car was then slammed by the truck, thrown a few meters away from the centre of the damage.

The man who would be the driver of the truck, exited the vehicle and ran to the poor Danny Roger. Danny’s vision started to go blurry and his body feels heavy. “Oh God, I’m So Sorry! I didn’t mean it- I-I’ll call the ambulance!” The man said as he brought out his cellphone. Danny then closed his eyes expecting death and the gate to the skies to appear at his front. Instead, a bright flash of light, he can feel his senses returning.


He woke up in a white room and there’s no sign of human life. As he walked around with curiosity, he then heard a voice, as if it was just beside him which said “Wish Granted.”. He then looked around for the source of the voice but none, just white, pure light and pure white light. Then he was knocked unconscious again.


Danny woke up in a forest unfamiliar to him. Then his memories returned. He then searched his memories and thought ‘Man, did that truck really hit me from the street to a fucking forest? Man, It’s a miracle that I survived.’ He then checked his body for injuries. “Hoof? Fine, Wing? Fine, Muzzle? Fine. Everything seems to be alright…. Wait a second?” Then he realized something…. He was not a human but a PONY. “What the- MY VOICE!” He quickly covered his mouth with his hoof. He walked to a nearby pond and saw himself or for now; herself. She saw the reflection of a dark grey, red and black haired, red iris mare. She looked at her tail which was the same colour of her mane. She then looked at her flank: A bunch of knives as cutie marks. Then it hit her, she was her OC, Red Blade. “Oh my Celestia…. Wait, Celestia?!” She kept trying to say God only to keep making her say Celestia until she gave up. “Buck this, I’m going elsewhere other than here!” So she followed the trail to Ponyville only to sense someone’s following her. She turned around and saw 3-5 timberwolves. “Buck!” She then ran as fast as she can breathe. “I think I lost ‘em.” She said and sighed in relief. “Woah, how did I even trot without practicing? Maybe I’m just a natural at galloping.” She then ran away from the Everfree forest. Looking at the area: nopony’s there, the moon was about to set and the stars are still visible in the sky. “Huh, It’s just sunrise? Woah it matched the time I got into ao coma!” She then continued “Why is it specific, I wonder If I AM actually in a coma. Am I or am I not?” That thought confused her even more, she then said “Why am I a Girl! I should be my OC, Star Dust who is a boy. You know what, I’ll stop talking.” As she walked closer to Twilight’s library, she then knocked on the door. She got no response after knocking for 11 times. “Dammit!” She then went away from the door and went under a shady tree and slept there.


Twilight Sparkle; smartest Princess in Equestria, was fast asleep in her home, the Library. On that day, she received 11 loud knockings on the door. “Why in Celestia would a pony wake me up in the middle of the night?!” She then tried to go downstairs and open the door but she was too tired to use magic so she used her hooves but she failed. She used her teeth but the results : Failure. She then gave up and kicked the door open with sheer anger. Actually, the door didn’t open, It flew a few meters high and hit Rainbow Dash.


Danny or Red, woke up and readied herself for a new day. “Okay, first time I actually slept outdoors.” She then went back to the library, only to discover the door was gone. “Huh, That’s strange, I swore there was a door here.” She went inside the library only to find a bruised and bandaged Rainbow Dash and Twilight with a guilty face.

“I’m sorry Rainbow Dash, I kicked the door for a very good reason…” She then said.

“Like What?” She said grumpily with her popular raspy voice.

“Uhhhh, Th-there was a pony who knocked on my do-“

“A PONY KNOCKED ON YOUR DOOR SO WHAT!?”

“In the middle of the night.”

“That makes sense.”

“EXACTLY!”

“If I may interrupt, I should be the one to say sorry to Rainbow Dash.”

Then Rainbow looked at me with a confused look. “Why?”

“Because I’m the one who knocked.”

“Well, I forgive you, but hey, I’ve never seen you before.”

“I’m Red Blade, master of knives. “

“I’m Rainbow Dash; Coolest and the fastest Pegasus flyer in Ponyville!” Then Twilight tried to introduce herself but was caught off. “Hey, why don’t we race to see who’s faster?”

“I can’t fly.” Then Rainbow laughed and laughed and laughed until she stopped.

“Why can’t ya fly? Every Pegasus knows how to fly and besides, I already have a filly in training.”

“Well, that means I’m not flying. Well hope we meet again!” She then went outside the library. Then a crash was heard which caught everypony’s attention. It was a manticore a whole pack of them

Then Pinkie Pie ran to the library and shouted “Twilight! TWILIGHT! SCARY CREATURES ARE OUTSIDE!!!”

Then Red Blade just had her jaw dropped to the ground and said “Pinkie sure is a fast runner. “ Then she snapped back into reality as a manticore threw a cart just above her.“I gotta get out of here, not only here but also back to my World!” She then ran into the library, jumped and landed on Twilight. She said “Get ME BACK HOME!” She said with rage “Get me back home NOW OR I’LL USE KNIVES AND DISSECT YOU!”

Then RD flew and slammed me then AJ tied me. “Get me out!”

“No, I sense that you’re hostile. After the whole jump and kill me thing, I can’t let you out…”

“Well, you leave me no choice…..” Since it’s his OC, Danny made Red Blade Special…. He gave her the power to spawn and control knives which is similar to one of the Power Ponies Powers. Red Blade spawned the knives and she cut herself loose.

“Get HER!” Twilight commanded “We can’t let her hurt anyone!”


As Blade hid in the Everfree forest. She then said “Damn, only if I were a guy… I wish that I was a guy….” Then his fur proceeded to change into grey, mane turning white, irises turning orange, removing Pegasus wings, growing a horn, and marehood to manhood and the knives cutie mark changed into a spiral galaxy. “Yeah, I’m a he again. Well that’s weird but who cares? Since no one would recognize me, I guess that I-“

He was then cut off by the voice again from the white room saying “Wish Granted.” Star Dust committed the same action he did in the white room: turn around to find the source of the sound.

“Again, nopony’s here…” As he realized that he can now go back to Ponyville, he turned around and galloped back there. Then there he was, slammed by a Rainbow Dash who just hit Mach 2.

“Hey guy’s I think I caught… Her… Oh my gosh… I am so sorry…”

He stood up with no injuries how so ever. “I Apologize.”

“But I…”

“Shhhh, don’t you have a mare to follow?”

“Uhhhh.. Yes.”

“Well then, nice knowing you.” Then he trotted to Ponyville.

“HAHAHA, Man that reaction… Woah, the manticore’s are gone already. It’s best if I did miss it. Well now I can start from square 1 in Ponyville.” It’s now morning and now he can knock on the door, well if there was a door. “Hello? Anypony here?” No responses until 5 ponies appear before him. “Hi, I wonder If I may sleep here for tonight. And I see that your library is a mess. Are there any reasons why?”

“Well, there was a pony who threatened me so we tied her up. Then she escaped…”

“Well, I think I’d better be careful…. Anyway, may I sleep here now?”

“Yeah, until Pinkie will make you a welcome party. By the way, where is she?”

As if on cue, she appeared right in front of Star. “HI!

WHATS YOUR NAME I JUST HAD 35 CUP CAKES THATS WHY I CAN SPEAK LIKE THIS AND EVERYTHING AROUND Me IS SLOW LIKE if I was IN ANOTHER DIMENSION BY THE WAY WHATS YOUR NAME? OH YEAH AND *Gasp*” said pinky pie at the speed of light" Then she disappeared

“What…the….hay…. Oh yeah, I never told you my name! My name is Star Dust. Nice to meet ya!”

AJ walked up to me and said “What the hay is that on you cutie mark?”

“It’s a Spiral Galaxy. It’s really big, bigger than this planet. By the way, Twilight do you have any books on space?” He pretended to be interested in space when he’s supposed to be interested in math.
“Well, yes, I do have books about space. Here you go.”

“Thanks.” The title says ‘Big Book About Space’ “Okay……” As he read page by page for a few minutes

7 minutes later

“So they have their version of Albert Einstein…” He whispered “And they also have their version of Edwin Hubble….. Wow, It’s like this is an alternate dimension…” He then closed the book and returned it. He looked at the clock, 11:00 pm, imitating his semi-last words. “It’s way past my bedtime! Well better go to sleep.” He yawned. “Where do I sleep? I think I’ll ask her.” He then went upstairs and saw her writing something. “Uhhh, Twilight, aren’t you sleepy?”

“No, not at all, I’m just writing what happened today to Princess Celestia. So what brings you here Mr. Dust?”

“Where do I sleep?”

“On the Extra bed.”

“Oh, who's this lil' fella over here?” He said, pointing at Spike.

“That’s my assistant, Spike. He's a baby dragon so don't wake him up now.”

“Oh, okay..” As he pretended to not know all these information that is being tossed in his face.

“So, You sleepy?”

“Yup, good night!” Then he finally slept on the bed.

“Wow, he sleeps fast. Well now, I write. Dear Princess Celestia, Today, we just found 2 new ponies. 1 threatened me and the other one is sleeping with me. When the first one came, a Golem appeared out of nowhere, so AJ was the one to lasso its legs and destroy it with one punch. The first pony by the name of Red Blade, threatened to kill me for a reason which I didn’t hear because of the commotion outside. Then when we tied her up, she magically spawned knives out of nowhere and cut herself free but she’s a Pegasus! Even though it’s confusing, what’s even more confusing is that she disappeared without a trace, then Rainbow told me that she was flying at Mach 2 and she saw Star Dust, mistaking him for Red Blade and slammed him. Even though the distance of how far he was thrown, he was still alive, no bruises and no injuries. Even though it’s hard to believe, trust me, Rainbow Dash told the truth. I’ll ask further information about Star Dust.

From Your Faithful student: Twilight Sparkle.”

Twilight then went to Spike. “Hey Spike, can you send this ONE letter to Prin-“ Spike sneezed and the letter was sent. “Woah, did Spike just sneezed while sleeping? Awww, so cute…” Then she took one last glance at Star Dust. “Hope he gives me valuable information soon……”

Author's Note:

i hope u injoy this story this is my first story

Thanks and have a great day or night

This song is great with this story hope u injoy http://m.youtube.com/watch?v=qFBKCIxzaBk

Comments ( 64 )

Sup hope u injoy this story

Calling b8 here.

5466123 WHAT I DONT KNOW WHAT DID U SAY

5466130 wow gr8 fkn story srsly m8 go on i wwish to reed moar

5466140 WHAT THE HECK DID U SAY PLZ TALk ENGLISH DUde :derpytongue2::derpyderp1:

Note for you, author: some people here will insta-downvote you because you used a pony creator image.

And if they do read your story, isn't it a wee bit dangerous for you to make a Gary Stu? Oh well, just don't make him too unbelievably OP that it becomes ridiculous :pinkiecrazy:

Comment posted by TerminatorPON47 deleted Jan 6th, 2015

5466156 Wow, excellent story. Please, do go on as I'd love to read more. ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

5466159 WHOS GARY SU??????? and dont worry red blade will not return till i say so (No it will not be in chapter 2)and ill change the cover art now

5466163 "We'll be counting the stars"? Is that the name?

5467096

Asking me to give you an OC pony? Oh well... I'll just come up with one on the spot then

Name: Fade Away
female unicorn
black splotch as a cutie mark.

“I’m Red Blade, master of knives. “

My reaction was something like this GIF

gifsforum.com/images/gif/facepalm/grand/star-trek-picard-facepalm-eccbc87e4b5ce2fe28308fd9f2a7baf3-1381.gif

combined with this.

i3.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/facebook/000/207/234/you-must-be-new-here-willy-wonka.jpg

So, like this.

i.imgur.com/pgNButD.jpg

“Get HER!” Twilight commanded “We can’t let her hurt anyone!”

What a twist, being hunted by ponies. That's never been done before.

But really, I'm not sure how to feel about this. It feels like wish-fufillment, but it has a certain charm to it. You've made a Gary Stu, but I don't hate her. The writing isn't that good, but your grammar is mostly alright.

I'll track it and see where it goes.

Comment posted by PoniPrinceofPleasure deleted Jan 7th, 2015

5467372 The edginess… It's painful…

Comment posted by PoniPrinceofPleasure deleted Jan 7th, 2015

Sup hope u injoy this story

I didn't.

This story completely destroyed pacing, English and originality.
'0/10 would not read again' - IGN
'I'll rekk you m9 i swer on me mum' - Snipars

your grammar and spelling... ITS FUCKING HORRIBLE, how old are you, 8?

5467345 yep first story ever in my life :twilightblush:

Comment posted by TerminatorPON47 deleted Jan 7th, 2015
Comment posted by TerminatorPON47 deleted Jan 7th, 2015

5468459
5468738

Look I know u hate me but at least I tried

This is my first story so can u plz tell me where the Bad grammar is so I can fix it thanks

5467244 I deleted the second chapter cuz it was really bad

5469169 Gotta love that hemhorrhoid vore.

5469249 You realise I was making fake quotes right? Learn what quotation marks are.

Comment posted by TerminatorPON47 deleted Jan 7th, 2015

5468459
5469416 ok so U liked my story because I'm my apinyon my grammar in this story was good and no I'm not 8 :moustache:

5468738 that's funny a 3 year old calling me a 8 year old But ok if u want to call me 8 then so be it

There ten million particules in the universe that we can up serve yo ma ma took the ugly ones And put them into one nerd

Aka 5468738

Comment posted by Mosqueefo deleted Jan 10th, 2015

5471876 You obviously don't understand MLGspeak or regular english. I - did - not - like - this - story. There, is that simple enough? Learn to stop using text speak and use actual proper English. Text speech is for when you are chatting with people, not a fanfiction website.

5471866 It's just to show that he's the alpha male. Tsk, what are you, a degenerate beta? I won the contest fair and square, so Night Fang should be in the story. You wanna know what we call it here in God's very own United States of America when people take away all competition and make it so that the state decides who gets a soccer trophy and who doesn't, boy? COMMUNISM. And on top of that, as an Onionsexual Banana Ogrekin, I take your hurtful and oppressive comments towards sexuality very personally and demand that you immediately cease and desist before I email the JIDF. Shrek your privilege, shitlord.

can u plz tell me where the Bad grammar is so I can fix it

It's everywhere. Hope that helps.

Comment posted by TerminatorPON47 deleted Jan 7th, 2015
Comment posted by TerminatorPON47 deleted Jan 7th, 2015

5472235 look dude if I offended u in any way I'm sorry. I am not ageinst gays, one of my best freinds is a lesbian so I'll will erase all of my mean comments but please don't write inappropriate stuff in the comments and plz don't sue me I only have like 23 bucks :fluttershysad:


EDIT. read comment uptop :applecry:

ps my freind told me Onionsexual Banana Ogrekin means gay.
but if it dose not then sorry for calling u gay :twilightsmile:

5472738 u now what I'll just delete this story cuz I worked hard to make this story :fluttercry: and all I've gotten is hate and threats so I will soon erase this story and stop writing this story and all story's :raritycry:

So good bye that's my last chapter so later gators:fluttershbad: :derpytongue2: I should have not lisend to my freind to become a brony :fluttercry: :flutterrage:

Comment posted by TerminatorPON47 deleted Jan 7th, 2015

5473635 Uh, hey, me again. I'm assuming you aren't a troll for this, and if you are, hats off to you for convincing me otherwise. Anyway, why you've gotten "nothing but hate" is because you've responded why unnecessary hate yourself. I said that I would track it, I kept my word. However, you seem to think that everyone is out to get you. Here's a tip: Get an editor. Maybe then people will stop "harassing", and I use that term lightly, you.

ok dude Im trying to get an editor but I can't find one how or ware do I get an editor????
5467389

5485885 Why, in the Looking for Editors group, of course. All of the rules are detailed on the front page.

OK this is how it works i suck at stories and had to make a totally new account because i was hated so much. My advice is to slow everything down a notch. Like the first couple paragraphs if you add more detail in there and make it a bit longer it can be a chapter all in itself. Also making a OC OP character is a bad idea to do. I mean if you show that he is powerful then you do it slowly not all in one place. Also make it so that the power has a time limit or a weakness.
P.S. I recommend not saying its a OC as well as expanding the description of the story a bit.
P.S.S I will like and follow you on your updates.
P.S.S.S remember to just slow down, The people that read stories on fimfiction love suspense more then anything in the word. Not kidding at all. Blueball them into liking you.

5485943 I had to put the of red blade and the other oc in this story with those powers cuz they were the request of the 2 winners of my YouTube channel challenge

First place got a djpon3 plush
Second place got there oc with 2 powers of there choce in my fic
And third place just gets there OC in my story
So that's y this is an oc story :applejackunsure:

5485943 the challenge ended on the first day of 2015 at 12.00 am

It was for....best mlp animations

Dis I like:pinkiehappy:

But take it a bit slower though

I shall now wait for the next chapter

Comment posted by CreepypastaReader deleted Jan 19th, 2015
Comment posted by TerminatorPON47 deleted Jan 19th, 2015
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