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As the day grew on Croft thought it was a routine mission, get in, get out. Simple right? Wrong, The CAF(Colt Advanced Force) Consisting of six Colts recived the mission of takeing a market in Hayistan, but when an RPG shell finds it's way into blowing the doors off of the Humvee, throwing Croft out, the six Colts are left for dead. The mission after starting only a couple of minutes before was already heading south.

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Not gonna lie, when I saw the cover art thumbnail, thought the red scroll on the flag was his tongue.

You have any ideas please tell what I should fix. :pinkiehappy:

The main thing to fix is your grammar. Read over it again. I like the story idea. I always seem to like these kinds of stories.

If you end the chapter at this point, you might as well write the battle. Now i want to read it!

Ok, you wanna help me on grammer?

Chapter 3 will be up maybe tomarrow, or tuesday/:pinkiehappy:

Sorry, I lost all the drafts and final copies of chapta 3, :applecry::fluttercry::raritydespair: I am rewritting it all, adding subracting, the works. I will post it on may 14-15. Once agian sorry!

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