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since no one commented yet... dafuq and interesting....
Umm.... what did I just read?
Anyway, I must criticize your over-use of dialogue in the first chapter. It was very difficult to read properly, resulting in just skimming it. Other than that, I will not complain.
You really should add some back-story and build-up. Not only does it set the mood, but it helps us get to know the characters which is one of the most important factors in a story, and it is necessary in fanfiction especially when an original character is involved.
You said fingers.... is this a human or pony fic? If human you should specify with the tags.
Wait a tick, I'm confused. Who is the human? The girl or the guy? And why do they both have odd "pony-like" names?
Wait... what?
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(Shameless self-promotion: "Devil's Due")
Lol, semi nice comments and not a thumb up in sight, You could have totally made this about 120% cooler if you put some more detailed action in with all that freakin dialouge. I'll be nice and give it a thumb up if only to show you it wasn't a TOTAL fail, just a pretty epic fail...
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Anthro basically...sorry but im not a fan of Anthro.
I would say something mean but my boner seems to like this.
This.. Is.. Umm... Good?