wow that was a super creepy dream, and ware did that come from? I am thinking along the same lines as Advent link it is masons way of telling his self he can never go back, or is it? only the author knows.
Half way through, i was yelling "WHAT DID YOU DO" so loud at my moniter that i woke my parents and now im grounded for Being on my laptop after my designated bedtime... Thanks alot.
No but seriosly i dont care about that, im just so relieved right now that you didn't just end the story right there! Whew!
Oh gosh, I don't think I'd want to live in the human world again if I got sent back from Equestria. I'm so glad this was only a dream. I was beginning to cry.
WHAT THE EVER LOVING WHAT!!!!! What in Celestias name was that! I was like How in Tartarus did this happen....... Im just glad it turned out to be a dream *wipes hoof across forehead* That was just plain mean to the reader....not to mention Mason.....to do that wout any clue of the possibility of a hint of a warning that that might happen. I can understand Mason not getting a heads up or anything....but it just seems abusive to the reader for none to at least be given to us. He shouldve found something off about the moon or something and just disregarded it....but very near the start of the chapter. I mean to have the first clue that something wasnt right being that name on the locker.....that just seems too far into the chapter for the first clue.
10055158 I disagree. It subtly built up hints of dreamness with the exaggerations of colors; our world is dull compared to Equestria, but not that dull. A gym coach would wonder if he had a medical event, lying on the ground. Vibrant colors of the other students plainly wouldn't happen, and the oscillation between real and fake math symbols was very dreamy. I think it was a good balance that immersed the reader in the mind of the MC, without going over the top. I appreciate the depth of world building.
10192743 Ok I'll give you the focus on the color was odd. However that could be explained as Mason comparing Equestria to Earth. Also the PE teacher acted fine. He called out to Mason and the fact that Mason moved to get up would show that there was no medical emergency. PE was obviously over since they were all headed back inside, and when you take that into consideration it wouldn't be a stretch to assume he was trying to catch his breath bc he was exhausted. Also the thing w the math happened after the thing in the locker room. Which means that the first real clue something was fishy was seeing the name Luna on the locker.
Plus if you look at the first chapter you'll notice that Mason is doing laps for PE. The PE teacher has already gone back in, so they obviously aren't that good or caring of a teacher to begin with. Finally you got how the chapter starts off by describing the scenery as a dull gray morning.
So the point of my original comment still holds. The first REAL indication that something was off was the name Luna on the locker.
An interesting little chapter, perhaps it was closure for any lingering desires to return to Earth? Who knows. (Well, besides you, the author).
wow that was a super creepy dream, and ware did that come from?
I am thinking along the same lines as Advent link it is masons way of telling his self he can never go back, or is it?
only the author knows.
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Just keepin ya on your toes
don't worry I hated high school too
jeez i was so excited there was a new chapter then the excitement turned into a tangible sadness just like that this writer has a gift
Half way through, i was yelling "WHAT DID YOU DO" so loud at my moniter that i woke my parents and now im grounded for
Being on my laptop after my designated bedtime... Thanks alot.
No but seriosly i dont care about that, im just so relieved right now that you didn't just end the story right there! Whew!
Hmm... interesting... seems like he's letting go of his past and getting a vision of his future...
Me Like...
. . . Suddenly a slightly Hispanic voice is heard, whispering, "Have I ever told you the definition of insanity, Mason?"
Omg I truely hoped it's not the ending caz it would've sucked. Awesome story so far.
Oh gosh, I don't think I'd want to live in the human world again if I got sent back from Equestria. I'm so glad this was only a dream. I was beginning to cry.
Had it not been a dream, I bet there is a 99.9999999999999% chance that he'd have committed suicide.
And now he can slap Luna when she meets him.
5764663 and a 00.0000000000001% of seppaku?
That was the most sad chapter yet ,if I was him I would have killed mysalf..
Luna deserves a slap on the face
Walk with me to the edge~
Stare with me into the abyss ~
Do you feel like letting go?
I wonder how far down it is...
That was a cruel test...
WHAT THE EVER LOVING WHAT!!!!! What in Celestias name was that! I was like How in Tartarus did this happen....... Im just glad it turned out to be a dream *wipes hoof across forehead*
That was just plain mean to the reader....not to mention Mason.....to do that wout any clue of the possibility of a hint of a warning that that might happen. I can understand Mason not getting a heads up or anything....but it just seems abusive to the reader for none to at least be given to us. He shouldve found something off about the moon or something and just disregarded it....but very near the start of the chapter. I mean to have the first clue that something wasnt right being that name on the locker.....that just seems too far into the chapter for the first clue.
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If Luna was responsible for THAT dream, she doesn’t deserve slapping—she’d deserve getting plucked!
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I disagree. It subtly built up hints of dreamness with the exaggerations of colors; our world is dull compared to Equestria, but not that dull. A gym coach would wonder if he had a medical event, lying on the ground. Vibrant colors of the other students plainly wouldn't happen, and the oscillation between real and fake math symbols was very dreamy. I think it was a good balance that immersed the reader in the mind of the MC, without going over the top. I appreciate the depth of world building.
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Ok I'll give you the focus on the color was odd. However that could be explained as Mason comparing Equestria to Earth.
Also the PE teacher acted fine. He called out to Mason and the fact that Mason moved to get up would show that there was no medical emergency. PE was obviously over since they were all headed back inside, and when you take that into consideration it wouldn't be a stretch to assume he was trying to catch his breath bc he was exhausted.
Also the thing w the math happened after the thing in the locker room. Which means that the first real clue something was fishy was seeing the name Luna on the locker.
Plus if you look at the first chapter you'll notice that Mason is doing laps for PE. The PE teacher has already gone back in, so they obviously aren't that good or caring of a teacher to begin with. Finally you got how the chapter starts off by describing the scenery as a dull gray morning.
So the point of my original comment still holds. The first REAL indication that something was off was the name Luna on the locker.