5464777 Im sorry, i just dont see it. I guess im short sighted that way.
But then again, your the one with all the likes on your story and im stuck with a lousy 74 on all of my stories combined. Oh well highly enjoyable, hope you enjoy writing as much as your fans enjoy reading what you have to write!
I don't like apple dash, but I have no reason to DISLIKE it either. It's fine with me. It is all in how you show it in the story. I don't see the point in arbitrarily disliking something from the get go. Loved it, onto the next chapter.
You've certainly improved from earlier chapters grammar-wise. Not too sure on the Appledash hints but overall this is one of the better HiEs—definitely better than my own.
Rainbow Dash's mouth came open low near the ground and her mid section began heaving in rapid successions causing her back to arch dramatically. Each upheaval was punctuated by a 'hueeg!' noise while her tail stuck out straight behind her. I had to look away... just like with Skitz. A wet glop and splattering sound replaced Rainbow's heaving noises that made my own stomach turn. I waited a few moments before turning around and avoided looking at the ground in front of her. She stood, eyes half closed with a vacant stare, breathing heavy and fast from her mouth.
I couldn't help but notice the multicolored tail and the tan one brush against each other briefly. Curious...
What's curious ya idjit? Ain't ya already figered out that they're an item?
"Appleja" "Appleja? Yeah?" "Ish.. ma gurl..." "Mkay..." I said helpfully, guiding her past the kitchen table and aiming her towards the great room now. It was slow progress. "Yeah..." she slurred. "Mish her" "Ah... I see... Whoa!"
See? Right there.
"I need a... rainbowjackin..." she giggled drunkenly into the cushions and her tail gave a thwack against the padding under her. What in the heck did she mean by a "rainbowjackin?"
Wait, never mind I guess you didn't figer out what she done gone an' straight up told ya in plain drunkglish.
Wonderful chapter!
An appledash fan I see
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Shhh!
The begining was just wrong... I liked that
I have never been this egear to read another chapter of ... Well anything!
And then you have to go and add this...
I hope this isn't going where i am 99% sure it is going... But thats just me.
Great story, can't wait for another amazing chapter of this story, keep it up!
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Everypony needs a little appledash in their lives
Still amazing, can't wait for more!
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Im sorry, i just dont see it. I guess im short sighted that way.
But then again, your the one with all the likes on your story and im stuck with a lousy 74 on all of my stories combined. Oh well highly enjoyable, hope you enjoy writing as much as your fans enjoy reading what you have to write!
AppleDash no bueno.
Dash x Soarin
Applejack x Caramel
I don't like apple dash, but I have no reason to DISLIKE it either. It's fine with me. It is all in how you show it in the story. I don't see the point in arbitrarily disliking something from the get go. Loved it, onto the next chapter.
Mmmmmm....that Apple-Dash... IDK.
Loving the story so far...we'll see where this goes. AWESOME JOB SO FAR!!!
Did Fluttershy actually show up at the party?
You magnificent bastard.
You've certainly improved from earlier chapters grammar-wise. Not too sure on the Appledash hints but overall this is one of the better HiEs—definitely better than my own.
It was a grey furball.
I want wings...
What's curious ya idjit? Ain't ya already figered out that they're an item?
See? Right there.
Wait, never mind I guess you didn't figer out what she done gone an' straight up told ya in plain drunkglish.
So there's a language for drunks now?
I'm sure The Demo Man from TF2 is fluent in it
I loved this chapter was a awesome,funny ,and sweet read.I'm still hopeing in the future he makes a herd .
Hell, more lesbi siting.
5837530 man the heavy is like need more sandwiches
Oh Applejack, the rooming situation won't be like that, be honest now...
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In all honesty I'm the same way, never been a fan of appledash. Easily my least favourite ship