Element of Hate you say? What a very interesting idea. I was going to hold off my thoughts of this story until I got to the end but I feel as if I need to comment.
Most foalcon that I've read in the past has been...well. To put it simply. A dumpster full of shit rolling down 12 flights of stairs followed by spotanious combustion. Just mindless filly fucking if you will.
But not this. This has some depth to it. It feels more like a story than mindless clop. There are some spots here and there that I have a few questions about ( in my opinion. Most of it is just small details. )
The only other Authors I can think of that write good foalcon are Togashi and darf. And now you have been added to that list
I don't usually read foalcon because of how it is viewed. But I could tell at a first glance that this one was different from the others.
You did an excellent job building up the confrontation with Scoot's dad. Had me on the edge of my seat. Loved Celestia's line too. Needless to say He's in some deep shit now. I think the Canterlot Garden will be getting a new addition very soon for the wildlife to crap on.
Anyways. Carry on good sir! I look forward to reading your other stories.
She crouched, panting from her outburst and her eyes cast about for the next target. The raw, exposed emotion on her face pierced my heart with pang of empathy, it spurred me to move to her quickly. I knelt, wrapping my arms around her neck and pulled her close, trying to absorb her momentum and anger into me... to try and lessen her chaotic emotions by taking some on myself. Scootaloo struggled against me briefly, and then surrendered, wrapping her forelegs around my shoulders.
You know, maybe reading this fanfic wouldn't feel so awkward if we were given some context into how old the CMC are. Because as far as I can tell they're basically the 12 year old's I've see in the show. And that little tidbit kind of puts a damper on the in depth sex scenes i've forced myself to read so far... You know for "science"
The two wound up on the ground in front of me, rolling around, angling for a position on top of the other while continuing the argument. At least once, a loud yell from Apple Bloom declared "TIME OUT... MAH LEG!" and the two would freeze while she adjusted the position of her bound leg in relation to their bodies... and then it would continue just as it left off.
"Girls, girls!! No need to fight, you can both have sex with me!"
This is getting good
Woohoo!
This story is taking a roller-coaster-dive plot twist! I think us readers are in for a bit of a ride!
Wee
next is sweetie bell
Oh....I fear when Adult spot this...they gonna be...so much shock...
Element of Hate you say? What a very interesting idea. I was going to hold off my thoughts of this story until I got to the end but I feel as if I need to comment.
Most foalcon that I've read in the past has been...well. To put it simply. A dumpster full of shit rolling down 12 flights of stairs followed by spotanious combustion. Just mindless filly fucking if you will.
But not this. This has some depth to it. It feels more like a story than mindless clop. There are some spots here and there that I have a few questions about
( in my opinion. Most of it is just small details. )
The only other Authors I can think of that write good foalcon are Togashi and darf. And now you have been added to that list
I don't usually read foalcon because of how it is viewed. But I could tell at a first glance that this one was different from the others.
You did an excellent job building up the confrontation with Scoot's dad. Had me on the edge of my seat. Loved Celestia's line too. Needless to say He's in some deep shit now.
I think the Canterlot Garden will be getting a new addition very soon for the wildlife to crap on.
Anyways. Carry on good sir! I look forward to reading your other stories.
Wow... Just, wow...
Ok, back to trying to finish this... I will make it to "Living"!
Eventually.
The element of hate?
And so began the great troll wars of the 5th celestial era.
Forrest Gump said it best:
5488191 don't forget babs.
Yhat was a sweet read it relly touchs the heart .And it looks like Scoots brother is going to be a huff full of trouble.
Oh shit...
You know, maybe reading this fanfic wouldn't feel so awkward if we were given some context into how old the CMC are. Because as far as I can tell they're basically the 12 year old's I've see in the show. And that little tidbit kind of puts a damper on the in depth sex scenes i've forced myself to read so far... You know for "science"
Harmony will only keep the balance. Something more will be needed to truly settle this...
"Girls, girls!! No need to fight, you can both have sex with me!"
Been just a couple of days with his one lady and starting a herd already. No way that can go wrong.