When Applebloom and Sweetie Belle make yet another joke that Scootaloo is a chicken, she decided that she had enough of it. She told them she would go deep into the everfree forest to retrieve a golden petaled flower, that you can only find in deep in a cave, and if she retrieves it successfully, the two would never make another chicken joke about her ever again. She will have to face off against countless enemies and the unpredictable forces of nature in the everfree forest, but she goes anyways. She soon realizes she got herself way in over her head and has to find a way to get out of the deal before it was too late.
Chapters (2)
Okay, spelling and grammar could use some work. Here's some suggestions in particular for what I saw as recurring problems.
First, you're misspelling cannon. Canon is a word, but it means something different. Here's how it works:
Cannon: This is what you shoot stuff out of.
Canon: This has two meanings. The more common one is to denote material as official. The other is a kind of musical melody.
You're constantly using "canon" in this part when you should be using "cannon."
Another issue is capitalization of names. You frequently write "Apple Bloom" as "Apple bloom" or "Pinkie Pie" as "Pinkie pie." Both parts of their name need to be capitalized (also, sometimes you miswrite Apple Bloom's name as one word). This applies to other things as well; for example, Ponyville isn't capitalized in the first chapter, and Sugar Cube Corner isn't capitalized in this one.
Paragraphs are better in the second chapter than the first. In the first, there's a point where there isn't a blank space between two paragraphs for some reason. Also, speaking of the above capitalization, "Preface" and "Chapter 1" need to be capitalized.
The grammar/spelling isn't terrible, but it could use work. Those are the recurring problems I found and figured I should point out.
As for the story, not really enough has happened yet for me to weigh in on that. But going for better grammar would definitely make it better.
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5343468 Hi! Thanks for commenting. I didn't even notice the cannon thing. Oops I feel like a derp haha. Thanks for telling me and I'll try to make it better for you the next time around. The story hasn't really started yet and I will be getting deeper into the plot in a couple of chapters. I'm slowly getting better at paragraphs and need a bit more experience but this particular story is and will be a learning experience for me so thanks for making it easier to correct everything! :3