I write stuff. Some day I hope to write stuff for a living. In the meantime, enjoy my dumb little universe where 90% of stuff is supposed to be funny.
A small filly finds herself surrounded by darkness, with nopony around. However, things quickly become intense when she hears the sounds of a crying child somewhere in the distance.
When she goes to find it, the situation turns grim.
Rated T for some blood and something which I don't want to spoil.
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Pretty good, has a couple of typos which could easily be fixed. Nice creepy one shot.
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Thanks for the feedback. Sorry about the typos, I wrote all of this in one night.
wow, scary
Pretty awesome. Not lofty, but you nailed it.
I'd say it's pretty darn dark alright. Now, time for you to continue the story.
Thumbs upping, and shelving.
A few issues I ran into while reading:
1. When the filly looked back, the pathway in had disappeared. She was trapped.
2. The fill took extra care to make her way past the vines without hurting herself.
3. “I wish I could do help you, but I don’t see an exit anywhere.”
- Personal opinion: Sounds awkward.
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Thanks for the feedback. I was just trying to see if I could deviate from the usual comedy/romance I do. I may or may not do more of this in the future, but I'll definitely think about it.
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