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After the royal wedding, Equestria seems to have entered a period of relative peace. The threat against the kingdom was declared to be a false alarm. Ponyville's favorite bakery has been selling outrageous amounts of sweets, and Twilight is consumed in her studies, and everything appears to be pointing toward a time of prosperity. One pony, however, begins to suspect that everything is not as it seems.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 3 )

It's not bad, off to a good start, but it would do with better pacing and the chapters maybe being a little longer, it jumps from one scene to the next quite fast

Thanks for the feedback! It's my first fanfic, so I'm happy to get constructive criticism. I haven't spent much time on each chapter so far, but I'll try to make them longer, and not change scene so abruptly. The pace is a bit jarring as it is. :twistnerd:

This story is excellently written I hope to see more of it. :pinkiehappy:

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